L.O.V.E ft Miss Clitoria Cummings

L...long lasting foreva...O...opposites attract togetha...V...very tender and sweet...E...ever lasting and great

Johnny Quest

i can picture us....prolly lastin fo eva
i met ya through ya friends....started talkin togetha
neva knew.....how sweet that u was
but the feelin when i talk to u got me like LOVE
long lasting tingles...every where that u touch me
lets get things straight...this is more the life or something
the passionite aspect...our view make it much easy
hands lock together...u the one who please me
neva enough...but we slowly want me more
growin strong....our love rise like tension in war
u always happy,thats my job to keep a smile on ya face
i got "sexual healing"...just follow me to "my place"
not just fo bumpin and grindin...we can conversate in fact
this love i feel no pain.....dig ya nails deep in my back
i would die for this....u got the key to my heart
when our lips touch....i don't wanna let em apart
the bond that we got....hold stronger then crazy glue
lovers and friends....whateva as long as your my boo

L...long lasting foreva...O...opposites attract togetha...V...very tender and sweet...E...ever lasting and great

Miss Clitoria Cummings

I'm young and in love, you can see it in my eyes
My boyfriend got me, he caught me by surprise
We be in school together, making our love strong
I hope with Jarvis by my side.............................
.....................................Nothing would go wrong
We chill all the time, my heart drops when I see you
I'm so happy about the fact...................................
....................................You want meto be with you
When you take me out, I hope it never ever ever ends
Like Lil Jon and Usher, we can be lovers and friends
I love it when we're on the phone, it's a dope feeling
Thinking about your loving with my feet to the ceiling
You say you love me, and don't want to my side
When we're 18, we can find somewhere to reside
You say you want to marry me, and live happily
With you by my side, it aint no place i'd rather be
We can get ducked off and make good love all night
Don't worry about getting in trust me......................
.................................................. ..Baby I won't bite
Yeah, i'm in love and i'm in love with my Jarvis Boo
L-O-V-E describes us both, yeah, just me and you

L...long lasting foreva...O...opposites attract togetha...V...very tender and sweet...E...ever lasting and great

L...long lasting foreva...O...opposites attract togetha...V...very tender and sweet...E...ever lasting and great

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=253061

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...63#post3542163

Simple, direct and to the point. Kind of done to death, but love is eternal, so I guess we will always see these kinds of drops. I thought it was a bit too simplistic in the first verse, but either way you two complemented eachother. I will look for more of your work to give some indepth feed and advice if I can...

-Bounce

Thank you Bounce. *nods*

I have to say... that was some pretty nice drop's. Very nice. Keep it coming.

this was a good peice.....topic was nice..i liked it
both verses were really good..flow was smooth..
strucutre was even throughly......................
vocab was good and rhymes scheme was good as well
this is certainly a good peice..keep it up both u
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thanx for the feed back and bounce u can hit up my other OM called Peace or War and feel me in on what u think about that...thanx again

Eh, if you want feed from me, leave feed here.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=253181

I'll edit my feedback into this post.

To be honest, I've definitely seen better from you Johnny. It's not bad, by any means. It just seems that because you were going for this "love" way of writing, you neglected your usual style. I like the style that I've seen in previous drops from you, for real. Structure and flow seems cool, but interspersed with a lot of short breaks, ones that could possibly be altered to make the flow a little more fluent. As it is, I won't say "up your vocab", because I know you have it in place. I'll just say "utilise it more".



Can I ask for feed on this piece...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=253595

This was okay...to me i thought it could've been put together better than it is now....not much complexity or originality here, mostly a topic that is always approached the same way...either separation or w/e it is if ur in "love". well I specifically thought Miss Clit's verse was better, I think thats because shes a girl and she knows more about getting hurt in a relationship and stuff like that. Quest dont take it to the heart though, just keep on practicing your topical skills and soon you'll be dope......like me. Keep up the okay work guys..and girls...pz.

ight thanx fo the feedback....uppin

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Yeah, i agree - it's a "Done" topic, but you's two brought some freshness into it, thats' what matters, i think M.C.C sorta outplayed Johnny, but Johnny - your shit was still good, Just Miss.C got me into it, Nice flow and structure from the two of you.
Keep doing ya thing,

In the meanwhile - http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=253670
return the favour and check me out,

-KriminaL-

real sweet man great piece 9/10

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real sweet man great piece 9/10

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Hey, nice piece y'all. What drew me to your piece was the title cuz i did a piece titled the exact same way (L.O.V.E.), but it meant the exact opposite than what you guys had it. But yo, i liked it. I was feelin both verses. I think both MCs could work a bit on their flow (i didnt like the "..."s in the middle. I think instead of those just put commas or even some other words to make it flow better). Better than most love raps that i read, so that's definitely good. So hey, keep this up. Both y'all are pretty nice. Keep it elevatin. Peace

Kind of suspect. I'm not feelin it.

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the two work well together. They are very well connected... i felt the first verse was a bit... i dont know, simplistic. Good though. Done to death but love kind of a forever thing...
not a bad drope
hit me open mic

thanx for the feedback

i liked this verse. or these verses. could feel yall heart in um..... well of course cause u guyz were talkin bout love but it flowed nicely i even bet if yall put the 2 verses together they would flow good. there wasnt that much big vocab in it but i think dats ight cause u guys got ur point out. both ur stuctures were nice, but miss i think u should have done wit out the pink its killin my eyes. and i also liked that little ryme yall had between da verses which was L...long lasting foreva...O...opposites attract togetha...V...very tender and sweet...E...ever lasting and great that was a nice way 2 keep people hooked

all in all great drop if u 2 ever work again on a piece hit me up

Werd, sorry about that, Thanks for the feed

Aww :rolleyes: That was (Love)ly! Good job guys...what a collab, this was an ideal pair...Was a good read, consisted of some good multis and metaphors, some fresh lines some old ones brought back to life. You guys really brought out a good concept and gave a good "Preformance" if you will...Keep up the good work and check out my collabs in my sig and get at me if you'd like to Collab...I'm always open for an Open Mic...Later, good job

~Nash

nice peice guys good flow an good topic

thanx for the feed......uppin for more

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Alrite.....That was dope on both parts....the "hook" coulda been better, the L -----O------V----E part..
Very simple topic...but you 2 made it dope...i enjoyed the whole read...you two should do it audio...

nice rhyme scheme...and nice flows....the structure was nice n good too

one of the only OMs ive enjoyed reading more then once...props to Miss n Johnny

nice lil piece here. i like how ya'll join'd verses to show both sides. good concept. i'm really feelings johnny's piece. didn't know he could drop like that. really good shit, man. and miss clit, real good piece from you. everything seem'd to be right where it was s'posed to be. good shit from both. hit mine and tony's up, yo. thanx and good job.

Thanks for the feed *i'm a lil high so I might not have understood a thing I just wrote*

nice piece
flowed well
gd structure
gd rhymin but a bit too simple for my liking
overall it ws a gd drop - 8/10

keep it up both of u

not sure if i've comment on this befor, so if i hav, srry

thanx for the feed uppin

again very well thought andcomposed just lacks creative delivery other then that beautiful ideas and lyrics from both

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