.:Masters of Puppets:. {SS Piece}

Masters of Puppets





Blur shadows progress unheard over the binary chessboard,
Silently, modern Pleidas caress violently the future of our world,
An absurd curled view cripples the individual,
..the compressed&swirled truth turns to quipu riddles...
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..How?
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Electromagnetic fields pollute the skies,
While deceiving puppet strings dilute their lies,
Evening anesthetic yields hypnotic slavery in their minds,
..Disguised gothic drapery before their eyes…
Blinds towards the plans of mass control
masses crawl under the shoulders of their controlled hands,
Brahman classes unfold around unseen borders
over the world’s cold lands,
Obscene orders hold down the reign of sheep pastors
thru oligarchic means,
..Elite masters abstain from rules as they maul freedoms
thru anarchic sins,
And all this remains just another brick in the wall?
Fools! Your leaders sustain the genes of greed,
Economy bleeds as this monarchic pigs rain
information showers thru the airways,
Nowadays nations devoured&slain thru hecatombs to the
mundane gods,
Chained ants to the system’s foundation lay in wounds
scoured&drained in pained squads,
Maintained poison floods sustain the bane in which
criminal administrations came,
Subliminal brainwashed minds restrained in
minimum rights..
..Retained in pitiful lifes…jailed in ridiculous lies.
All for their demise...
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Puppet strings at their wrist
controlled by them control the population,
I guess for them to exist..
..they need character assassination…

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^You should be banned for that.

This was cool. It was a bit vague for me and vocab seemed a little forced. It was still a cool piece. I liked the last piece from you I read, but this was decent. Keep up the good wor.

he seriously should be banned for that.

thx for the feed Wicked.I don't think i left anything vague.if you didn't understand some of my metaphors,tell which ones and i'll explain.

uppin

damn i really liked this. the wording was stunning. i havent been reading anything lately really cuz ive been so busy. this was very good though. very solid voice. perfect word choice. and i think you were very detailed in this. i didnt think anything was vague. i really liked the opening stanza. very good. keep repping homie.

Very creative and unique u had an outstanding vocabulary an outstanding mostly everything in here u painted the picture for me with those words had some stretched out lines but thats good had word structure and basicly this is a good piece really theres nothing i can recommend u to improve on this was perfect so keep up doin pieces like these u can go places with this piece good job here!

Upp byotch!

Uppin

An absurd curled view cripples the individual,
..the compressed&swirled truth turns to quipu riddles...

i liked this line.

Electromagnetic fields pollute the skies,
While deceiving puppet strings dilute their lies,

opening line is really good.

Fools! Your leaders sustain the genes of greed,
Economy bleeds as this monarchic pigs rain
information showers thru the airways,
Nowadays nations devoured&slain thru hecatombs to the
mundane gods,

yeh liekd this aswell .

your vocab was really nice flow was nice this was a excellent piece lots of nice lines to quote on stay up -1-

p.s hit me bak with some feed on my open mic in my sig appreciated

thanks for the feed.

this was nice, sounds like you really focused on the topic, stay on topic and flowed fluently throughout, structure was a bit distorted though....kinna short stretch out youre bars a bit longer.

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whoa, pretty nice k9.

Your new structure is nice, and it helps the flow, and its consistent. Multis were great, and your vocab was great as well......Keep dropping, and showing RB your full capabilities.

Peace

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Originally Posted by ~Untouchable~

This was aight...flow was whack in some parts...

Probably gothic. Meant to be lyrics to a rock song...

6/10

Need improvement...

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^STFU you fucking insect!gothic?!LMAO.Rock song?!LMAO!flow was wack?!LMAO!

LMAO@you...

Just fucking die dumbass!

ohh...that feels better.YAAY!



And Kost thanks for the feed.I really will check one of yours up sometime later.Busy,busy right now.


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Fuck that...Untouchable...SIGGED

uppin this gothic rock song...

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Upp ya gothic bitch

fuckaz

You Sure Do Up This A Lot. No More. If It Is, It Will Be Closed.

I also felt some of the word choices seemed forced, scheme worked for this, and the take on topic was very good. I really feel you didn't do enough to drive your message home, but it was there and understandable, just not very direct or in your face. I didn't get the sense of fire from you, you didn't come across as heated or bothered, more of a well this is what I think. I think added emotion would have brought this home, also a few changes to the wording. You could have gave this better transitions with better placed internals and more of a fluid read. You do show much improvement from the days I used to give you advice when you first started out in OM. Also you seemed to have grown into complex drops, before they were very studdered, and didn't feel smotth enough. Now there are coming together, most importantly you are learning who to aproach a topic better. I think SS has been very good for you elevation, so keep at it. This type of drop is extremely difficult to pull off, trust me, such a verse needs to have every component firing on all cylinders so to speak. Im glad to see you attemtping something like this, good stuff none the less man.

-Bounce