War of Worlds. Feat Truth.

“One quiet, dark sky night…
…Turn to a riot, sparked to imply a fight”

Lighting hit, aimed for the army of men
Fright lit, & the game of war began again
Screams of pain, sorrow & tears from war
Thoughts gleam of people slain, hearts tore
What for? A gold ocean with a tint of red
The mold & his devotion, just didn’t blend
In Thrall, this creature is cracking & breaking
Won’t fall, soldiers attacking, his body is aching
The blood soked layer of plains, broken remains
on the tall oak lay fragments of brains, a dark reign
A standing titan wicked and evil this recent upheaval
steeples crushed under the quaking pressure
from the monsterous aggressor pain his pleasure
posseser of the ultimate tresure vengful expertise
a death squeeze amongst the lands on thier knees
the soliders pray for the end of this dismay for a delay
of the decay the end of days world now fades grey

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Truth
DJ...

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omg talk about being slept on uping like an elavator

short but decent piece here, should have really been longer to adequately bring out a stronger View for the drop but other then that this was good

truth- you've seemed to keep elevate'n and now i think its bout time that me and you go head to head in SS lol don't worry i'll go easy but ima battle Pak first hopefully you've got such a way with chosing words to flow together and that's a plus no multis fo real but thas my name so ya kno and some real good imagry there.

dj- nice imagry and emotion seems to be your focus in your drops which are some of the key elements to a good drop im sure you of all people have noticed it also but this was really a good drop just........hella short i'll add you to my list of people in SS lol good drop props

why so short yo. i was just getting into it and the..DONE


had some good imagery and flow. the rhymes i thiought coud of been a bit more adventurous with in a poetic sense .though threy did work out well...wording seemd good for most part............... just a bit too short for an OM collab tho i reckon.not that you have to go too long. but ya nah mean...


coll lil joint still


pz

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Dope collabo from the both of u...damn good in making the imagery reflect through the words...very nice vocab used and wordplay play, the structure wasn't fucked up which made it easy to follow...dopeness...good shit

Definately a good piece. The shortness was a thorn off the rose but the Imagery and how dope it was made up for it. The vocab was good and Multies kept the piece flowing along....I liked how the picture and piece corresponded, elaborate picture by the way. Neither one of the verses seemed to stand out to be better than the other one, they both seemed on the same level more or less. The flow was okay though it seemed more poetic-ish I still found it to be an enjoyable piece.

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Thanks for the feed

would you guys be offended if I said the picture was the coolest thing? No offense to the piece, but that picture is fuckin' rad. If I had ever seen that as a SS topic I would have picked it, (but then again - whatever I think has the most pop appeal I never choose for fear of being labeled uncreative =D). Nice job on the piece, though, again I'll reiterate like everyone else that is pretty damn short to make any relevant point, I'm surprised about that since it was a collab you guys only could muster like 10 lines each for eachother. LoL. But it flowed well and was a pretty cool interpretation of the picture. Imaginative and well worded, I liked the first part a little better than the second part, to pat one of you on the back a little harder...

Anyways, the picture stole the show. Hit me up in my sig when you can. Thanks guys. See u in SS.

Well, this piece definitely had great potential if nothing else. I wish It was a little longer and somewhat more direct, however, for what it was - it was good. A lot of eloquent wording poured over a heap of crafty rhymes. Nothing spectacular - but nothing to diss. Definitely top quality technique, just needs a little more elaboration to fill in the spaces. All in all nice job from the both.

Keep ‘em coming fellas

pz

I'll hit all links tonight.

word at that me 2

the imagery was nice but some shit seemed forced lol i don't know who wrote each verse but yead you both had a steady nice ryme schemem and it flowed well to me first verse had a more poetic feel but i liked the piece overall just alittle short tho

nice shit @ both...

dj...your part if you were first...really brought the emotion to the piece..which I have come to see is the best part of your writing..beside's youre consistant syllable count..you're wording is coming along as well still not where I think you should be by now but I see you getting better...

truth...you did the best job here in my opinion..but that doesn't matter cause it was a collab...I thought you brought the better vocab and had the most imagery due to your discriptive wording..the topic was koo...I felt you added that build up effect something like a Baron possibly...seems like you've been taking notes from someone...overall this was a nice drop and a good read...

Keep it up...and RTF...

thanks forum

Flowed evenly inbetween the both of you...Good vocab, nice and short story but even though it was short, it still delievered a good read...Idk what else to say about the piece tho...Good imagery, everything was on point basically...good job by both you of guys

This had some potential to be really good. As you know it was a little short. But i think from what was there it was pretty good. You both meshed well. It was well wored and flowed pretty nicely.

word thanks

yup yup.

short yet sweet in here you own vocabulary and point of interest stood out and pointed out nicely what your direction was and your own motivation was in this piece was just a nice collab...both meshed well together and both complimented on each other ya know...the contetn was iight and the emotino waswell was on point...nice drop here guys keep it up.


sorry for short feed.
RTF
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