Keystyle

Some people say that I'm quick witted, I just spit my rhymes authentic
Like Jerseys, hopin u get in it
Its not really what i say or do, I'm just tryin to confuse you, whether or not, you even got a clue...
To admit it, get it... these lyrics i ripped it
Like a bunch of takes at the mic, it only takes me minutes
To drop somethin hot, to where my mic explodes
Flows overload faster than a computer rebootin over blown
Got this whole rap game thrown, like 50 cent, where I'm speakin to much over my throne
To see if I even got what it takes, i take the same mistakes overbaked
With or without white out...like Im on a correction break
If i ever had beef, I'd cook it...Like all the other reservational emcees I eat..I book it
I make the mic shook before i even spit, cuz it knows before i release the blows and rip, and lash out at it
To traumatize the waves, before i back out on it

:Switch:

Thinkin of another verse before i dispurse words outta my mouth on the first verbs i perfer
And its only 1 per word, that i word a verse before i murda da ink even after i rehearse
Its common sense, to rap common on da tracks bombin
Like spiritual believers, Its only a Omen

fav part...


I make the mic shook before i even spit, cuz it knows before i release the blows and rip, and lash out at it
To traumatize the waves, before i back out on it

:Switch:

Thinkin of another verse before i dispurse words outta my mouth on the first verbs i perfer
And its only 1 per word, that i word a verse before i murda da ink even after i rehearse
Its common sense, to rap common on da tracks bombin
Like spiritual believers, Its only a Omen




was feelin the top portion as much, the third bar wasa lil choppy on the flow...

i liked the last part cuz it made me want to read them twice


over all: cool drop

that was whack.you cant rap at all.if u mad lets battle bitch.

^^Always have dumbasses sayin shit...and um Ex, you dont want to battle me dawg...go take a ticket and wait in line....damn...herbs

Uppin on feedback people

Good complexity, Nice wordplay too. I suggest you work on the structure. Its hard to read like this. Try putting it in bars, like:

I went out wit ur mom
shes and uncle tom

Like thatl, Other than that good flow, keep it up

Nice verse but u used the word it a hell of a lot

Nice drop, keep drop nice shit

dont center it though, makes it harder to read

hit my new open Mic up

It was a little different. You can use rhymes well, but your not good at layout. But overall it was a pretty decent verse. You just need to practice a little bit, you'd be a pretty good MC.

The best part was the end.

"Thinkin of another verse before i dispurse words outta my mouth on the first verbs i perfer"

yo nice drop

Anymore feedback...holla

Anybody...feedback...lets gooo

EHH NOT BAD.

ight drop.. also , check the open mics for the dis to ex..

something we all can enjoy

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

good drop

dope dawg
kinda weird but Ill

rtf in sig mayne

Your structure needs work. The verse doesn't look presentable. Even though it's a keystyle, you can still have it look formal. Work on ending the line at the rhyme. The reader can pick up the flow easier. Maybe work on some writtens to a topic, where you can have more time to plan and edit your lines to have a smoother flow.
Thanks for checking out my open mic.

Thanx for the feed peeps...oh and Credz i dont understand what you mean...sorry plz explain

Oh ok...i got you here you go Credz....

Straight Ballin

The Real Streetz

Theres the two links...i knew i was forgetting something, just didnt know what...sorry about that

This was a nice overall piece, i enjoyed reading it, Nice flow and shit, Keep it up...And credz means that u leave feedback on 2 om's and paste the links in ya post, So please leave feedback on my new diss track OM, The link is in my sig under, Best diss on Rapbattles...Thanks

iz pretty cool i like free/keystyles most times thats when the real come out
pretty tuff & tite flo

check ma last key

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=181273

yo nice verse A...nice word play..good complexity...rally like the end that was tight....only thing i can say is lay it out differently...ight props..good work...

Thanx yall with the feedback....uppin a lil bit more..please

Anymore...............

good verse work on flow nice vocab choices all u do is to elevate on ur flow and bring more delivery to ur punchlines overall rate-6.0/10

I wasnt really worried about punchlines just u know some different style kind of delivery thats..all....uppin