Life through the Vortex

Life through the Vortex

Jump aboard this journey into the parallel-universe
Ascend dimensions where everything is completely reversed
A new earth observed through the eyes of an eagle
Hail the rise of all ethical people… No political evils prevail
Faraway from Hell where all miracles fail to astonish
Drinking holy-water as tonic, fresh fruits from the tree-of-life
Food is free-of-price nobody dies of hunger & thirst
Children play freely: no more perverts causing danger & hurt
Through the Vortex
Time ticks anti-clockwise
Glaciers consist-of cloudy hot-ice
Through the Vortex
Perfect prospects flourish
Liberate; let your mindset nourish
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Feast on the knowledge, a Polaroid image of peace
Streets are hallowed; the jungle has plentiful foliage for beasts
The Sun is frozen, the Moon glows heat for summer
Were on foot over water… distorting gravity on this journey
An eternity solely of bliss love persists as a sentiment
Each continent is ever fragrant: breezy aromas of rose petals
As dust settles exposes precious metal free of charge
Thus bon-voyage peep the mirror image look see the mirage
*
Through the Vortex
Time ticks anti-clockwise
Glaciers consist-of cloudy hot-ice
Through the Vortex
Perfect prospects flourish
Liberate; let your mindset nourish
*
See you in the idyllic parish, able to manage great acts
Its people power so we never make a single village pay tax
Follow my tracks, multihued tones embellish the skyline
Sublime backdrop… unlocking thought to fresh perception
I see my own reflection: he has no troubles or stresses
I send a message: wish I can change places’ live this dream
As iris’s gleam at the vista of this extreme flawlessness
The angels align for this quest, plus every prayer is blessed
Through the Vortex
Time ticks anti-clockwise
Glaciers consist-of cloudy hot-ice
Through the Vortex
Perfect prospects flourish
Liberate; let your mindset nourish
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Vortex September 2005 ©

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=236625

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=237184

Jump aboard this journey into the parallel-universe
Ascend dimensions where everything is completely reversed

-was feelin this line to....great word usage-



"No political evils prevail
Faraway from Hell where all miracles fail to astonish
Drinking holy-water as tonic"

-that right there is ill-matic baby...nice set of bars-

"Feast on the knowledge, a Polaroid image of peace
Streets are hallowed; the jungle has plentiful foliage for beasts"

-that line amazes me everytime i read it-


man this flow was dope...overall i liked the whole thing great word usage...only thing is your flow seems to just jump off from a rhyme scheme to another, but still this piece was in my eyes ILLMATIC

safe bro

there is a science to the rhyme scheme,it works within the internals at the centre of each 8 lines

good looking brah

up 1

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=235647

hit it up


great wording and flow was mad ill
topic was nice too

the ryhme scheme OMFG mad ill

nice drop

9/10

go peep my link

thanks alot

ups

up up up up up up

up sons

All And All This Was A Dime
Very Reminisent Of Illogic To Me And Thats A Good Thing.
You Tackle Music Nit At Making It But At An Artistry Making The Reader Either Participate Or Loose The Full Umph Of Your Words.

Easily A Great Read

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Originally Posted by noncentz(word~p)

All And All This Was A Dime
Very Reminisent Of Illogic To Me And Thats A Good Thing.
You Tackle Music Nit At Making It But At An Artistry Making The Reader Either Participate Or Loose The Full Umph Of Your Words.

Easily A Great Read

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good looking out.. yeah for sure i look for participation, or see u later kinder thing for real


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up diddly uppety

nice job on this one...i was really feeling it.
sound like a place id want to go to...
the only thing that botherd me is

"Time ticks anti-clockwise"

tha "anti-clockwise"
i hate telling people that somthing didnt sound right.
but i dont know...
"counter-clockwise"
still the same rhyme with it...
but i mean its your piece, you put forth-worth effort into it.
dont let my little comment ruin it.
ya kno?
fa sho keep it up tho...

comment on mine if you would please
in my sig (Elevate)

preciate it.

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Originally Posted by DATBOIP

nice job on this one...i was really feeling it.
sound like a place id want to go to...
the only thing that botherd me is

"Time ticks anti-clockwise"

tha "anti-clockwise"
i hate telling people that somthing didnt sound right.
but i dont know...
"counter-clockwise"
still the same rhyme with it...
but i mean its your piece, you put forth-worth effort into it.
dont let my little comment ruin it.
ya kno?
fa sho keep it up tho...

comment on mine if you would please
in my sig (Elevate)

preciate it.

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yeah for real bro thats a possibility

i was just rhyming those words as multies tho u see

ANTI-clockwise
CLOUDY hot-ice


anit somewhat rhyming with cloudy

good looks out


up up and away

bump diddly dumps

no more feed on this joint then

oh well

That was really pretty dope man. I especially liked the concept you worked with on here... never read anything like it before... quite unique. For the most part you used a wide varying vocab... although trailed off at times. More multi's woulda been good, but didnt really matter as it flowed excellently anyway. Nice work, keep it up.

thanks bro

good looking out

nice structure nice flow i like it
it was designed good

ups on this

thamks brah.. u cudda left a lil mo feed tho...smph

The concept was different so i gotta give props for that originality barely exists in OM. Your vocab was used properly a lot of the big words but the bars were not cryptic so i enjoyed reading the piece. Your imagery was the most impressive thing in the piece it was very dark very descriptive a lot of questions asked in the piece i really like these type of verses. The hook was ok but if your gonna do this as audi o think you should re write cause i think it would sound off on audio. Structure was fine i aint too bothered about the structure, your flow was a bit inconsistent compared to other pieces ive read from you but you know how to do multies and internals so just mix a few more in next time. Keep writing and posting.

safe bro

and up

and uppers