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    Punch Line Puppets

    punch lines
    that's cool for the average
    but a savage
    stay locked on necks
    till the hold broke
    and when he's pulled back
    a savage take the whole throat
    then pull it out his mouth
    and show you what woulda spoke
    punch-lines
    is like coke and wine
    its cool when ya wit a dyme
    but not when ya adding dimes
    clear thoughts
    got to match up every line
    every time
    I settle down in chosen minds
    I punch
    no jabs no comboz
    just one blow
    stand back and watch the head go
    back and forth
    but only so far in either way
    forget the beat
    they trip off what I came to say
    so lets climb
    to levels where punch-lines
    amount to poetic ramblings
    heard while gambling
    up here
    its all about the energy
    whats said getting carried
    by power and intensity
    and punch-lines
    remind you sack lunches
    playing the dozens
    and fighting with ya fake cousins
    Man talk
    get to the point
    through the smog from a joint
    in a fog from the joint
    saying things that should be written scripts
    you can tell its authentic
    cause the way a savage give it
    aint meant to be silly or funny
    like these punch-line puppets
    with they Pinocchio money
    And dont act like you dont know
    that lies is what made ole boy money grow
    he throwing up wood chips
    for his C.E.O.
    carving Hip Hop Stars
    He's Ja-ped-do
    Punch-line that!
    sit back and think on something real catchy
    I think I heard the same thing said
    on 50 million other CD's
    and you wont catch me
    then again I rehabilitated some ideas
    perfected and set-um free
    I guess that's the ways of the industry
    punch-lines run some
    and then there's me

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    You've Earned a Custom Title! The Vortex's Avatar
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    uhm not too bad flow wise.. format is a bit meh!...a few decent rhymes but got a bit simple in places.. interesting flow still
    i'd sapost with a bit longer lines, and exact the bars for impact

    decent

    keep at it

    pz
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    this is bad, sorry.

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    M eh,Really didn't like this.
    Move on , no irony here.

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    thats all i have to say is "meh" about this piece...the rhyme scheme made me not even wanna read it bro...try settin up a little better
    Harmon

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