Untold (0-0) vs Def Wok (0-0)

LLL Jr. Week 1

Rules:

New season starts here...everyones fresh so your all equal as of now

No show your gone no matter who you are

Drop 10-20 lines agree with your opponent

Check in by wednesday drop by friday midnight, i understand that were all in different timezones so i will give way for a hour or so late

No feeding = banned from league
No biting = banned from league and site
No recycling, come up with new un original shit of your own

You must vote on four battles and leave links. you will lose two votes for every missing link. you can't vote on a no show battle and use it for your link either.

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Last of all come hard and get yourself up to LLL.

good luck. :2thumb:

cheque. 12?

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250643
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250615
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250644
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250601

check.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250643
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250615
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250644
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250601

nigga's rock'n fake bling with shitty lyrics no ones felt
i'm'a burn you fool, 'n make the ice around ya neck melt
wok ain't crack'n the combination, so easily i whore 'em
def's skills is on lock...
and his verse'll prove a key was never made for 'em
as for punches, i store 'em right where ya hear
but it makes sense...
cause hear'n you 'oud make anyone turn a def ear
im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end
watch, its finished, ima straight clock the win chump
then put my wrist in the air just to show ya times up

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Def Wok

FL sucks

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then stop battlin in it, even tho callin you a newbies fair
and Frontlines only sucks MORE as long as u stay there

g/l.

EDIT: re-did my first bar for more effective punch. kept the same concept though.

im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end

Damn!

^ yea.
That line was ill.

hahaha untold getting doper every battle now thats whats good

U believe ya getting better, but in reality u get much worse
Cuz u think they laugh at ya punch, when it’s really ya verse
Ya tried to fly off ya fake ill licenses, but didn’t last got see sick
Tried to keep it to yaself, but untold being wack isn’t a secret
Every1 knows that, & your saying that ya dope in FL’s BS, no hoe
Cuz ya think that elites think ya good.
……………………………but 1st repley to ya application was NO
So ya know ya suck, u tried to elevated but got suck, & then
Ya applied thinking ya got much better, & got rejected again
So kid just chill, ya playing with fire, ya not ready, it seems
Ya have a death wish, how ya can’t stop panicking from suicidal dreams
We all have dreams, just your is to much to go & send
Cuz ya ain’t the only 1 saying ya good, ha, sike it was just pretend

Easy

untold:
im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end

Def Wok:
No quotables.

Overall:
A lot of punches that didn't go anywhere. Untold had the ideas
but didn't really use them to graet affect. Def had some lacklusture
concepts and didn't really create much. Elite/application lines
are played to death, man. Sorry.. props for showing, both of you.

Vote:untold

im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end

Vs

Nuffin

v//untold

Moral: Links are homo!

im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end

vs.

nothing

good battle both of u, but untold took it with that one punch..

v/untold

Nothing


vs

So ya know ya suck, u tried to elevated but got suck, & then
Ya applied thinking ya got much better, & got rejected again


V/ Def Wok


That weak end line was whack. He's saying that if he doesn't school his ass, then it's cause he'll be on the weak end, but that makes no sense, because the only way to school his ass is if he's on the weak end.

Let's get serious now, guys.

nigga's rock'n fake bling with shitty lyrics no ones felt
i'm'a burn you fool, 'n make the ice around ya neck melt
^ no
wok ain't crack'n the combination, so easily i whore 'em
def's skills is on lock...
and his verse'll prove a key was never made for 'em
^ nope
as for punches, i store 'em right where ya hear
but it makes sense...
cause hear'n you 'oud make anyone turn a def ear
^ played
im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end
^ played to high heaven.
watch, its finished, ima straight clock the win chump
then put my wrist in the air just to show ya times up
^ NO!!!
then stop battlin in it, even tho callin you a newbies fair
and Frontlines only sucks MORE as long as u stay there
^ gay

vs. (now why you guys are morons.)

U believe ya getting better, but in reality u get much worse
Cuz u think they laugh at ya punch, when it’s really ya verse
^ dope
Ya tried to fly off ya fake ill licenses, but didn’t last got see sick
Tried to keep it to yaself, but untold being wack isn’t a secret
^ no, played
Every1 knows that, & your saying that ya dope in FL’s BS, no hoe
Cuz ya think that elites think ya good.
……………………………but 1st repley to ya application was NO
^ no
So ya know ya suck, u tried to elevated but got suck, & then
Ya applied thinking ya got much better, & got rejected again
^ kinda lead on.. kinda lame
So kid just chill, ya playing with fire, ya not ready, it seems
Ya have a death wish, how ya can’t stop panicking from suicidal dreams
^ no
We all have dreams, just your is to much to go & send
Cuz ya ain’t the only 1 saying ya good, ha, sike it was just pretend
^ No

v/ - fucking DWok. YOU IDIOTS. DERIVE = SMART. YOU = EMBESILS.

