10-15 Lines
30 minute deadline
G-luck
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10-15 Lines
30 minute deadline
G-luck
Ya lines filled with a soft n sweet touch, like crispe creams/
u need ta up ya weight, maybe get some of Biggie's beef/
Im gonna let my Tek spray all day where ya text lay/
cuz ya verse is like a Chucky doll what u sayin is childsplay/
so why waste my rhymes with this obvious waist of time/
I see the concepts your trying to make but your text blind/
Why cant he do audio?, cuz we dont want to hear a bitch talk/
i'll get a Ho with Great Aim to show u i got me a Trick Shot/
serve a survey ta ask wut could of been better with this battle/
and the results would be If Slim actually had an opponent ta battle/
Quick Verse~
Ya ''FUSE-IS-BUSTED'' 'Like Wet Plugs' Plus 'Lose Can See' This ''DUDE-IS-RUSTED''..
I'll 'Punch My Hotness' Through Your 'Blood Stream' Havin You ''OOZIN-MUSTARD''.
''FILL-SINS-GLOATIN'' 'Lying Your Ill' I'll 'Check His Neck' & ''KILL-HIM-CHOKIN''..
Coz U Couldnt Have 'A Mouth Of Hotness' If U Was 'Filled With Cum' Like ''LIL-KIM-DEEPTHROATING''.
''CHOOSE-UR-FAIT'' Yo..Look I'm Letting You 'Decide Your Death' ''LOSE-IS-GREAT''..
But Remember...I'm 'Blockin Your Light ' With ' Heavy Punches' So Dont ''CONFUSE-UR-WEIGHT''
''COOKED-AND-GRILLED'' 'Like Christmas Turkey's' This ''fuckS-ALREADY-KILLED''..
'Only Time' You Could 'Pluck Holes Through Me' Is When You ''PUNCH-WITH-DRILLZ''.
''NEWS-JUST-HEARD'' Ur Ill?But Yet 'Wins Unknown' Got Guys Like''WHO'S-THE-BIRD?''..
Cause I'm 'Gainin A Win Digit' From 'Your Words' Its Like Eyez Has ''SUED-YOUR-VERSE''
A ''FAKE-ass-GEEK'' Claimin 'Uve Won people'& U 'Bring Heat' But The''STAKES-ARE-STEAP''.
Its 'Like Heart Beat Monitor's' On 'Dead Pensioners' The Way No-One ''RATES-YOUR-BEATS''.
Took 2 long and its 10-15 lines so basically ur DQed but ill still let them vote
damn
slim thug been gone for a minute
i remember this cat from back wen i was Iceman
you must be rusty
cause you just got your ass whooped
your rhymes werent rhyming
your content was shitty
personals wasnt felt
flow was off
played concepts
rapidfire wins because he used creativity
and had wordplay and multis
he had the better verse
v/ rapid fire
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Axiom
thug you back man?........................................
ha ya im back...ima start gettin serious on this shit soon tho..The kid didnt spit in 30 like he was supposed 2 .. Mine sucked cuz it was quick but yuh ima do some shit now hola
man my computer froze and shyt but sorry .. i tryied to put it in but it got stuck and it turned off and i had to redue my whole verse so lets get some more votes on this please uppin .. LEAVE LINKS AND WILL RETURN THE FAVOR
Slimg-that was horirbly ugly and disgusting..
I've seen alot better form you that looked like
you let a newb on your name to type the verse
get rid of the / at each end of line and your
punches were played and just overall not very
well...good..or witty...
Rapid-well get rid of all the '**' and the
***-**-*** «dont do that..it messes up
dont put your stuff in caps either just bold it
and work on your structure It wasnt very good
stretched but your punches were a little less played
and they hit a bit harder both came very weak tho
My V/Rapid...go vote on my battle with Trogdor..
Ya lines filled with a soft n sweet touch, like crispe creams/
u need ta up ya weight, maybe get some of Biggie's beef/
I liked the refrence you made, Good punch.
Im gonna let my Tek spray all day where ya text lay/
cuz ya verse is like a Chucky doll what u sayin is childsplay/
This was a good punch too.
so why waste my rhymes with this obvious waist of time/
I see the concepts your trying to make but your text blind/
Hmmm...didn't really make too much sense....
Why cant he do audio?, cuz we dont want to hear a bitch talk/
i'll get a Ho with Great Aim to show u i got me a Trick Shot/
lol....good punch...
serve a survey ta ask wut could of been better with this battle/
and the results would be If Slim actually had an opponent ta battle/
seemed pretty decent...
Over all:good job....although I've never seen you battle before...you did good...and you should work on your rhymes though....
RAPID FIRE:
Ya ''FUSE-IS-BUSTED'' 'Like Wet Plugs' Plus 'Lose Can See' This ''DUDE-IS-RUSTED''..
