Hate Is Such A Strong Word.

Hatred is such a strong word to use against those who are disliked
Wondering were the word ‘hate’ came from and were it derived
Hating on people, hating on personalities doesn’t do justice
Who ever uses the word hate towards another person shouldn’t be trusted
Hating on someone doesn’t mean you hate them just means you dislike them
All those who use hate are not in full knowledge of the meaning,only hate will stem
Hating without reason adds to the problem of hate, using it wisely is the key
Whether its for unseen reasons or well known feuds no body can be labelled ‘hated’ its easy to see
People use the word as if its money, but in fact it’s the line between life and death
Using ‘dislike’ or ‘don’t like’ sounds better then hearing the word ‘hate’ it doesn’t contest
Remembering if you ever used hate as a reason to not get on with any person
Did you ever make them feel bad? And you feel good? What a strange disillusion
Being the object of hate does not play into the hands of the hater
Only proves fatal for the hated when everything gets bad later
Hate contemplates anger witch leads to unsavoury acts that shall be frowned upon
People shall not openly discuss who they hate but only talked about by only one
If hate occurs then the hater should take it to the hated if only this rule complied
Hatred is such a strong word to use against those who are disliked.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...15#post4585115
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=285358

uppin

ffs leave feed on this please

Not A Bad Peice.. The Rhymeskeem Could Be Worked On. But Other Than That Everything Was Good, The Flow & Structure Was OK, Along With The Vocab. Good Peice!

this was an alright piece. your flow and wordplay could've been elevated but your structure was nice. you chose a good topic, which i coul've thought of it lol. anyway, good job and keep writing. holla!

thanx uppin

This was an overall good piece. the flow was pretty consistent, but u cud have done a better job wit it. i seen pretty decent use of vocab in this also. but wat really like thru ur piece off was that, u didnt have dat much good use of imagery. it was sumwat leadin to it then thrown off . so work on that an it wud be a better piece. an also i liked the topic which was choosen for this also.

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i liked the topic it was pretty interesting.
flow was on point but the lines seemed stretched
vocab was ok....rhymes were good.....could be better
overall i liked this..keep it up...peace~

ok, nice topic but I think it got a little too repetative, I know that was the general idea, to express the meaning behing the word hate - which in itself is a pretty harsh sounding word, with the sharp 'h' 'a' and 't' sounds (don't ask I study english language we are meant to analyse this sort of thing)- you had a nice idea but I think your vocabulary could have been a little more elevated and you could have kept those stretched lines to a minimum. I liked the fact that the first and ultimate lines were the same, stressing that 'hate' is really just a word that is used out of context, you almost portrayed it as offensive, racial even..i dunno how to explain..anyway, nice little idea, keep writing.

thanx for feed i got another om but im waitin for more feed that i can build on and improve so i not gunna post it yet

leave feed on my first om .
much appreciated.
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=294746

Just fix up your structure and youd be good. You need to up the technical aspect with a few more internals in your piece. Other than that content was pretty good. Some of your rhyme was off, with so little rhyming you need strong rhymesceme in my opinion. Make your pieces longer to flesh out your ideas, dont make your lines longer. Grow vertically not horizontally like in real life.

RTF Please:


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=294859

content was blah. the topic could've been pulled off in a much more interesting way than simply listening things you feel about hate. put it into a story form or something, tell a story and have the moral be that hate is a strong word. SOMETHING like that. as it is you came off repetitive by the second line. You have to be creative when writing these things. Also, internal rhyme would be good but MAKE SENSE within the context of your piece.

The word 'Hate' and 'Hatred' were used to much. Some parts of the structure were to streched out, but still not hard to follow. You expressed alot on this one subject with good creativity...Personally I think it was very good, I wanna read your next OM. Peace.

it was aiight peice i liked it it was interesting topic and interesting to read ,.........

