20-30 lines.
due wednesday, 12 midnight.
topic: Lords Love, Satans Neglect.
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20-30 lines.
due wednesday, 12 midnight.
topic: Lords Love, Satans Neglect.
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Written in thought of Virgin Mary…..
Lord Love……
Settling down, as “day by night” she lay to watch as kids “mature to sin,”
Watch as, “young girls” “arise from there backs,” to be attached to what’s’ “within,”
4ever some “kin,” to “adult life” at a young age to “lose out in fun N’ games”
She’d sit without complaint, “faithful” and relaxed’ not expecting to “bare” a “virgin seed” without a “fathers’ name,”
In “being human,” or loss of “DNA” in which a male contained, or feel physical pain,
…………………………………………………….
“Never appraised as high…She was just faithful, and in turn “loved” because she was trustworthy….
“Marriage” was here “goal,” as she believed in “god” in essences to be “chosen worthy”
Clear “through the stain,” as “dampness” might have occurred,
……………….The boys may have wanted a “drink in her pond,” but they remained “thirsty”
………………………………………..
Conclusion….
“Virgin Mary” wasn’t lucky…Naw; she was “loved” for love she gave from the “warmth of her heart”
“Hers eyes saw many road,” “shortcuts” but she stayed “right” from the start…
Now “finish,” as she is “calmed” by the “lustful stars” of heaven,
“birthing” a “savior,” “Loving hoes” and “thefts” to “death,” “without question”
……..or “hesitation,”
……………………
To me, “Lords love,” is me “sleeping under the stars” to “arise to still breath,”
………………………………or as I am on my “Knees to grieve”
as a kiss of “moist” lips kiss my cheeks, in remembrance of the “Lords leave”
Mumbling to myself, “Jesus please, forsake me for my sins’, and take me for I “believe”
“shake my hand,” “cleanse my skin, of “dead, and lost friends”
“Loved ones” or “foes of pretend,” because now I can “see,” as “hate is blindness” that has “no end”
So “enemies are friends,” like “the lord for loved satin as one” even through the bad”
The misers, the “heart breaks” of “life,” the “apples deceased seeds” and still “love remaining sad”
“How sad…? “Crushed!…. that even after this he “cared to birth a son” as savior, that’s “love
So I smile,…….i’m happy, to no I am “Loved, even if I don’t visit the “wonderful man above..
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The Lord Loves, Satan Neglects
Suicidal success? Or failure, either or.. Something happens
As gates welcome the soul.. Hell ignoring the absence
Human life evolved, no ones fault.. As mentioned, the feud-less
The past creator of earth, but stay the presence of cupid
Agony, say thy Satan, as there be no love he will make
But makes sure there be no feel of love, without hate
To dislike is no mistake, but the meaning is twirled
Into bias, discrimination.. To a point theres no peace in this world
Everything happens for reasons.. Good or not.. They make moods
And Satan’s neglect is what makes evil stay true..
Almighty charms.. Expressing warmth, and hold within arms
As almighty death has it so pain, is just the very start
Heavens light gives a tan, but not with one word
On WHY Satan hates enjoyment, giving thee sun-burn
Forbidden fruit or not, don’t let Eve’s garden fool
As Satan beholds something as simple as a farmers tool
His marks are cruel, simply leaving you to die
As lord will take the soul, but leave life in disguise
Leaving bright in their eyes.. Allowing hope to never be lost
But the cursed Satan.. Not even allowing hope to be crossed
All in all, there opposites.. And hope there is no tainting left
In the end, the moral is.. The Lord loves, Satan Neglects
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Written in thought of Virgin Mary…..
Lord Love… …
Settling down, as “day by night” she lay to watch as kids “mature to sin,”
Watch as, “young girls” “arise from there backs,” to be attached to what’s’ “within,”
4ever some “kin,” to “adult life” at a young age to “lose out in fun N’ games”
She’d sit without complaint, “faithful” and relaxed’ not expecting to “bare” a “virgin seed” without a “fathers’ name,”
In “being human,” or loss of “DNA” in which a male contained, or feel physical pain,
…………………………………………………….
“Never appraised as high…She was just faithful, and in turn “loved” because she was trustworthy….
“Marriage” was here “goal,” as she believed in “god” in essences to be “chosen worthy”
Clear “through the stain,” as “dampness” might have occurred,
……………….The boys may have wanted a “drink in her pond,” but they remained “thirsty”
………………………………………..
Conclusion….