I'll 'Punch My Hotness' Through Your 'Blood Stream' Havin You ''OOZIN-MUSTARD''.
''FILL-SINS-GLOATIN'' 'Lying Your Ill' I'll 'Check His Neck' & ''KILL-HIM-CHOKIN''..
Coz U Couldnt Have 'A Mouth Of Hotness' If U Was 'Filled With Cum' Like ''LIL-KIM-DEEPTHROATING''.
''CHOOSE-UR-FAIT'' Yo..Look I'm Letting You 'Decide Your Death' ''LOSE-IS-GREAT''..
But Remember...I'm 'Blockin Your Light ' With ' Heavy Punches' So Dont ''CONFUSE-UR-WEIGHT''
''COOKED-AND-GRILLED'' 'Like Christmas Turkey's' This ''fuckS-ALREADY-KILLED''..
'Only Time' You Could 'Pluck Holes Through Me' Is When You ''PUNCH-WITH-DRILLZ''.
''NEWS-JUST-HEARD'' Ur Ill?But Yet 'Wins Unknown' Got Guys Like''WHO'S-THE-BIRD?''..
Cause I'm 'Gainin A Win Digit' From 'Your Words' Its Like Eyez Has ''SUED-YOUR-VERSE''
A ''FAKE-ass-GEEK'' Claimin 'Uve Won people'& U 'Bring Heat' But The''STAKES-ARE-STEAP''.
Its 'Like Heart Beat Monitor's' On 'Dead Pensioners' The Way No-One ''RATES-YOUR-BEATS''.
All I can say is you won this battle with your abundance of multies and rhyming...your punches need some improvement, though....other than that....and your flow was a bit wierd, but you had better flow than slimthug.
Vote/Rapid Fire
i like slim thug he strait bodied homie BUT fusion be spitting that pilf (hott hott shit) hard 2 decide but i like the metaphors slim used both yall hot but he got the vote honestly
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=126226
i like to tell rapid that shit was nice too i just like the chucky line it put him over the tie but u nice homie honestly
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=126226
rapid fire took this one!
Slim you need some work boy. Your stucture was on and your delivery was ok. Try shortening your lines and matching each with syllables and you'll be arite. Other than that you need some work bro! Creativity, concepts, vocabulary. all that shit needs some work man. elevate man! check the tutorial page on the main page of this forum and it'll help ya if u read it. Star line was this anyways. . .
Why cant he do audio?, cuz we dont want to hear a bitch talk/
i'll get a Ho with Great Aim to show u i got me a Trick Shot/
^ not bad... could use some work ...
Rapid fire you fucking sent a barrage of lyrics at this kid. You seemed kinda rusty but you still dealt it well. YOu had good diction, vocab, delivery, flow, etc. Your concepts were pretty cool. Personals and punches were dubbin him out well. Motha fuckah was gettin dubbed this round. Your multis bitch slapped him 2 the ground! heres your star line. . . .
''CHOOSE-UR-FAIT'' Yo..Look I'm Letting You 'Decide Your Death' ''LOSE-IS-GREAT''..
But Remember...I'm 'Blockin Your Light ' With ' Heavy Punches' So Dont ''CONFUSE-UR-WEIGHT''
^ good stuff homey!
\/ote Rapid Fire
'
iight thankz uppin for more will return the favor
uppinn............................. 1x
U went ova time limit..Excuse or not its gettin DQEd but I will battle u again if u want~
man please you just crying cuz you got ripped
holy fucking shit u bunch of muhfuking herbs
i saw one guy vote against slim thug cuz he said rapid had better flow and multis.. but slim had much harder punches and rapid needed to work on em
what the fuck
punches win battles homos.. not multis
shit.. slim get out of front lines
damn herbs
word....
rapidfire's shit was stretched as hell....
his punches werent witty, flow was horrible..
wordplay sucked... metas didnt make sense...
personals, they're were none...
go to lll and read some battle kid and learn how to battle proficiently..
slim -
structure was ok... flow was there... opener... was eh... alright...
your lines actually made sense... punches were weak but they were,
s little creative.... and ATcually there...
vote slim....
for having punches.
