Walking Before God, In The Devils Footsteps

Walking Before God In The Devils Footprints

"The doing evil to avoid an evil cannot be good."
-Coleridge

Doing Wrong For All The Right Reasons:
He was born a spawn of the light, avoiding his fall to darkness
Tormenting the pawns of heartless, an scorching all un-charted
Voicings wrongs through targets, a purpose vanquishing sins
Somewhere he thinks an begins, for days that's safe in the end
He's using strength to defend, for this hellish army is vast
Rebellous parties would clash, him jealous, hardly will last
He'll sell'em out if he has, thoughts seem to be favoring satan
He dreams ways to be tainted, schemes, to slay what he's think'n
Breathes pains in the aching, spilt blood soils the atmosphere
Plunged, spoiled n' rotten here, floods royal n' locked in tears
Mess broiled in pots of fear, conclusions knowing no cost
Delusions roaming across, including disowning the cross
He'll do it, avoiding a loss, strike a life in the hate he would
Then sacrafice many to show a strive for the greater good

Heavens Angel Within A Hellish Body:
Golden armor stained with blood, a weapon of mass destruction
Each second he slash contruction, he'll step on a class of justice
Wreckoned, his mask adjusted, appearance vaguely discribed
His spirit faced to combined, no fear but hate in his eyes
The tears he faced was a tide, surface surrounded by enimies
Progression potential energy, aggression suspended endlessly
Wing span length the horizon, his pressence eclisped the sun
Nightfall during the day, essenced of hell expelled from lungs
Attempts to mirror his opponent, would surely lead to his demise
To think is one thing but acting...could bleed the souls of cries
Seeds from vulgar lies, spends most of his time on assumptions
How do you fight like one, and not be one, and get nothing accomplished?

Angel
"I'll fight like him if i have to, but i've become something else, and still
can not over power this being......myself"

"He who will fight the devil with his own weapons,
must not wonder if he finds him an over-match."

-South.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=317223
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=317358

Well let me be the first to say dope the strcuture and build were on point as usaul, i liked the rhyme scheme you used it was different and i liked it you also used multis in this it enhanced it i liked the qoute this altogether as very original very nice great quality piece i can't wait till thew day we collab on One malice great drop

If you have time

Hit this up

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=317377

Oh yeah i wanna nominate this For HOF

Kinda a short read, But still good none of the less. You've been elevating alot fam. Strucuture was good wich helped the flow, And nice multis usage. Topica is kinda played tho only really bad thing I can say about this, Likin ya vocab too son. Nice drop.

He'll do it, avoiding a loss, strike a life in the hate he would
Then sacrafice many to show a strive for the greater good

^^Nice

Wing span length the horizon, his pressence eclisped the sun
Nightfall during the day, essenced of hell expelled from lungs

Good imagery.

Keep up the work fam, Get at me sometime for a collab. - Peace Easy.

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uppin.

Dope. Fav. Bars have already been quoted. Kept pretty consistant throughout the whole thing, good imagery, nice Vocab.
Internals/Multi's and meta's were good.

Meh, what the hell...

Quote:

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He's using strength to defend, for this hellish army is vast
Rebellous parties would clash, him jealous, hardly will last
He'll sell'em out if he has, thoughts seem to be favoring satan
He dreams ways to be tainted, schemes, to slay what he's think'n

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^That was some good ish too man. Keep up the good work.

thanx for the feed i'll rtf for those who drop feed

I like everything about this, except for the format. The way the piece was structured with the camas breaking the center of every line really distracted me, and took away from the fluency of the piece. It sucked, because contectually the piece was pretty on point, but the flow really undermined your fundimentals and left the meat of the piece kind of flowndering. So, overall it was a dope piece, however, I think it would have been times greater if you used a more cohesive rhyme scheme.

If you could,
Hollywood ft. Darfur

thanx for the feed and i've returned favors to those who left links

Dude, We need to collab. What ya say?

Topic: Devil's Memories
Lines: 20-30
Due: Next hour or two.


as for this peice: Perfect, truely you're best peice yet. The Wording was magnificent. The Flow was very nice and activly smooth. The Structre was nice and basic. The Creativty was amazing. The Imagenation let out a cry; bringing a movi to life. I loved this peice, and will nomionate it for HoF. Keep writing, halla with an answer for the Collab.

~Bell.

PS: Hit up my PS peice caleld Eye C U please.

yep, this was definitely a very good read, it was enjoyable and it had all the factors that make a quality OM. I loved your story line, it was different, you went for a fresh approach and brought a lot to the table along eith it. You had a dope flow which didn't really fall off drastically at any point, which made the peice very fluent and easy to read. i agree that your rhyme scheme was very simple, and definitely not universal enough for this peice, it could have been sooooooooo much better with a more comples rhyme scheme, you had the multies, you had the imagery, and you had basically everything esle too, dope peice my man.

Hit up 'Angels And Demons'

thanx for the feed continue if you can and i'll rtfs shortly

nice this was mos def a nice read, let me just get
the bullshit out the way i liked all your writing
mechanics so thats a given, what id like to speak
on is the message, which for me was fucking deep
i was like at the start of the piece when i saw the
two wrongs dont make a right quote which ive
never really made any sense myself, as it seems
to be the warcry of the person who did the first
wrong, so i was like i know were this script is
going , but to my pleasent surprise you put
the twist in the shit the devils side was like
yerr normal ruthless behaviour, and i was
sure i knew what was going to be in the next
verse naamely the opposite, happy i was wrong
as his realisation that the only way he can win is
to fight fire with fire, but ultimately due to his
own beleif systems he will lose either way
well thats what i got from this piece fam...
thanx for the read,woudnt mind knowing your take
keep rippin those scriptz RTF hit the link...peace

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wow....thas has to be the most grateful feed i've recieve in a long time

nice tile./my kinda ish f;sho...


flow=......nice to me............
content=...... nice.
vocab=.nice f'sho.
structure = same as above.....ha


not to drone pn on this is sum nice ish...<1


rhymes dropped off of shape a coupkle of times and didtn rhyme too well in my lingo you know lo..but all in all ish was crafted well andf had plenty of poeticc quality about it that i liked and was entetrtained by.....1q<


just keep elevating on the lingo/vocab.thus elevating on the rhyme capacirty and leading to a never ending rhyme volocity......... high level materail don dadda buisiness senn


pz1


vor for ever

i don't think i've ever been more confused before in my life lmao but it sounded good no doubt work on vocab and all that no prob

lol.

ups.