Being A Daddy(I'm Father Now) Ft-ADR

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=236820
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=236817


A.chilles
March Tenth, 1:39, 05, A Baby Is About To Be Born
I Can Hear Here Screming, Body Sweating Mouth Is Warm
In The Car Tripping To The Hospital, Doing Eighty
Trying To Take Life's Opsticles, Deliver A New Baby
I'm Through Maybe, I'm Running Looking For The Room
Family In The Hall, Darkness Looking To Put Me In Doom
Now I'm In The Room, She Screaming, Swearing Loud
And I'm Off In Space, Pannicking, My Hair In The Cloud
Baby's Coming, I Feel I'm Done And, Doc Said It's A Girl
Watching Her Release The Pain, Pop, Head's In This World
A New Baby Is Born, My Mind's Lost, Can't Sleep At Night
When I First Held Her, She Had To Be The Seek In My Light
Ciggarette's Burning, Five Pack's, I'm Stressing To Much
Now The Momma's Gone New Girl, Momma Gave Two Fucks
It's Hard To Breath, Smoking Weed's Just Making It Worse
Before She Turns Out Bad, Her Dad Will Lay In A Hurse
Love My Kid To Heaven And Back, What Ever It Take's See
And I'll Be By Her Side Forever, Untill Death Shake's Me
7 Months In Five Day's, I'm Proud To Call Her My Daughter
Even Though Night's Get Sweaty, The Walls Get Hotter
First Words, Da Da, I Felt Like A Real Father, I Stuck In
Hopping One Day She Doesn't Grow Up To Say Fuck Him
If I Could Change Time, I Wouldn't Change Time At All
I'll Rob, Kill To Support Her, Jail, I Won't Mind At All
Crying, Crawling, Soon I'll Have To Chase Her Around
I Cherish Every Moment, Till She See Me Tasting The Ground


ADR
stomachs pookin~waters brok'n feelin rushes str8 to my heart..
from the start~my thoughts've fallen apart hope my child brings lite to my dark..
a blessing in disguise~bright eyes gloom when i heard she was bout to drop..
could it be~what i breed soon to dream what i bleed once the water pop'd..
12 35~my highs gone,nurses tell me remain calm but how can i..
left the cam in the whip~thoughts un balanced,hope shes born with slant eyes..
the site of whats rite~soon to be pop'd threw both thighs,while pain killers relievin..
im i dreamin?cant leave now but im feelin like fab the way i was breathing
i see the head poke~its no joke my first glance was a deep smile..
years pass~same laugh as me tan as me,growm with the love for the same child..
i rest in dirt~before her feelins ever get hurt but that aint even the worst..
the pride~joy and whats inside can only be describe as love stored and im bout to burst..

And Another One Hommie..Give Us Some Feed Here

that was hot i cant find one bad thing to say about that

Thanks Man Thanks

no problem man

if ur good ur good

ummmmmm ok



anyways uppin for feed peepz...

leave links i get at them wordness!!

ups..............................................

Damn Nobody Feeding Me Yo Lol.

man that shit was damn good i felt it and i know what you mean cuz i gotta son on the way and im only 16 it sucks man that one time you forget to wear a rubber you a father and shes a mother good shit and plz leave feed on my OM its called My Downfall

Link Me Up Fams...I'll Drop Some Feed.

here they go

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=238627
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=234753
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=235643

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hot shit... structer flow and word play were all very good.

exelent piece dude. i can tell its from the heart, the whole thing was great. the structure was good.. i think you could have gotten a little more creative with word choice, but there was alotta rhymes i liked though....
keep writing real life ish..

peace,.,.,.,.,.,.,

Dope piece, both dropped nice.

Achilles had nice structure which made the flow nice, it was smoothe and easy to read. I saw you throw in a few multis that were decent. Some better vocab would have worked nicely, but still a good drop none the less.

ADR Really liked your verse, you also had nice structure with smoothe lines. You threw in a lot of inner rhyming and multis that i liked. Could have been done on an audio nicely, samething with the vocab as Achilles but just about everyone needs to elevate in vocab.

Keep dropping.

Let Me Give You Some Advice Home Boy...When You Do Audio You Don't Need Vocab..Alot Of These Emcee's On Here Be Talking About Vocab..Vocabulary Means Nothing..Just Another Thing Some Dumb Fag Made Up To Critic The Verses On..When You Spit..Do You Use Big Vocabulary? No So That Was Non Sense.

Stfu, this isnt audio dipshit, this is OM where vocabulary is a factor fuckface. Just about anybody can drop a good OM if vocab isnt a factor, if you rhyme words like cat and hat your saying that is still good? Because big words arent good anyway?And many artists do have nice vocab in there audio.