Tha Feeling of Death(ft.Lyrically Insane)

Yo aight here go a lil emotional drop for yall homies!!

RED

On my third strike.. i hit rock bottom.. then i turn right..
Fall through dawn.. spring past evening then i burn nights..
Death.. my urn fights.. the battle of going North or South..
Devil scorch my mouth!... told my soul to come forth, come out..
The mourners pout.. no more.. the strongest egos break apart..
Even the fakest hearts need a match for the flame to start..
This is death.. people are so sneaky.. the speech is lurkin..
Its more than not breathing other things can flee their purpose..
Rape the smart.. perverted knowledge.. throw dirt at fallen..
Erk the rawest.. the nurse is callin after i hurt the smallest..
To heal bigger and feel quicker when im home at dawn..
Smoke the wrong then roll the right, no tonight.. as a whole im gone..
A broken song.. found lying in the mist.. trying to be fixed..
Crying to the bitch above who let it start dying in the mix..
This is death of all sorts a small portion of each kind..
Through the sleek mind of a geek tryin to let you know..
..with a gentle flow.. how everything dies..


LYRICALLY INSANE

Let's play..done with right..I'm going the left way..
I'd be hard-pressed to find imprints on the next page..
Of this life..poisoned with stressed rage..done with spite..
On a quest, great..echoes of love twist and run from sight..
An obsessed sage..throw knowledge to the wind for barren buds..
Daring nuns to let it down..no more greasy than the hair of sluts..
Fair enough..I'm a loser..I guess we let the victors trample..
And my fire isn't considered lit..until the girl licks my candle..
Kiss my sandals..stompin with Jesus..back to heaven and hell..
Bleaching the original color of culture..cuz lack of melanin sells..
Heading to cells..chained by love letters, stale and old..
And the doors are always open..if you could brave the cold..
On the outside of the wall..grace is loathed..riding the highest of squalls..
Face the votes..you get hated..for not being biased at all..
Hiding in stalls..cooling tempers with frozen bits of breath..
Bruise your honor..abuse your saga..in between hits of meth..
This is death..no laughter, emotion, or fear..everyone's vision wrecked..
Seashells decieve the ears that the ocean is near..makin ya women wet..
Hoping is clear..and don't think we don't spot a mentality in neglect..
This is death..where a God doesn't exist..lay alone in darkness..
The line to Heaven wasn't as missed..cuz we payed the toll in hardships..
Dozens of fists..light abuses my sleep..pounding my face and jaws..
Losing my teeth..to my ex-lover..and now her face erases awe..
Accusing this heat..of leaving in time of need..by myself is better..
If God's real..then my eyes'll bleed..send me to hell decked in sweaters..
Dimes pay heed..You'll live to hate my guts..maybe you are lovely..
With the face of a slut..theives in the darkness..take my heart above me..
A piece of hard wit..and I'm the target..in between hits of meth..
This is death..

it may seem weird that insane got more lines then me,but it was his idea and i guess he had more ideas abouit the topik so thats probably why





http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=172704

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=173104

Yo cmon people!....

leave feedback homies...tight drop right here!!!!!1

BUMPING!!!!!!!!!!!!

yo dawg i like that shit you and you cuz collab nicely pm me nigga we need to talk about a collab or a 2 on 2 battle how do i try out for ny crews ?

fuckin deep, good piece, liked it all...

wow i was expecting this to be wack but i was surprised. i liked how you used direction to show the different takes on this. i thought both were good and lyrical you really surprised me. this was a very deep and emotional drop. normally i would tell you guys that you need to work on the structure but it fit this piece. just becuase you guys would use a multi and then put a period after is and it really slowed the read down. but it fit this piece because it really gave time to let everything sink in for the reader. nice word choice but the one thing i would have to pick on is it seemed like a couple of the multi's were a llittle forced. if they wernt then they just didnt need to be there. overall nice piece you guys surprised me.. 8/10

can you two drop some feed on my piece called angel. and thanks lyrically for droping on the getaway

my link: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=173150

BUMPING THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

yeh ill drop on ANGEl DJB.................

This was a pretty nice peace, I was feeling lyircal's verse more tho IMO, Big ups keep blessing..

.......upping this people!.....

Pimpin ass rap both u blasted that shit away :shoot:

bump

I like Both verse yall both had something to really say

Most MC's just brag or shit but yall really said something

Good ass Work

this was pretty good 7/10 peep there pt1 give sum feed

this was a really deep collab yall did it was good

RED
you verse was real emotional an twisted I really liked it.You had real good wordplay and you made it sound so deep it was amazing.It felt like I was in a dream for a second when I read your verse.You had real good Imagination in your verse I really like it.8/10


LYRICALLY INSANE
man homie your verse was fire.Had your multies goin and your complex structure.Also your verse was more twisted and emotional than reds verse.I could Imagine where I was at in the verse when I read it.You can really feel how the scene is when I read your verse it had me really amazed.10/10

But this was a really good OM from both of you we should collab sometime homies holla at me

great piece really feelin it yall need ta colabagain real soon

It Was Dope The Whole Verse Was Dope Keep It Up Nice Flows And Everything!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Both Of Yall Got Skillz

that joint was tight man i like that

althought noone can explain death til experienced

this wuz a tight piece all around it hit me man great job
keep on writing that wuz sum deep shit
some of ur flow fell apart in 2nd part
but somehow u brought it back together man

good shit

show the same luv i did and leave some feedback on my open mic
newest piece is on very bottom of my sig called Silver Roads

it was two different peeps homie^...lmao

up.

this was a dope piece....i also half expected it to be shitty.....bravo.....very emotional....and i enjoyed tha theoretic view on death from both verses....tight wordplay...tight imagery....good rhyme scheme and beautifull vocab....keep droppin tha hottness...

thanx homie^