“Virgin Mary” wasn’t lucky…Naw; she was “loved” for love she gave from the “warmth of her heart”
“Hers eyes saw many road,” “shortcuts” but she stayed “right” from the start…
Now “finish,” as she is “calmed” by the “lustful stars” of heaven,
“birthing” a “savior,” “Loving hoes” and “thefts” to “death,” “without question”
……..or “hesitation,”
……………………
To me, “Lords love,” is me “sleeping under the stars” to “arise to still breath,”
………………………………or as I am on my “Knees to grieve”
as a kiss of “moist” lips kiss my cheeks, in remembrance of the “Lords leave”
Mumbling to myself, “Jesus please, forsake me for my sins’, and take me for I “believe”
“shake my hand,” “cleanse my skin, of “dead, and lost friends”
“Loved ones” or “foes of pretend,” because now I can “see,” as “hate is blindness” that has “no end”
So “enemies are friends,” like “the lord for loved satin as one” even through the bad”
The misers, the “heart breaks” of “life,” the “apples deceased seeds” and still “love remaining sad”
“How sad…? “Crushed!…. that even after this he “cared to birth a son” as savior, that’s “love
So I smile,…….i’m happy, to no I am “Loved, even if I don’t visit the “wonderful man above..
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As i set the topic i reckon i should set up te first vote.....both verses were aight, though i reckon midise was technically more sound, his presentation was good however the structure was average.
Dictionary was aight, his style was good but i don't think he did the topic full justice. The structure once again average.
I \/ Midise, only due to the fact that i found his verse more enjoyable to read and he did if not full then better justice to the topic than Dictionary.
This was a well matched battle.
Dic : you had a nice idea, but I think you could've pulled it off better.You also had good concepts, but like the above statement, they weren't pulled off well. You did have decent Imagery, and your rhyme scheme and your flow was actaully pretty good...Im not really digging the " " after a lot of words...that's just my opinon though
6/10
Midise:
I like how you kept it short and sweet...You had a great choice of vocabulary, and your imagery was pretty nice...The rhyme scheme was pretty good, and it flowed nicely...Like the other dude, you had a nice concept, it just seemed as if you had trouble putting it together...overall, this was a pretty nice drop.
7.5/10
v// midise. no hate. nice battle...
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v/ - midise. sicker.
uuuppin.....#1...
Dictionary - First off, remove the quotes, they're so newbish. Anyway, I felt that your flow was off at some points. It was okay in some, but the thirsty line didn't go with anything and some things were just very stretched and hard to follow. I felt the way you went about the topic was complex at times, but really had nothing interesting about it and was kind of basic. Work on making your writing more entertaining by using more emotion.
Midise - I don't feel you developed the topic as well as you could have, but you were more descriptive in your verse than Dictionary was. I felt your flow and vocabulary for the most part was good, though there were a few lines I felt seemed a bit forced. The line about his neglect keeping evil stay true was probably my favorite. Not a great piece, but a decent one and good enough.
Vote - Midise
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As i set the topic i reckon i should set up te first vote.....both verses were aight, though i reckon midise was technically more sound, his presentation was good however the structure was average.
Dictionary was aight, his style was good but i don't think he did the topic full justice. The structure once again average.
I \/ Midise, only due to the fact that i found his verse more enjoyable to read and he did if not full then better justice to the topic than Dictionary.
^^ are u seriously that fuckin' dumb?
u copyied a vote, that had quoted "as i set the topic" and there was only 1 person who did. 'n it wasnt u.. dumbfuck, i should get u banned, just cuz ur trying to get a "rtf" vote. fuck off, noob.
This was a well matched battle.
Dic : you had a nice idea, but I think you could've pulled it off better.You also had good concepts, but like the above statement, they weren't pulled off well. You did have decent Imagery, and your rhyme scheme and your flow was actaully pretty good...Im not really digging the " " after a lot of words...that's just my opinon though
6/10
Midise:
I like how you kept it short and sweet...You had a great choice of vocabulary, and your imagery was pretty nice...The rhyme scheme was pretty good, and it flowed nicely...Like the other dude, you had a nice concept, it just seemed as if you had trouble putting it together...overall, this was a pretty nice drop.
7.5/10
v// midise. no hate. nice battle...
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Up. #1..
Midise was better point blank & simple, he had better everything wording, flow, vocab everything
Up...#2....
midise poetry was deep so in my opinion he got this one.....good battle on both sides............................................. ..............1
v/midise
Closing This...
midise just seemed like he's been doin this much longer than dictionary. his wording, imagery, use of literary devices, vocabulary, structure, everything was just much better. dictionary didnt seem to have as much creativity as midise as the approach he took on the topic was very bland. i dunno exactly how to explain it nor do i feel like it but yea...
v/ midise
I \/ Midise, only due to the fact that i found his verse more enjoyable to read and he did if not full then better justice to the topic than Dictionary.