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Ike Ill.

Let's get serious now, guys.

nigga's rock'n fake bling with shitty lyrics no ones felt
i'm'a burn you fool, 'n make the ice around ya neck melt
^ no
wok ain't crack'n the combination, so easily i whore 'em
def's skills is on lock...
and his verse'll prove a key was never made for 'em
^ nope
as for punches, i store 'em right where ya hear
but it makes sense...
cause hear'n you 'oud make anyone turn a def ear
^ played
im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end
^ played to high heaven.
watch, its finished, ima straight clock the win chump
then put my wrist in the air just to show ya times up
^ NO!!!
then stop battlin in it, even tho callin you a newbies fair
and Frontlines only sucks MORE as long as u stay there
^ gay

vs. (now why you guys are morons.)

U believe ya getting better, but in reality u get much worse
Cuz u think they laugh at ya punch, when it’s really ya verse
^ dope
Ya tried to fly off ya fake ill licenses, but didn’t last got see sick
Tried to keep it to yaself, but untold being wack isn’t a secret
^ no, played
Every1 knows that, & your saying that ya dope in FL’s BS, no hoe
Cuz ya think that elites think ya good.
……………………………but 1st repley to ya application was NO
^ no
So ya know ya suck, u tried to elevated but got suck, & then
Ya applied thinking ya got much better, & got rejected again
^ kinda lead on.. kinda lame
So kid just chill, ya playing with fire, ya not ready, it seems
Ya have a death wish, how ya can’t stop panicking from suicidal dreams
^ no
We all have dreams, just your is to much to go & send
Cuz ya ain’t the only 1 saying ya good, ha, sike it was just pretend
^ No

v/ - fucking DWok. YOU IDIOTS. DERIVE = SMART. YOU = EMBESILS.

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You swaying little fag. I guess its time for Kyle to ban you as I'm
tottally bored of you now.

im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end

vs

U believe ya getting better, but in reality u get much worse
Cuz u think they laugh at ya punch, when it’s really ya verse

So ya know ya suck, u tried to elevated but got suck, & then
Ya applied thinking ya got much better, & got rejected again

v/def wok

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Trahedy Siphon

You swaying little fag. I guess its time for Kyle to ban you as I'm
tottally bored of you now.

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Owned Twiz got :spank:

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Ike Ill.

Let's get serious now, guys.

nigga's rock'n fake bling with shitty lyrics no ones felt
i'm'a burn you fool, 'n make the ice around ya neck melt
^ no
wok ain't crack'n the combination, so easily i whore 'em
def's skills is on lock...
and his verse'll prove a key was never made for 'em
^ nope
as for punches, i store 'em right where ya hear
but it makes sense...
cause hear'n you 'oud make anyone turn a def ear
^ played
im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end
^ played to high heaven.
watch, its finished, ima straight clock the win chump
then put my wrist in the air just to show ya times up
^ NO!!!
then stop battlin in it, even tho callin you a newbies fair
and Frontlines only sucks MORE as long as u stay there
^ gay

vs. (now why you guys are morons.)

U believe ya getting better, but in reality u get much worse
Cuz u think they laugh at ya punch, when it’s really ya verse
^ dope
Ya tried to fly off ya fake ill licenses, but didn’t last got see sick
Tried to keep it to yaself, but untold being wack isn’t a secret
^ no, played
Every1 knows that, & your saying that ya dope in FL’s BS, no hoe
Cuz ya think that elites think ya good.
……………………………but 1st repley to ya application was NO
^ no
So ya know ya suck, u tried to elevated but got suck, & then
Ya applied thinking ya got much better, & got rejected again
^ kinda lead on.. kinda lame
So kid just chill, ya playing with fire, ya not ready, it seems
Ya have a death wish, how ya can’t stop panicking from suicidal dreams
^ no
We all have dreams, just your is to much to go & send
Cuz ya ain’t the only 1 saying ya good, ha, sike it was just pretend
^ No

v/ - fucking DWok. YOU IDIOTS. DERIVE = SMART. YOU = EMBESILS.

