Kamikaze Agenda. F/ Xtreme Malice

Kamikaze Agenda
1st Verse = Es.Choir
2nd Verse = Xtreme Malice

Thoughts running through my mind, i'm simply running out of time.
I have a simple choice to make, the question at hand, to live or die?
I would lay my life down, in honor, as a civil service to my country.
Question is, is it worth it, am I living for naught, or dying for something.
I could be the luckiest man alive, but the least thought of after death.
Maybe I shouldn't think too hard right now.....................................
...........*stands up, stretches, gets in a car and takes a deep breath.*
This is why they trained me, I always knew this day would soon come.
Where I must say goodbye to my life, my wife, daughter and both sons.
Look what I've become, I'm a mess, I'd hate for any of them to see me.
But even worse than that, to follow my footsteps, to imitate or be me..
Although my decision is made, they've paved the way, my path to follow.
This isn't so easy to bite down, chew up, spit out or force myself swallow.
My emotions? nothing to talk about, they've been out of control on end.
Tell me yours wouldn't be, if you'd known that death was around the bend.
So this message I send, to family friends, and whoever else might listen.
*looks down at the camera, and sees the battery low*........................
.............G.uess I'd better hurry it up, almost the end of the transmission.
I love you, and for what it's worth I'm sorry, that I couldn't see you grow.
I believe what I'm doing is for the best, for your future, just so you'd know.
Ha, well this is it, looks like it's time for me to go....................................
...*drops the camera, in time to hear a car, ram a building and then explode*

Decisions were brought, attention, such conspiciuos thoughts
Throughout slight conversations, felt imprisonment sparked
contigious when fought, tormented when provisions saught
Mind driven and lost, incisions were invisioned in dark
Replenish the lost, refused, no longer holding her fluids
she openly ruined, given a choice and chose to pursue it
Emotionally wounded, she spoke and drifted, focus on movements
But was crazy to join a gang another nut to get screwed in
Now must suffer the consequence, though its tougher to non-exist
Stubborn at prime expense, but more dumber to hide suspense
Studder'n bout the diffs, not wonder'n bout the ifs
She's fluttering out a gift, being mutter'd around da shifts
Shit, fuck it, its not a risk, asprins taken with alcohol
Drugs laced in it, methatane, should've faced it with tylenol
Hush, opium. heroin, figures she's worried not at all
Til she's buried to N' doubt, throws fits flurries N' of da wall
Twitch hurry N' out she'll pause, force applied from the pressure
No supplies for the measure, sea in the eyes of confessers
She's confined with da lessers, seek suicide for Vanessa
No affording abortions, til what she found in the dresser

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hot shit here yall. i liked the way Es.Choir's came straight up with an interesting concept while Xtreme Malice kept the read complex yet still impelling. i liked the macabre and grim setting. makes it deep and thoughtfull.

Look what I've become, I'm a mess, I'd hate for any of them to see me.
But even worse than that, to follow my footsteps, to imitate or be me..

^i liked that line.


keep it up yall. good read. 8/10

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This was a vbery very good read. There were falws i can say and manyof them were scattered here and there but i prefer talking about the positives of this piece. I personally liked it. The 1st person & then the narrative point of view worked pretty well. IEs. Choir i liked how you rhymed ni your verse, the flow did stutter at points but was overall pretty aight. I liked the ending and your verse had many audio style quotables. Malice your verse was much more complex on the vocabulary side, interesting but harder to grasp. I liked how you thought about your topic and presented it and the way you rhymed the drugs and the continous word rhyming was done very well. Overall, a good colabboration, enjoyagble and an easy read..WEll done & Stay up.

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Very nice peice, The wordpla and Flow wa great and made this peice a great read. The creativty was nice and the imagenary was wonderful. Personaly I think that Malice had a better verse but both still did very good. I read this twice before leaving feed.

