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Ear To The Ground
I sense the impending danger, it's a distinct vibration.
And hence I not only hear, but listen with full concentration.
They say:
Time is money, and a picture's worth a thousands words;
Then why this time, I only picture myself being barely heard.
Muffled low, I speak in whispers as a defensive tool.
When cruelty strikes, precious time will be an expensive jewel.
A fool would plan out a strategy when instincts are key...
Opening up the flood gates, saturating the mind to a degree.
A lesson learned when slow to react, and it's a known fact;
My ear to the ground, letting seconds subtract is more than math.
It's life or death, and I'm just counting my blessings like the rest.
Any move I make has consequences, that I don't want adressed.
In a place of exchange, I have the feeling that I am possessed.
Not by a being, but of a new holder, and it's causing me stress.
All I see is tiled floor, as the bank robber has his boot on my neck.
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damn this is the nicest OM i have heard in a while 9/10 i wasnt feeling the topic
and i dont think u put it into ur verse well . but the flo and the vocab was amazing .
you could use some work on ur structure . u had nice wordplay and good creativity . jus work on strucutre and displaying ur topic better in ur verse
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pretty nice man, feeling your vocabulary.....and the storyline was good, but i did feel you could have gone further with it, you know....get more indepth.....But hey, it was still nice. Maybe a collab sometime?...
Hit up Last words from a Lost Child
Peace
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thanks, I'll return the feed
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I'm Liking the Imagination, and your approach was very different, but the concept was very played out. It wasn't much creativity here, but your flow is kinda choppy, you need to add multi's and stop rhyming "Only" at the "end" of your lines. It kinda created a "boring" vipe while I was reading your verse, no hate just my opinion. Wordplays was def good in this piece, the Emotion was good following it up with imaginary. Keep writing..Peace.
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well i liked it
nice wordplay and creativity
i liked tha subject money is worth time
dat shit was real 8/10
good shit elevating
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all link have been returned
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aghh you left it in suspense ..like its gonna need a verse 2 to boot... was written with good flow and rhymes .. and the lines came thru clear and precise
good vocab and word arrangement
nice but too short and unconcluded as a whole song..
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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=238957
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not sure is the bank robber was real or a metaphor, if that was a twist you wanted to drop at the end... had some appropriate vocab for a peice like this, not too complex not too simple... hit on a couple subjects we all can relate too so that was good... but it left me wanting a little more I guess... good drop though.
~loOn!
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this was a nice drop from you homie.You had a good topic and a good storyline to the piece.Also you had good Imagry and emotion in your verse too.This is like one of the best OMs I read in a while.Also you had a good structure and good wordplay too.I hope to see more from you soon cuz this was some good shit too read.Keep up the good work and let me know when you drop some new shit so I can check it out.
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yea, good shit mayne.
Flow and vocab were real on point, and the topic and story were real, too.
I'd have to agree tho, another verse would be straight. Prolly give it like an 8.5 or 9/10
one.
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yo this was dope the topic wasnt so great but it was still good. You had a good flow goin and ur vocabs coulda had more. Other than that it was good
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i ahve to say carl you have been improvng tremendously and it shows, rhymes are great here, topic was different and creative and also interesting, i enjoyed it, flow and strcuutre was great, even and smoooth, nicley written and layed out, great drop, keep it up, peace
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yo i was feelin it u had everything ok keep up the good work
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Nice piece...
definitely feeling this one Carl...
Always knew you was a good writer since
SS, when I was in the league. anyways nice
drop nice examples of expressing yourself.
"Time is money, and a picture's worth a thousands words;
Then why this time, I only picture myself being barely heard."
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nice line my fav line. you had a lot of quotables in this
piece. But that's the one that stood out the most.
Was feeling the steady flow and solid meaning.
Nice drop indeed.
Please check my OM out 'Mental War -Spirit Soars'
Peace and stay dropping.
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Great drop, liked it a lot. Coulda made it a bit longer, expanded on it, but what was there was dope. Lotta emotion, good wordplay made the slightly off flow irrelevant. The vocab wasn't too complicated, but I didn't see nothing elementary either. All in all, a sick piece that coulda been refined just a bit more. 8/10
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very good om.. the vocab flow and word play were all very good.. structure wasnt as good as the rest but still a damn good piece.. keep up the good work
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