I'm back........and better than ever

Ayo, Like 50 I'm spittin out lyrical massacre
words affectin the population lika natural disaster
Fathering these lyrically less fortunate bastards
& reshape'n the game like Imma fuckin stair master
Strippin back to the orginal like a sand blaster
Keepin yall up to date like a news broadcaster
I'm so fabulous comin to the mic wit all this real talk
About how shit goes down on my block
Got a few packin the glocks and choppin the rocks
But that ain't where the real shots are being pop'd
I'm talkin bout the sands of Iraq where the wars bein fought
And young lives being taken, bodies being mistaken
Cuz you can't identify dental records on blown off faces
But we got rappers worried about their record sales
When we got record sales in headstones from troops sacrificing themselfs
So we can live free and be all we can be
And please believe being over there in the heat its no cup a tea
So realize that, don't be ungrateful and do your part
Cuz Karma is real and shit will come back to bless your heart

nice bro freal, dont like the whole 50 thing cuz that cd really sucked, n i didnt like how u rhymed for like 4 lines, it had decent flow and good feeling. needs a title and ur good to go. nice job

Took my words rite outta my mouth !

This wasnt bad...

I dont really know what to say, needs a better title a better opening line. other than that I dont see much of a problem. You had a nice vocabulary all in all you just need a straighter, longer structure if you wanna catch my attention better.

Good meaning, but cant ac the top from the beginning.

Peace.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=2145450

thanks.

return good stuff here. not my perference of om but i liked it. this would be much better in audio. i think that is what this is going to be also. so that is good. your style amazes me. no matter how hard i try i cant write like you. you have the capiblitity to be clever i cannot do that. this was writen like something common sense would rap. i liked it. actually some pretty good meaning in there. just gotta look for it. nice to see you back reppin' stay up man!

This was straight....some creativity...altho some of the concept were played...nice key tho Return.

uppin for feedback.....keep it comin

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Originally Posted by STAT$

Ayo, Like 50 I'm spittin out lyrical massacre
words affectin the population lika natural disaster
Fathering these lyrically less fortunate bastards
& reshape'n the game like Imma fuckin stair master
Strippin back to the orginal like a sand blaster
Keepin yall up to date like a news broadcaster
I'm so fabulous comin to the mic wit all this real talk
About how shit goes down on my block
Got a few packin the glocks and choppin the rocks
But that ain't where the real shots are being pop'd
I'm talkin bout the sands of Iraq where the wars bein fought
And young lives being taken, bodies being mistaken
Cuz you can't identify dental records on blown off faces
But we got rappers worried about their record sales
When we got record sales in headstones from troops sacrificing themselfs
So we can live free and be all we can be
And please believe being over there in the heat its no cup a tea
So realize that, don't be ungrateful and do your part
Cuz Karma is real and shit will come back to bless your heart

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^ im feeling this... some hott shit, i like the fact you stayed with one type of rhyme ''massacre, disaster, bastards, stair master''

return the feeback:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...06#post2145806

if that was your best i dont want to hear your worst... it wasnt bad or nothing... but it wasnt good... the word play was good, really good, some ok rhymes... multies were shit cause there werent any to begin with, flow was decent... ah whatever... soso... work on it

Word.......this is not my best work lol Its just a (key) but anyway thanx for the feed.....keep it comin

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Originally Posted by STAT$

Word.......this is not my best work lol Its just a (key) but anyway thanx for the feed.....keep it comin

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my only adive to u and a lot of ppl in this site... add more MULTIESS!!!! lol

^^^ ok *labels her "queen of multis"*......well keep the feed comin pz

^^^ lol!!! joker

Wasn't to bad, had a nice flow .
Good structure, this was a nice well rounded piece .
Stay up .

Thanx for the feed............keep it comin

nice drop.had structure and flow.ya touched some topics on the war in irak,had somethin to say;that was good.don't like 50 so i didn't like the 50 spit.overall it was like it said nice.not somethin to say "back.....and better then ever",needs improvements.didn't feel the piece that good either,don't know what was the cause,maybe cuz it's an ordinary drop;nuthin spectaculos.but,keep it up!

return the fav
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175929

2 me da shit was hot but then again about anytthing with alot
of vocabulary iz hot

you had a nice flow going through it, simple wordplay but nice flow. you kinda steered off from the begining to the end, talking about one thing then changing to the deaths in iraq, work on that..otherwise nice lil piece, keep working..1

Acctually everything does tie into eachother.........but thanx for the feed

"When we got record sales in headstones from troops sacrificing themselfs "

i think this is my favorite line, it speaks truth, and it was well written, could have been longer but keep droppin.....

:shoot:KALIKOZE9/11:shoot:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175825
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=175764

^^thanx for your input keep it comin..............