Starve for the Camera, Please. (Feat. Passive)

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It starts as a whisper in the
back of the mind …

… gnawing …

Photo shot whisper plots
evil hymns were perched for eons
yet putting work in like peons
nerves pinch with patience
a steady ache cramps mind
silence creeps grasping cleverness
stabbing the right side of head
trying to allude as it gets worse
yet feasting, such a beast
it's rage starts.....

Eating away, plaguing the
thoughts slowly until you
do not know what is real
and what isn’t, setting in …

… paranoia …

hence mind aching, directions lost
scrambled, hand covers skull
whisper of sadistic winds a tone
of soft words yet the subliminal hurts
subconscious broken conscious hurting
eyes filled with vines of lines
from voices bleeding words
inside a mine. I yell for peace
just added pure anger to fire
where you come from?

It's voice grows louder,
berating you until no more
can be withstood. Hair pulling
hatred and loathing, self seething
anger rips through the flesh
until death is longed for.

Suicide …

… it calls from the depths of
darkness.

Wicked pits terrible mist
fills the circumference of head
Banging thoughts against walls
frustrated of when words came
forth. Kkiill your s e l f.
end li fe rekindles every time.
Voices stabbed through cortex
from past.

You are called childish by family,
for they do not understand for the
voice isn’t always in your head.
That voice is the man who married
you and he keeps his volleys of
putridness falling upon your ears
until the voices in your head are
shouting at one another.

Make them shut up!

Regretful hymen haunts me,
foul and gruesome shall diminish
caste away for if not I'm finished.
An anchor shackled around ankles
leaving spirit down. What can I do?
echoes throughout my ears.
Battering me is a voice of torture
voice of waves beating against a shore
a voice of needles poking
eating my flesh away.

Perhaps the only way to end it all,
is for you to perish into darkness.
Then there will be blessed silence.
I thought he loved you, he married
you after all. Does he know what
love is?

I am nothing … I am feeble.
… stupid …
… freak.

I am unstable, deserving of nothing!
This pain is my punishment for the
troubles I create. I deserve death.

Yes crown myself with bars,
bars of entrapment is the way to
arouse your skin, I'm a masochist.
Incompetent being, I am worthless
widow not worthy of a womb.
Self pity for weak individuals.
Hatred rules inside
clinging from a precipice my life,
voice from a pit yells jump and
watch my body fall as a leaf.

Make them stop please! Years
of voices compiling upon one
another until one day I fear I
just may snap.

The laughter is over … none of
this is funny any more. Please,
just leave me alone. Let me be
me, I’m not a fucking light switch!

Vivid images flickering
six sense won't stop.
It just wont stop, long as
an abyss. I yearn pavements harsh
end. Please stoop! my hair
is yanked with anger from skin.
Just stop my heart is pummeled.
Gasping for air sweat drenches feet
I weep, I'm tired, I hate what dwells
inside. Inside of me I hate.

I hate what I am, I hate myself.
I used to love myself, that wasn’t too
long ago but the voices are coming
back and are taking over. Too much
pain, too much anger, too much hate.

I am a shadow now …

I need out of here …
… I must be free of these bonds …

… death is freedom.

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lil basic.... the flow was str8 but kind of of basic fams. also the structure . bbut in this piece you had some okay vocabulary. but the the topic was intresting, and very creativity. also this had some very good imagry. peep the OM in the sig

Basic. K kid, move on.

They need to open an Open Mic for
vets or something because this sleeping
and noob stuff is getting on my last nerves.

i agree about the sleeping and shit, its fucked up these days... anyways, when i glanced this, i thought damn a long ass read, lol, but it wasnt really, just set out a abit different, so... i thought you managed to hold on to the plot nicely, it didnt seem to just jump in, then fade off towards the end like alot seem to do that i read, it kept me reading... thought your style was crazy, very poetic and quite abstract in the delivery...

its not really my style, but hey! i like reading something different it keeps the boredom away, i get sick of all the standard style shit, well apart from mine :)

so yea interesting read, good job

Sorry guys, I'm sorry this has been slept on. Excellent piece.

You know the some general problems of collaborations is that the two people who write it aren't communicating, or one of the two people who right it either fail to bring the point across or even outdo their partner. This piece was excellent becuase you guys actually laid the impression that you were communicating, ALOT becuase this piece fit together perfectly, and I loved it. Your vocabulary was flawless. You guys were so relevant to the piece, and that's the making of not only a great write, but a great read.

Some of my favorite lines were:

"That voice is the man who married
you and he keeps his volleys of
putridness falling upon your ears
until the voices in your head are
shouting at one another. "

These lines had awesome imagery and metaphors. And Illus, some great lines from you were:

"Yes crown myself with bars,
bars of entrapment is the way to
arouse your skin, I'm a masochist."

Awesome. This was very clever. In the end, none of you outdid each other, and that's why this was truly a great piece. Oh! Did I mention the concept? I normally think of people "Smiling for the camera" but you played the concept originally and nicely.

Overall, nice collab on this piece. I would really like to see more from you two.

I really liked this peice. I liked the wordplay and the structre. The flow and story was great. Metaphores were wonderfull. I cant wait to see fuure peices from the two of you. 10-10

thanks bro.

good peice....i liked the emotion and imagery throughout

good flow....interesting topic.......vocab was descent.....

rhymes were good and overall this was a good peice...

Appreciate the feed for those
that gave breakdown thanks.

Ok I thought this was very clever from both and a real original piece.The title of the actual piece caught my eye firstly,which was very clever and from there on the piece was very good.Some bits were slightly off but most of it was very good.Both of you gave nice imagery and good creativity.I thought your creativity was at a high standard here.

Vivid images flickering
six sense won't stop.
It just wont stop, long as
an abyss. I yearn pavements harsh
end. Please stoop! my hair
is yanked with anger from skin.
Just stop my heart is pummeled.
Gasping for air sweat drenches feet
I weep, I'm tired, I hate what dwells
inside. Inside of me I hate.

^This was my favourite verse in the piece.Really nice wording in it and the complexity added more to it.

All in all a very good piece and I will look out for more that you guys will be releasing.

Thanks bro...

can we get some more?

*dead* @ everyone quoting all your^ shit. Its all good though..

Open Mic is washed up.

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Originally Posted by Passive.

*dead* @ everyone quoting all your^ shit. Its all good though..

Open Mic is washed up.

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Chill out. If I were to quote, it would be his shit also only because it seemed that the collaboration was intentionally written that way. Illus provided us with the imaginative, figurative, coherently, yet metaphorically literal meaning of your concept and you gave us the straight forward, raw, emotion of the concept, which all in all, made this piece a good piece. Passive was the feeling and Illus was the image. I like how they corresponded so well throughout the piece making it more vivid, yet vivacious. This was well-written. Very abstract because I couldn't find the flow to save my life, but this was good. I liked the anger, suicidal, resentment, and hatred aspects of this too. Good shit.

Damn thanks .Nique. yeah chill out Passive lol..


Hells yeah I am uppin this we should have gotten
OM of the month of June. wussies-

wohoo ehhh sure......

*Nominates

Another one. Deep and it was nice I like how Passive came with the deep shit and illus came ith the complexity of the verse and the OM. But I didnt like the topic or feel you stayed with it. It was still A nice peice great work.