This was an overall good piece. the flow was pretty consistent, but u cud have done a better job wit it. The word 'Hate' and 'Hatred' were used to much. You have to be creative when writing these things. Try putting some internals init and issh nah mean,
also you need to fix that struture holmes. anyway this was a nice idea never the less

what cud i have dun better with it?

and what are internals eh?

LOL. I had to find out what was the rush about this piece, and finally I did. It was a little more than average, but still kind of boring, you know? The concept was original, and I've never seen someone take on this kind of persona, except when people try to make poems out of cliches. Your vocabulary was kind of average, and your structure stayed consistent MOST of the time. Some of the lines seemed lengthy and crammed, yet it was still an okay drop.

Please see "Flipside" in Poetic Scriptures puhleese.
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=296656

uppin

I Njoi'd it.I'm personally a fan of repetitive words in OM & other ways of gettin yourself heard. This was good to me. The subject was approached n met. Wordplay was nice.Rhyme scheme was different. Flow was steady. The visual of hate is what I liked most of all.
Overall to me personally this was Good.

It was a decent piece, nothing too specail in my eyes but it was still enjoyable... the rhymescheme didnt really work for me... that along with a bit of a choppy flow and the topic, it almost made it seem more of a poem that you'd read in a kindergarden class teaching the little kids not to hate eachother. the piece had a great message 2 it tho and i could tell that it was of great importance the structure would have been good but i am not a fan of that font type and size, but so many people on this site do it so what ever im sick of complaining about it. the flow like i said was a little choppy, almost nursery rhymish, but the vocab and imagry was amazing and well put together... the rhymes could have used a little work and this piece was seriously lacking multis...

this was an okay piece but my advice to you is pick a better topic with more you can work with because i can tell this isnt your full potential... keep it up and ima keep watching. hit up the OM in my sig In The Candle Light

P.S You=Rational.?

thanx and i used that font size cz its the smallest and it made the lines not 1 line so the structure was off if u no what i mean

andn i am rational y?

dont remember me? its ta2 man. Remember u and me owned born legends, i jus brought that shit back now

o ye lol i had a lot things on ma mind recently but ye g/l wid the crew now make it dope again

more feed please

topic was pretty interesting and i liked it kept along all way thorugh...
flow was good but you gotta watch those stretched lines homie...
vocab was dope i thought...rhymes were good also overall decent keep it up.....

ok let this die so i can post up ma next 1 i have dun thanx for all the feed much appreciated

I like the topic and the word structure. But I agree, the word hatred and hate was used a lot. Still, a very nice piece. I'd really like to read more from you.

This was a nice piece.

The word hate/hatred was used too much like the others who replied said

But homs this overall was a dope piece for me. Your vocab for me was up to standard you had a nice and steady flow. The thing i loved about this piece was the topic and the vocab.

Your vocab:
You used a wide variety of words, which was held up by a good flow and emotion

Your Topic:
Was real coz there are alot of people out there who do hate and dont understand. This was a good drop homs, keep it up.

And if you wanna collab anytime, me an u shud do summit. piece

i sed b4 to let this die so i can post ma next 1 up but since u have upped it i cant so u cant see ma new work untill this dies

this was a nice piece and it definently had a point... hate is a powerful word and people rarely use it correctly saying i "hate" you/something is iligitimate and using it substantially is what is often deprived from the word or phrase i hate something is the actual meaning... so good thought was put into this piece and though the lines were stretched structure is not what contributes to this piece... i guess there was sort of an educated emotion to this piece either way though i was feeling it ... vocab was str8 but u didnt really need it and u didnt stretch or make it un-comprehendable for most... BUT GOOD JOB and RTF on my om Strung out in my sig

I think the topic and attemp were good..Yet you could have played on different aspects of hatred....In most instances you were to repetitive ....and it started to read like a bunch of blah,blah, blah...not saying that you werent consistant in thought just didn't go that extra mile and get those hard facts of hate that are just mingling around awaiting to be processed through the mind ...This piece was every bit of a good attempt on a nice topic yet played a little bit wrong though...Yet Nice Try and keep at it elevation is the key ..