Sweats And Kicks ..

"Life is how you live it, and how you present yourself"




Often i'll cruise the mall,
stop, and read the signs ..
.. Always seekin' latest fashion at a cheaper price.
Got drawers fulla unique designs,
and resounding garments ..
.. Each measured to perfection; right down to arms length.
Dressed up ..
.. My whole outfit paid in cheques;
See im an impatient head, who likes rockin the latest threads -
days before they hit stores ..
.. it cant really be described in words.
but these designer shirts,
priced at three, times their worth ..
make ME feel good on the inside .. and fill in my day,
So, if that costs five hundred dollars ..




.. shit - im willing to pay.



Pz.


http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...wpost&t=129024

no hate, didnt like the rhyme scheme
flow was off to me, maybe ijust
couldnt catch it, i could see, faintly
that u talkin bout materialism and all
that, but u could have set a ending
up more, or maybe thats what u goin for?
but not yah best no doubt :D

How can the flow be off? Gay reply.

dude just take criticism in stride, not everything
u write is gonna be godly and above.

WHAT THE FUCK ARE YOU COMING OUT WITH NOW?!

i havent once said that, but how the fuck can the 'flow' be off - when

1) its wrote to the beat of the song 'sweats and kicks'
2) its text - duh.
3) you have no clue how it flows, as you havent heard me recite it.

that was the most stupid thing ever.

:/ u say nothing of this song, i dont know this song
u think everyone thats gonna read this is gonna
jump to the conclusion that o yea this might be that
one song, flow is how u read it in your mind.
if its so that u have to think about how something
reads good together, u wanna know why i say flow?
cuz this aint audio if i wanted to hear it, u should of
dropped a link to audio.

:/ w/e dude stop beefing its just one peice, im sure
the next of ur peices will be just as dope as before.

Im not even gonna reply, i cant be bothered speaking on something you wont get.

You've said what you wanted, move on.

Hmm - the way I read it, it flows.. go figure.. I liked this.. short and to the point.. structure made the flow easy to pick up even w/out the beat.. so iunno what dude was talking about.. what else can I say about this ? hmm.. shit.. i`m out of things to say.. uhh.. good read Cam. Pz.

oh yeah - http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=128896 check that out.. be brutally honest.. i don`t care.. just want to improve some more. appreciate it.

that was good...nice...short but rhyme scheme kepyt me interested...to the point...short and sweet....really good..hti up my new one

^link me crigga.

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=128710

it isn't that good...comin off a several month hiatus from writing

done.

K this was decent man...
The topic is kinda played...
Rhyme scheme was normal baron style i thought...
Length affected it for me...I wanted to read more
Baron honestly how much time did you put into this? 10 minutes?
come on Post some fire, somthing legendary...get your spot back!

well that was decent and strait to the point...not the greatest but it was good overall i didn't like ur rhyme scheme tho but i understood u completely......aiight good tho all around.....vote on the open mic in my sig

lol

'venge, i think you missed the point where - i dont feel the need to write anything for here anymore. they deleted my spot, thats all their is to it. i dont feel like writing anything for here.

this is good man

i really enjoy reading your battles and topicals
you got text talent, i dunno about audio

but this is good, rhymes good and the multies are nice

drop more often, and PM me the links :)

This was decent. Nothing wrong with it except that it was a little short. But, then again, your Baron Mynd, anything you write is good. lol. Nice job.

Ha, made me chuckle. Good stuff, I did get the rhyme scheme and to me it came smooth. Message was an easy concept, about materialism and maybe it even has something to do with some one you know in real life.

It wasn't too deep, and not too strong, very in the middle. But hell, mediocracy is better than horrible. I liked the way you didn't take the subject to an incredibly serious level and decided to keep it calm and collective. Vocabulary wasn't at its best, very simple, but it didn't take to much away from the piece because it was all smoothed out. I liked the piece for what it was, it could have been better, or it could have been worse. Luckily, it was just right.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...42#post1415142

yea dog i wus feelin that lil verse u spit dog, had sum multis up n it
cus if it aint multis n a verse i don't even really take the time 2 read the whole thing
so i like that and, the topic wus unique 2 n i could relate 2 that , so keep it up my nig