Wrath of War 2 (The Final Chapter) Wordplay back 2 back

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October 6th, 2005, 07:17 AM
The Vortex

Wrath of War 2 (The Final Chapter) Wordplay back 2 back

p'rt 1=
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=206445

My thought-train is hurtling forth-battling forces-dark
Trepidation, unlock visions, tour places cursed & stark
Realism, unleashing the stampede of a thousand horses
Deaths in the desert, vultures feed on children corpses
Raged-rebels damn politics verses plight of the ethnic’
Simple spiteful shit, this is ice water spiked with arsenic
Poison plans in the hands of the idle, tools for the devil
Troops murder for medals, alert terror suicidal threat level
Raises a panic, heavy metal flame spit through your jacket
Scars & slashes, hostility torn city: scarlet blood splashes
Soldiers return to ashes & dust, stone-tomb open & shut
Closed cavity, until the dead-living resurrect as zombie
The Godlike uphold shields: taking chagrin on the chin
Guiltless perish people puzzled, trapped in with the link
Swim-or-sink in the dark on the brink of acts-heartless
Trip-up adversaries vibrate like spark-off semtex charges
Crisis boils starving village nigaz reap near zilch for toil
Destroying acres of soil fertile while they digging for oil
Nucleic turmoil crumbling concrete, assume for mass mess
Worthy of death, the holocaust finale moves into aspect

War faces east to west, a contest of blood-sport
We caught up in this madness...abort...ABORT.

The Wrath of War.
October 6th, 2005, 07:32 AM
The Vortex

links
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=238278
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=237944
October 6th, 2005, 08:51 AM
Mic D

decent....better then elevate.......but........................Wheres the wordplay....I think your confused on what wordplay is.......wordplay=play on words
October 6th, 2005, 11:33 AM
The Vortex

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mic_Dareall

decent....better then elevate.......but........................Wheres the wordplay....I think your confused on what wordplay is.......wordplay=play on words

read it properly

especialy the first line

wordplay back to back

reversed wordplay

study the science man

example.. cliche..."train of thought"

i wrote-
My thought-train is hurtling forth-battling forces-dark

dark-forces... becomes forces-dark

and the whole piece tries to follow the same pattern of wordplay in places

any more comments???????????????????/

ups
October 6th, 2005, 01:35 PM
The Vortex

any ups
October 6th, 2005, 01:46 PM
tjb

this song iz tight

like this joint!!!!!!!!!!!!!
October 6th, 2005, 02:12 PM
Mic D

thats not wordplay kid..
...... "My train of thought has lost its tracks"...<--wordplay..

...flipping words around is not wordplay

worplay = play on words....playing on the MEANING of words
October 6th, 2005, 04:06 PM
The Vortex

lolz.. do u know what "play" means
October 6th, 2005, 11:37 PM
Cody Nash

Good stuff...I loved the whole thing it had a good topic...you stayed on track...part 1 was kind of "Meh" compared to this...but they were good...this one had more multis while the other had more metas....you seemed to split the wordplay into groups....It was a good concept...Nice work here and keep it up....

Comment me on "The Art Of War"......Peace good stuff...keep writing...
October 7th, 2005, 08:55 AM
The Vortex

good looks out blud

uppety ups
October 7th, 2005, 03:48 PM
The Vortex

uhm! not much feed on this then?

opp
October 7th, 2005, 03:55 PM
Pharoah.

good topic

get out the - though. i learned that the hard way lol, damn nice topic.... good flow and multies

hit up Im With You.... or die
October 7th, 2005, 04:05 PM
The Vortex

safe blud.. the piecer you got on the page i hit already

pz
October 7th, 2005, 04:09 PM
cephas

this was pretty nice man... flow was there..wordplay was aight...work on incorporating bigger vocab and more multis..overall pretty nice joint

peace
October 7th, 2005, 04:13 PM
The Vortex

Quote:

Originally Posted by cephas

this was pretty nice man... flow was there..wordplay was aight...work on incorporating bigger vocab and more multis..overall pretty nice joint

peace

uhm thanks i guess

but this had more than enuff multies for me.. no use in forcing in some crap that could mess it up

i just flow with the story and dont force anything in

1
October 9th, 2005, 04:01 PM
DATBOIP

shit was hot.
very good vocab, learned me some new words today. lol
great flow, i feel ya man...
keep em commin.
October 10th, 2005, 06:32 AM
The Vortex

thanks ups
October 10th, 2005, 06:57 PM
J-Hova

yo this was ight had a pretty good good flow and ok vocab pretty much good stay up
October 11th, 2005, 08:38 AM
The Vortex

uhm thanks i guess J .. u cudda left a cupple mo lines feed tho

uppetys
October 11th, 2005, 02:32 PM
The Vortex

last up of the day

you stingy bastards
October 12th, 2005, 10:27 AM
The Vortex

and uppy
October 12th, 2005, 06:04 PM
Antonio Banderas

Great drop. You cleverly placed nice vocab in the right places here. The topic was very creative and you did an outstanding job staying on that topic of WAR. You managed to put the english language together in an original way and ti l kept a solid structure and flow. Also, this drop was the perfect length...

Nicely done....
October 12th, 2005, 06:25 PM
SkullBreaker

yeah it was ight man keep it up so imma leave it at that aight
October 12th, 2005, 06:32 PM
master theisis

no disrespect but i wasnt feelin it too much

no wordplay or vocab at all

elevate it a lil
October 13th, 2005, 05:31 AM
The Vortex

Quote:

Originally Posted by master theisis

no disrespect but i wasnt feelin it too much

no wordplay or vocab at all

elevate it a lil

thats rather stupid feedback isnt it kid

no wordplay or vocab.. did you read the correct verse.. i think your partialy blind or something

uppin any sensible comments
October 18th, 2005, 08:27 AM
The Vortex

uppety up and away
October 22nd, 2005, 07:25 AM
The Vortex

bump
October 22nd, 2005, 07:36 AM
Equalibirum

fuck off