House rules dawg
drop within a hour after check in
(this is not my check in)
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House rules dawg
drop within a hour after check in
(this is not my check in)
Iiiight im droppin 10, match me, this is my check in
Here is my check in
Droppin in a few
The Retard index
*hook=type of punch, part in a song
*genes/jeans, lines=clothing lines
*Hes from "The Ring" detroit
I press tab thru ur assumptions, cause ur still jus a rook
How u ‘jab wit no punches?’ U could get sonned by a ‘hook’
Peeps shook to battle me, I make call outs n no one will say shit
They want me to ‘hit the road’, so ill throw ‘jabs on the pavement’
Writers block for u is hereditary that’s y ya raps is fake
Wackness is jus in ur ‘jeans’,so my ‘lines’ will make u ‘levi-tate’
Everything u spit is weak, Id win even if I no-show fo this
Dog, ull never spit on ‘tracks’, unless labels have ‘loco-motives’
Heres the facts, the bars I bring, well easily top this cat
So I’ll throw Jabs around ‘The Ring’ like it’s a boxing match
Its been more than an hour since ur check in u set the time limit, and i dont like feeders:nono: , not sayin u will, it jus tends to happen when i drop first, Unnecessary up #1Quote:
Originally Posted by JAbs
Reputations, I stripped-so-many-fully... sick and sent-to-the-clinic-cruely
You good... but don't let 'ego' push you like 'schitzophrenic bully'
And when its done... when you see in a forum you'll be scared and faceless
And told me to match with him... to be compared to greatness
In the rare cases... he's an addition to the bodies that I store for lunches
And ya 'arms' is 'weak'... you need 'splints' to 'support' ya 'punches'
Just in case you want 'beef'... you can 'engulf' these bars whore
I'm destined to be 'famous'... even 'Chewbakka' couldn't put up a "Star War"
Just got scarred more... an became shooken-like-the-most
And thanks for the ass in ya avy... something worth looking-at-when-you-post
My fault man I was bull shittin watchin' Dave Chapelle and shit
My bad
Reputations, I stripped-so-many-fully... sick and sent-to-the-clinic-cruely
You good... but don't let ya 'ego' push you like a 'schitzophrenic bully'
And when its done... when you see me in a forum you'll be scared and faceless
And told me to match with him... to be compared to greatness
In the rare cases... he's an addition to the bodies that I store for lunches
And ya 'arms' is 'weak'... you need 'splints' to 'support' ya 'punches'
Just in case you want 'beef'... you can 'engulf' these bars whore
I'm destined to be 'FAMOUS'... even 'Chewbakka' couldn't put up a "STAR War"
Just got scarred more... an became shooken-like-the-most
And thanks for the ass in ya avy... something worth looking-at-when-you-post
Had to post it again because I had too many mistakes. My fault again.
Uppin 4 votes man
This was a good battle. Punches and personals were good from both, and both had a good flow and a readable structure. The things that each member excelled in the other didn't have much to show for. JAbs had some multies, while Chewy didn't have any, but Chewy had some funny ass wordplay and JAbs didn't really have anything. The thing that determined the battle for me was Chewy's funny wordplay because it added an extra edge to his verse giving him the slightly better verse.
Really good battle.
Quotables:
Chewbakka:
I press tab thru ur assumptions, cause ur still jus a rook
How u ‘jab wit no punches?’ U could get sonned by a ‘hook’
Nice.
Everything u spit is weak, Id win even if I no-show fo this
Dog, ull never spit on ‘tracks’, unless labels have ‘loco-motives’
It didn't even have great flow, but that second line was nice.
JAbs:
Just in case you want 'beef'... you can 'engulf' these bars whore
I'm destined to be 'FAMOUS'... even 'Chewbakka' couldn't put up a "STAR War"
First line didn't make sense, but the second one wasn't bad.
ust got scarred more... an became shooken-like-the-most
And thanks for the ass in ya avy... something worth looking-at-when-you-post
Not bad, but again, the first line didn't make too much sense.
Good battle.
Keep elevating.
this was yes a very one sided battle here chewbakka took this battle on all levels #1 he had nice concepts that actually had me laughing a little # Jab came forced to the max with multies people think multies win battles but really they dont at all. you came played also with weak punches awhile the other dude had punches and personals very onesided indeed dont hate just stating the truth good battle
Chewbakka: good, consistent flow throughout, really liked They want me to ‘hit the road’, so ill throw ‘jabs on the pavement' - THAT's a punch! And So I’ll throw Jabs around ‘The Ring’ like it’s a boxing match. Personals win battles, that's how I see it...good effort!
JAbs: Takin' yo time is never good, esp. when you set the rules! Means you gotta come back twice as hard - and you didn't. Lines like I'm destined to be 'famous'... even 'Chewbakka' couldn't put up a "Star War are great, but on they own, it's not enough. You had good flow, just lacked content. Outclassed, straight up...
VOTE: Chewbakka
Check sig...return favour (will poll once I reach 100 posts)
No prob, just got some shit I need to work on.
