Why does it have to be violent

Walkin down the street at dusk mindin my own business and all..............
I looked over there was a pretty big brawl so i gave the cops a call........
One of the people in it was gettin mauled very fast and very hard...........
then i spotted a security guard and he walked over to me with a card......
he said what can i do for you sir..i told him about the incident...............
Cops came suddenly and took me away but i was truely inocent.............
I resisted and struggled free and ran away and helped the police............
I was gonna do sumtin good for once to show i was good to jesus..........
Now my friends came to help to...they accually really needed us............
We fought back with fists no night sticks we killed them like a candle wick
I knew from the start that the cops couldnt really handle it...................
i guess i'm psykic..that's pretty weird isnt it..i had work to do..now to finish it

Why does it have to be violent..everything people do sumone gets hurt...
sumone rips there shirt...people flirtin with death..and they keep flirtin....
heart broken...kids chokin..niggaz provokin..grandmas strokin..peeps hurtin
Why does it have to violent...rumors start fightin occurs...that starts wars..
I started this violent shit before and a bad nigga did too of course.........
they stampeded over a kid...just like byson or even a horse...............

C'mon make the world better no need for killin and people diein for no reason
please believe and this shit isnt teason...next thing ya know there's a new season
niggaz freezin..sneezin gettin sick...niggaz wqanna start treazon......
violent and negative shit happens but niggaz dont understand it bad...
now the presdent and the cops are had and start to get mad....
and serious......now they are furious...soliders are curious.........
gettin involved..the battles begun...now everyone is diein.....
the worlds comin to an end....people tryin to survive this tradgety..
god lookin down shakin is head cuz its so fuckin sad to see...
violent minds makin this world worse everyday...with psycopathic killers
pillers....children stealers...blood spillers......they ill...sick minded fuicks
now everyones mind is gonna destruct..c'mon stop with the violence!
*silence*.....people open their eyelids and realize that violence are offal
i knew makin people see violence are bad was really possible......

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=266769
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=253094

i liked that man, liked the whole subject although u sounded like a future miss america :D jus playin, its good
could you hit my link up and tell me what you think? thanks
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=266911

This turned out to be dope. A fun piece, and you still managed to give it depth, and it can be interpreted in different ways. flow was pretty nice, and your word choice was very good. I think everybody can relate to this in their own way. Nice job. pz.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=267048

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good rhymes tite flow..multies cud b more but was gud still 1.. vocab was fine story flowed well..good message to get accross..im on that yeah!... cidda done with a couple of mettas to lift the verse..

a slight confusion on the last line..violence are" seems strangely worded...

cooltext still.. coming along well...keep adding in elements..


check my last OM yeah!

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=266770

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thanks for the feed..from all....uppin for more

:jerkoff: uppin for more feed......................

this was nice shorty. ya shit was on point. vocab, wordplay, and all. keep doin wat u do.

Yo this was a good peice, good topic, flow was there, good use of vocabs, multies. Keep it up homey

This was pretty nice.
I liked the topic & the storyline... different to the usual & you carried it off well.
Vocab was nice & there was some decent imagery.
There couldve been more multis, but it might have taken away from the overall feel of it.


It would be appreciated if you could drop a quick vote in this battle:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=267356

yo this was dope i might even consider nominating this for the OMHOF but i dont know yet ill think about it, flowed good but yeah i got a lil confused on that last line too, but other than tht this was dope keep it up homie

That was real good man. I liked it, when I first started readin, I thought it started out weak. But you picked it up and turned it into something good. Stay up man. If you got the time could you please take a look at the battles in my sig, and vote on them. Thanks bro

real quality stuff man, everything was real good, story, rhymes, structure, wordplay, everything was fresh. like this one a lot man, lookin out for more

hit tha link in tha sig!

i don't like your concept of RATTING on the people scrappin in the street.
if its a brawl then let the boys settle their score, i don't know.

you had some good rhymes and story. your shit seemed a little basic though.
this did have good points in it but overall i thought you coulda wrote some more touching shit man. no hate, i just thought you woulda been better.

thanks for the feed...except for pro's cuz hes a dick..but w.e...uppin

hey man look at diz drop its good for yo song i wish u like ........
your all alone walkin da streets,someone gets in your face,
all up in your grill shoutin,coz you from a different race,
people pop dere gats, coz your in the marked place,
people have been shot,stabbed,raped,murded cozza their looks,
i have been sad,happy,angry annoyed cozza da lives racists took,

any ways it yo 1st n last choice man

uppin for more feed..