Es - 8-10
Malice - 9-10

Keep writing both of you.

i don't think i have 400 posts yet so i couldn't hit your battle up.

anyway... this was a good read.. es.choir, ur verse was smooth, flow was smooth most of the time, it just fell off at a few places... lyrical content was good, the only thing u need to step up is ur use of multies... coz it can really improve your flow.

xtreme... good read as well.. lol over here, u used TOO many multies.. i felt like it took away an essential part from the verse, which is how everything connects, coz i got lost with some of those multies for a minute, but whatever, its cool... lyrical content was great... flow was tight for most of the time...

overall this was a good read.

peace

this was very enjoyable from both perspectives, Es.Choir started his mood off with deep thought and somewhat depression which sparked the whole storyline of his verse, u stuck to what you were saying....approached the topic very well, the imagery was alive in many aspects of ya story, i could actually invision a dude sittin in the car awaiting the reality to take its course.........Malice's mood was more depressin, no doubt the imagery was alive due to the good usage of vocab, excellent flow and wordplay, though the situations were different the messages weren't vague, they were both powerful and filled wit substance.........8/10

keep it up..

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this was a good read man. real delicate with vision but real deep in emotion and detailed vocab and multies both came wlel props to both of you.

Thoughts running through my mind, i'm simply running out of time.
I have a simple choice to make, the question at hand, to live or die?
I would lay my life down, in honor, as a civil service to my country.
Question is, is it worth it, am I living for naught, or dying for something.
I could be the luckiest man alive, but the least thought of after death.
Maybe I shouldn't think too hard right now.....................................
...........*stands up, stretches, gets in a car and takes a deep breath.*
^^
ES.CHOIR= you had a nice flow and your vocab was nice. emotion was good and your overall writing meshed well together and was nicely done!


But was crazy to join a gang another nut to get screwed in
Now must suffer the consequence, though its tougher to non-exist
Stubborn at prime expense, but more dumber to hide suspense
Studder'n bout the diffs, not wonder'n bout the ifs
She's fluttering out a gift, being mutter'd around da shifts
Shit, fuck it, its not a risk, asprins taken with alcohol
Drugs laced in it, methatane, should've faced it with tylenol
Hush, opium. heroin, figures she's worried not at all
Til she's buried to N' doubt, throws fits flurries N' of da wall
Twitch hurry N' out she'll pause, force applied from the pressure
No supplies for the measure, sea in the eyes of confessers
She's confined with da lessers, seek suicide for Vanessa
No affording abortions, til what she found in the dresser
^^
MALICE= your went awesome aswell in this piece and as usual. prime interest as the emotion and the multies that were used man i liked how your vision went off and grabbed the crowd and shit man!....nicely doen


overall nice read....no really obvious flaws but some chinks in the chain but overall nice read!

Thanx people your feed is appreciated...continue if possible

good piece yall should keep it up

Thanx for the amazing feed..:bored:

*walks in singing gulla gulla island*

Thanks to everyone who has left feed, and links.
They've been hit, and I can tap more potential. :2thumb:

Anymore feedback is greatly appreciated. :)

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es-your verse was really dope man i liked it...tho i there were a few flaws that couldve been worked on...first your flow was very good but off in some bars try to work on that...you had good multies but they couldve been alot more better if u looked over it....strutre was nice there werent any major stretched lines so i didnt mind to keep reading on....you kept on topic very nice i liked how your verse fit in with xm easy...
xm-your verse was dope as fuck..you kept with the flow for the whole time and didnt fall at many points...multies were off the hook i cant believe how u kept those goiin how you did...strutre was very nice it fit in perfect for the whole drop which made me want to keep reading...very good job staying on topic i must say i was impressed.
if u guys could find the time...would u mind hitting up a drop of mine..thanks

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Damn,good collabo. It`s a breath of fresh air,considerin that most people rhyme about the same old gangsta shit.

appreciate your thuggish feed

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it actually makes sense

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