a life worth wastin

lookin in the mirror, my reflection i cant see
never had clear vision but yet it was still clear to me
this must be my destiny, its obvious, im not meant
to live on this earth any longer, my time to go to heaven
im already absent of my hopes and wishes, nothin else left
had tarot card readings and they all mentioned death
aint that funny? cards knew my fate before i even guessed
never accomplished nothin, my life motto, never more always the less
i guess i've been blessed to come this far in my life experience
but why do i feel like i've been used like rats in science experiments
why do i cry and lie every night with a knife on my bedside
why do i have dreams of overdosing and goin on my death ride
i light up every day because my mind be racin....im pacin
........chanting to myself that this is a life worth wastin
i cant take it........im clearly fadin in the light of day
my mother tellin me hold on tough times dont last always
dayum people say im cuttin my life short like a circumcision
but they dont see what im goin through everyday...my life aint worth livin
i walk around, my head down so no one can see the fire in my eye
while i take the knife to my wrist....cut through it and die........
.................................................. ................dayum!!!!!!!!

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=257741

that was nice, i felt that the whole way through. I enjoyed reading it.

Hey, could you peep my peace real quick, please?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=257719

appreciate it (if you do)

gd piece
flow - 8/10
structure - 8/10
rhymin - 7/10
like it? - 7/10
overall - 7.5/10

this ws a gd piece, keep it up

can u comment on 'Love' and 'Supremacy' in om (first pg at moment)
thnx

this is a very good piece.... i felt da pain i could see da knife...hell i could even see Ms. Cleo talkin about" da cards are not in ya favor....dat would be $12.95" ...lol.. but really good emotion great flow....juss work on vocab erything else is great.... overall 8.5/10.... keep it up mami....

its nice to see another person out here with problems :D
thanks for the reply i liked yours better than mine though
you came hard, the emotion was there, im feelin it...lifes
a bitch sometimes, aint it?

up!

yo tat shit was hot
i felt tha story most of all

it was pretty decent, basic rhyme scheme all the way through but pretty much consistent for the most part, decent imagery and feeling. kinda hard to read written in white font but ok, that made it harder at points, but, do you. keep droppn pz

ok ok thanx...changed the color of the font so now it should be str8....if not i'll make adjustments (jus let me know) anyway....uppin

iight dont sleep yall...uppin.......

uppin...dont sleep

Killamami this shit was nice jo. I like the topic and the deep, deep lines in this short but meaningful verse. I liked the the opener line

lookin in the mirror, my reflection i cant see
never had clear vision but yet it was still clear to me
people who go through shit underatend that line and the part
aint that funny? cards knew my fate before i even guessed
never accomplished nothin, my life motto, never more always the less
shit was nice, u should af more though good drop jo

thank you....up

out of this i give this a 9/10 because ever she had was tight in there but the vocabulary but keep it up its hot mami

yo this shit was hard body son, this peice got me readin from the begining to the end all the way, this was nice i wanna see more of ur drop aight ma

thank you up!

i kno this is old like hell but im uppin it because i thought it was a good piece