Spoken From Above Ft WhiteOut

White Out

Cosely Slipped Under the Covers at night...
Past Sins on my Mind, and then the Heavens Roar with all its Might...
This Deafaning Bellow that is Scolding me, no one Else can even Hear...
Is the Unforgiving Interrogation that I Had Always Feared...
For Murder On my Hands and The Voice Casting this Unbound Punishment...
I Despise the Evils in me, And the Voice got my Souhl in deep Repent...
These Intricate Words Got Me Sweatin in Bed...
Praying that I Manifest a way Not to Wake Up Dead...
For this Lesson Echoes in my Thoughts, and i cant Break Free...
From this Undying Reign of Heavenly Chatters, FUCKing with my Memory...

ADR

Look at my past~no questions asked im not destined to last....
im in need of a grasp thats when the lord struck me a flash....
im suffering fast~heavens angel sent from above to dissasemble a thug...
the crucifictions above lord ur my savior so why so much damaging love..
this is were the panicing comes~prayers at nite sins threw the day..
lord were both limpin away so if simply i pray promise me my wish wont simply decay..
pave ways~the path i've chosen is cripple what we speak of is confidential.....
u told me once~u not rite from wrong,but yet look what i've gotten into....
co-insidential?maybe but lack of u has driven me crazy~lately..
from shady~to over protection like vest hopin ur ways can save me..
its amazin~i hear when u speak seek wisdom from which u preach...
discreet reachin its peek capturin my sins removing me from the streets....

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there ya go fam

uppin this.. its hot like alwayz

uppin for some ill feedback nah mean.....werd

damn yall niggas stay droppin ill peices........neways


I liked the imagery......i had the movie version playin in my head...lol......the creativity in each line was good.......some om's start off good and end up bad but yall had consistency.....i liked that...........it was very complex(AS ALWAYS) and overall yall did good (ADR UR RIGHT U ARE ON A ROLL) and white out ya shit was tight too......and about that peice u was tellin me that u were workin on ADR....i'll be lookin forward to it.....



if yall have time go check out my poem in poetic scriptures .........ita titled Don't Tell Me


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Hott shit yet again...white out I'd like to do a collab with you lol...git at me sometime and we can drop some dope shit together...all verses came with good flow and were hott as fuck...keep up the good work yall.....Much love, take it easy...

uppin....



good lookin on the feedback nas werd

real nice good structure good rhymes and the flow was great

This was a hot piece. My favorite verse was from ADR cause it flowed so nice the words made good screen-ta-brain contact, that was ill fam. White was nice to but his didnt exactly flow in that classical hip hop sence like ADR's did, still good though. All in all it was a dope drop. Content was a lil hard to grasp, but yall did good with the rhymes.
Peace

...werd good lookin peoples...

uppin

rise.....................

Whiteout-you did good on this piece.You had a good storyline to go with this piece.But one thing I would try to work on is using more emotion in your verses.You had good Imagry and your structure was good too.And your wordplay and vocabulary was good too.Keep up the good work.


ADR-thats some dope shit you wrote homie.But like I said to whiteout just try to put more emotion when you write your verses it will make it better.But you had a good storyline to go with this topic and that is good.Also you had good Imagry and a good structure too,And your wordplay and vocabulary was good too.Keep up the good work.

....good lookin on the feed va appreciate it


rise

thnx VA

lil more pos. feed in this bizatch

.......bumop.....

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