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    Angry Comin Out

    This cat's comin out of a deep rest
    Ya'll talk beef, but words manifest
    I'm depressed, deep inside my chest
    I detest all of you, fuck lovelessness
    Here's the story of my broken hopes

    Check:

    The only person I ever cared for told me to go fuck myself
    So I'll tell you what, I'll pick up this knife and go cut myself
    Go fuck someone else, you fucking bitch, we had something else
    Well you wrecked it for me, you're a whore you stankin bitch
    Look in my eyes, my hate expands the realms of endlessness
    You broke my soul to fragments, you fucking blasphemist
    I wanna rip out your heart so you can feel my emptiness
    You're so beautiful its satanist, you're devious but tainted it's
    Like you're painted with all the faces God can make you wit

    Shut the fuck up bitch, don't even try to talk back to me
    You bring more drama than broke mamas workin inside of factories
    Dear God, do you find it fair that karma doesn't work out for me?
    Can you save me from the hate that's building up inside of me?
    Can you be there? I need someone to reach out to me
    My soul's turning cold, and all I have inside is envy, see
    People want what they can't have - truth to relativity
    I paid you so much attention that now my pockets feel all empty
    You took my love for granted, and fuck it now my soul feels all empty

    Thank God for hiphop, bringing me back to my sanity
    At least I have one thing, apart from that my family
    God put a curse on me to never be able to get with anybody
    And one day I will die, the gravel's peacefulness will rest my body
    Close my eyes and sleep, elevation a meek twenty feet deep
    We'll never be able to get a record deal from the words we speak
    From a ghetto to the city, from the city to the suburbs
    I came a long way, plus all your drama's got me shook worse
    I'm tired of hurtin people, and people always hurtin me
    Global genocide's the answer to rid humanity of hatin me

    And if you think my heart is cold, look at the fucking world you live in
    Pac was right, Thug'z Mansion is the key to the ignition

    And if I can't have noone, I don't want anyone or anything
    I don't even want a record deal, just let me spit for the love of things

    Its one of my only passions, cuz bitch, passion didn't work with you
    An now you got me hurt, but it's okay, cuz I'll merk all of you

    In your sleep, so fuck you too

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    fam you gotta drop links or this will be closed

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    this peice to me wasent that good just ok wasent really feelin the flow or the rymes some of the time ya words didnt ryme at all u just said the same ones again structure was ok to but it could be better...elevate and keep spittin
    leave feed on my om microphone

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    dayum....shit was harsh! but it was still good...i felt the emotion in it....didnt really have specific vocab or nuthin....flow was a lil off....i guess some of the non-rhymin words were part of ya rhyme-scheme....but other than that it was ok...had nice structure and like i said, i felt it.... 8.9

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