Uppin
Good drop Chewbakka
Thanks, yea u too, uppin this shit, lets get some votes in here people, all votes will be returned by the both of us. 1
i'd have to vote chewbakka just cuz he had something that was a little better than jabs... both good verses and good battle but just a little more on chewbakkas side... i'd vote but can't vote for me tho if u can
Originally posted by:Chewbakka
I press tab thru ur assumptions, cause ur still jus a rook
How u ‘jab wit no punches?’ U could get sonned by a ‘hook’
AIGHT OPENER
Peeps shook to battle me, I make call outs n no one will say shit
They want me to ‘hit the road’, so ill throw ‘jabs on the pavement’
GOOD PERSONAL
Writers block for u is hereditary that’s y ya raps is fake
Wackness is jus in ur ‘jeans’,so my ‘lines’ will make u ‘levi-tate’
I LIKED THIS BUT YA FIRST TWO BARS ARE THE BEST
Everything u spit is weak, Id win even if I no-show fo this
Dog, ull never spit on ‘tracks’, unless labels have ‘loco-motives’
ANOTHER GOOD LINE YO ASS JUST DON'T RUN OUTTA LINES DO YOU
Heres the facts, the bars I bring, well easily top this cat
So I’ll throw Jabs around ‘The Ring’ like it’s a boxing match
GOOD ENDING BUT NO FATALITY PLUS ON TOP OF THAT GOOD PERSONAL
keep it up I already know about you it's self explanatory and shit.peace
Originally posted by:Jabs
Reputations, I stripped-so-many-fully... sick and sent-to-the-clinic-cruely
You good... but don't let ya 'ego' push you like a 'schitzophrenic bully'
MEH OPENER JUST FOR THE SIMPLE FACT THAT CRUELY AND BULLY DON'T RHYME.GOOD SHIT THOUGH
And when its done... when you see me in a forum you'll be scared and faceless
And told me to match with him... to be compared to greatness
YA 1ST LINE WAS STRETCHED TO MUCH AND I THAT FACELESS LINE PLAYED
In the rare cases... he's an addition to the bodies that I store for lunches
And ya 'arms' is 'weak'... you need 'splints' to 'support' ya 'punches'
PROBLY ONE OF YA BEST BARS
Just in case you want 'beef'... you can 'engulf' these bars whore
I'm destined to be 'FAMOUS'... even 'Chewbakka' couldn't put up a "STAR War"
MAYBE OR MAYBE IS IT ANOTHER PLAYED STAR WAR'S JOKE JUST LIKE STEVE-O SAID YOU GOTTA LEARN THE HARD WAY. ONLY SAY STAR WAR'S JOKES IF THEY ARE SMASHING
Just got scarred more... an became shooken-like-the-most
And thanks for the ass in ya avy... something worth looking-at-when-you-post
CLOSER WAS STRETCHED JUST LIKE ONE OF THE OTHER BARS IN YA SPIT
BUT DON'T GET IT TWISTED YA SHIT IS HOT BUT YOU GOT TO WORK ON THE STRETCHED SHIT AND STRUCTURE...THAT'S PROBLY ABOUT IT.
V/Chewy
for overall stronger punches and cleaner wordplay along wit more decent personals' good shit both of you though.
favor already returned by one kat peace.
Not bad, Chewy did better though.
Funnier, better punches and all that.
JAbs, I've seen worse out of Frontr Lines., but you need work on perosnals mostly.
aight..good battle....they really some decent talent on here....both came with good punches..
chewbakka....nice verse...kept the punches comin constently...some good wordplay in there..some ok multies....u came damn hard with the personals ..overall u had a nice drop..enjoyed readin it..some funny lines....
jabs...another good verse..kept comin with the punches.....once again nice muties..wordplay and personals....but i just dont think u came as hard.....for me its just all bout the punches and personals....and chewbakka came hard with both so im gonna have to say he edged it cos they just hit harder...no hate...pz
my vote=chewbakka
shit ma bad....i cnt vote..i aint got 100 posts...sorry bout tht guys..anyway..ive gave u feedback and upped this for ya....pz
well Chew, you could be an ok battler, but you need to learn whats played and not played.. most of your verse has already been done a countless amount of times, but non the less.. you still won.. Jabs, dont come so stretched, shorten your lines, and drop all those multis, there not needed.. also drop the ---- shit connecting them.. and chew, drop the '...' stuff around ya wordplay, we can see it
now
Heres the facts, the bars I bring, well easily top this cat
So I’ll throw Jabs around ‘The Ring’ like it’s a boxing match
that won the battle, seeing as it was the only ok punch in this
so V. Chew
Thanks for the constructive criticism *trys harder* uppin #3
nice battle.. i liked both verses,, really had a nice structure to read n shit.. punches were produced by both at a same level,,
chews boxing line was nice
jabs close was real nice also
wordplay was chews obviously
metas were jabs
personals were chews and bit of jab
chew got this cause he threw a shade harda punches in this.. i liked both verses but yeh u got this 1.. nice battle and g/l to both.. peace
in return vote here.. please honestly
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=158938
v/ chewbakka, nice battle over all but i liked chewbakkas better because of his word play
Damnt, thanks noobies for the feedback, but please lets get some peeps in here to vote that can poll vote please
Yeah man you got me, lets me know that I need some workin' to do
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chews bars were much more solid as far as line for line goes. jab just used fillers for each first line.
chews flow was ok, but jabs was just bad. work on making the lines sound good as far as structure goes.
finally, chews lines were more creative in general, such as bar 2. jabs were somewhat iffy.
for the reasons above...
v/chew