people got to start recognizing that structure gives u points
if yurs is fucked up like rapids was you get deducted aight
and if yurs was good like slims was than u get rewarded
personally i hate bad structure, makes it hard to read
which also brings me to my next point it fucks up wordplay
as in slims wordplay was much better cuz i read it nicely
and as for rapids wordplay was horrid made me look away
serve a survey ta ask wut could of been better with this battle/
and the results would be If Slim actually had an opponent ta battle/
^this punch right here wins this, eventhough battle was used twice
i felt slim was also more witty which is really a key factor in text
personals in this battle were horrid i didnt see any at all man
and there was a lot of filler and ramblings of off subject shit
so this battle was about punches, structure, wordplay and wittyness
which slim took all of them, ok battle ive seen slim do better
and for rapid fix yur struc now people hate that shit
and try including actual personals that hit directly ok man
vote/slimthug
oh yeah slim thug peep one of my battles and dont forget dogg
aight then man, thanks and good luck in ya up coming battles
and rapid dont vote on my battles if its gonna be a hate vote
only vote if yur gonna vote honestly like i did aight man peaceout
and also good luck on yur up coming battles i see u elavating
anways uppin.......................................2x
uppin
yo rapid fire wuts goin on son....u was suppose to battle me a while back but u aint neva show up...now i no u aint scared nigga
well uppin on this.. and maybe lata
Slim
Ya lines filled with a soft n sweet touch, like crispe creams/
u need ta up ya weight, maybe get some of Biggie's beef/
Didnt rhyme and didnt hit, weak opener
Im gonna let my Tek spray all day where ya text lay/
cuz ya verse is like a Chucky doll what u sayin is childsplay/
gun bullshit is played out
so why waste my rhymes with this obvious waist of time/
I see the concepts your trying to make but your text blind/
ehhh ok i guess
Why cant he do audio?, cuz we dont want to hear a bitch talk/
i'll get a Ho with Great Aim to show u i got me a Trick Shot/
1st like was goin somewhere 2nd fucked it
serve a survey ta ask wut could of been better with this battle/
and the results would be If Slim actually had an opponent ta battle/
wow rhymed battle with battle, whack ass closer
4/10 only for good structure
Rapid Fire
Ya ''FUSE-IS-BUSTED'' 'Like Wet Plugs' Plus 'Lose Can See' This ''DUDE-IS-RUSTED''..
I'll 'Punch My Hotness' Through Your 'Blood Stream' Havin You ''OOZIN-MUSTARD''.
ok opener, avg meta, good multies
''FILL-SINS-GLOATIN'' 'Lying Your Ill' I'll 'Check His Neck' & ''KILL-HIM-CHOKIN''..
Coz U Couldnt Have 'A Mouth Of Hotness' If U Was 'Filled With Cum' Like ''LIL-KIM-DEEPTHROATING''.
ok punch
''CHOOSE-UR-FAIT'' Yo..Look I'm Letting You 'Decide Your Death' ''LOSE-IS-GREAT''..
But Remember...I'm 'Blockin Your Light ' With ' Heavy Punches' So Dont ''CONFUSE-UR-WEIGHT''
lol funny but not really a punch
''COOKED-AND-GRILLED'' 'Like Christmas Turkey's' This ''fuckS-ALREADY-KILLED''..
'Only Time' You Could 'Pluck Holes Through Me' Is When You ''PUNCH-WITH-DRILLZ''.
not really a punch more of how bad u are but still funny and good meta
''NEWS-JUST-HEARD'' Ur Ill?But Yet 'Wins Unknown' Got Guys Like''WHO'S-THE-BIRD?''..
Cause I'm 'Gainin A Win Digit' From 'Your Words' Its Like Eyez Has ''SUED-YOUR-VERSE''
mehhh not really
A ''FAKE-ass-GEEK'' Claimin 'Uve Won people'& U 'Bring Heat' But The''STAKES-ARE-STEAP''.
Its 'Like Heart Beat Monitor's' On 'Dead Pensioners' The Way No-One ''RATES-YOUR-BEATS''.
lmao good closer, was the knock out blow
structure- slim
rhyme- rapid
multies- obviously rapid, crazy multies kid
personals - slim
punches - def rapid
v- rapid
honest vote so hit my shit up, links are in sig, will pole vote after one of ya'll drops a vote
iight thanz uppin ima vote ont hat battle drop your poll
You said that after he droppedQuote:
Originally Posted by Slim Thug
and then he started getting votes
and you say this....
HipicritQuote:
Originally Posted by Slim Thug
Anyways.. uppin for these 2
Also.. Rapid Fire has posted 7 times
after both verses were down..
This is his only warning
if he post in here again..
he will be disqualified
Slimg-that was bad in this battle..
I've seen alot better better battles from you....you typed some shit like a 5 yr old no offense get rid of the / at each end of line and your
punches were bad also
Overall 6/10
Rapid-stop usin '**' and the
***-**-*** your structure was ok wasnt tha best...ive also seen u come harder then you did here...you lines were kinda streched and that threw off ya flow...u had harder hitting punches and personals tho....and that gave u this win
My V/Rapid
good shit rapid fire :thumbup:Quote:
Originally Posted by Rapid fire
Well my vote has to go to Rapid-Fire...
Slim:Your verse was average....some decent punches...I liked the biggie line...Your sctructure was also a little better but not many personals...and a couple of your punches were a little weak, but it was on flow and a pretty good verse...
Rapid:I didnt like the structure you used too much...but the content was a bit better...lots of multies tied together nicely...with some pretty good punches, lacked a little bit in the personals, but I still think your verse was enough to win this...