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god... you can be so gay.

im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end

vs

Nothing

The fuck happened to you Def this is a joke somethins up

untold
im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end

Def Wok
So ya know ya suck, u tried to elevated but got suck, & then
Ya applied thinking ya got much better, & got rejected again

Overall I thought that Def Wok had more consistent and harder punches then untold, but that weak end (weekend) name play was sick, but that was your only good line in my opinion. So I'd say Def Wok takes this for better and more consistent punchse.

v/-Def Wok

HERE'S THE BREAKDOWN


UNTOLD:

nigga's rock'n fake bling with shitty lyrics no ones felt
i'm'a burn you fool, 'n make the ice around ya neck melt
NO
wok ain't crack'n the combination, so easily i whore 'em
def's skills is on lock...
and his verse'll prove a key was never made for 'em
NO, BAD RHYME, I SEE THE PUNCH BUT IT WAS WORDED BAD
as for punches, i store 'em right where ya hear
but it makes sense...
cause hear'n you 'oud make anyone turn a def ear
NOPE,WEAK
im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end
GOOD,BEST LINE,NICE WORDPLAY AS WELL
watch, its finished, ima straight clock the win chump
then put my wrist in the air just to show ya times up
WEAK
then stop battlin in it, even tho callin you a newbies fair
and Frontlines only sucks MORE as long as u stay there
OKAY CLOSER

DEF WOK:

U believe ya getting better, but in reality u get much worse
Cuz u think they laugh at ya punch, when it’s really ya verse
DECENT,PLAYED THOUGH
Ya tried to fly off ya fake ill licenses, but didn’t last got see sick
Tried to keep it to yaself, but untold being wack isn’t a secret
WEAK PUNCH
Every1 knows that, & your saying that ya dope in FL’s BS, no hoe
Cuz ya think that elites think ya good.
……………………………but 1st repley to ya application was NO
VERY WEAK PUNCH, BE MORE COMPLEX,
So ya know ya suck, u tried to elevated but got suck, & then
Ya applied thinking ya got much better, & got rejected again
WEAK AGAIN, VERY BASIC AND BORING, BAD PUNCH
So kid just chill, ya playing with fire, ya not ready, it seems
Ya have a death wish, how ya can’t stop panicking from suicidal dreams
WEAK PUNCH, NO PUNCH, JUST A STATEMENT
We all have dreams, just your is to much to go & send
Cuz ya ain’t the only 1 saying ya good, ha, sike it was just pretend
NOPE


Overall, this was a seriously weak battle and Untold wins barely because he had one better punch.

Untold: weak punches except for the 4th bar and your sixth bar was decent,concepts were alright but word them better next time

Def Wok: all punches came weak and didn't hit at all, ya came to basic and extremely played,

my vote/-Untold for dropping better than def wok because of one better punch, for having more complexity than def wok and for not comin as played as def wok

Untold
im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end

Def Wok
Nothing

Untold came better with harsher punches IMO V/ Untold....

wok ain't crack'n the combination, so easily i whore 'em
def's skills is on lock...
and his verse'll prove a key was never made for 'em

vs
nothing.

come on guys. get DOPER.. lol decent battle. i only quote the 60% or above punches.
anyway v/untold.

hmmm... I could have swore I already voted on this... Darn computer....

Def Wok - you had some descent punches that flowed pretty welll... However, your wordplay is very basic. This category is making your punches suffer. You had some good flow and nice structure.

Untold - You have reach a new height man. You delivered a couple of direct hits. Dont stop here though... Keep elevatin til your in LLL. Nice flow and structure as well...'


Vote - Untold, better disses

Untold, You had some pretty good punches, some of it was a little bit played but some of your lines hit hard, structure and all was fine, you had a little bit of wordplay vocab n stuff was fine... but...i know you can come harder.

Def, You came alright here. Some of your punches could have been worded better. Your punches hit alright, but some were more statements that anything else. Your structure n all was fine vocab all good and stuff... but i just feel his punches were hitten ya harder and u repeated the "him getting denied lines" throughout your whole verse which got old pretty quick.

Both need to add a little bit more wordplay and wit into your verses
and you guys would come a lot harder in your verses.

v/UNTOLD

im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end

vs

U believe ya getting better, but in reality u get much worse
Cuz u think they laugh at ya punch, when it’s really ya verse
Ya tried to fly off ya fake ill licenses, but didn’t last got see sick
Tried to keep it to yaself, but untold being wack isn’t a secret

v/def wok

im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end

vs.

nuttin

v/untold

untold wins
im comin strong as fuck, but cant say the same for u, friend
if i dont school ya ass its cuz your stuck on the weak end

lmfao @ that line

Untold (1-0)
Def Wok (0-1)