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Ladies and Gentlemean Hold your applause/I would like to thank Kiss mother for sucking my balls/Nigga do you wanna die?/ With that name you should be on queer eye for the straight guy/The only kisses I give r the kiss of death/nigga you old trash thats why you about to get swept/Hey dumbass Young is spelled wrong/You don't need to be raping you need to be to singin old ballad songs/Danm homie you make me sick/Im starting to think Im I battling a man or a worthless piece of shit/Battle you why even bother/Oh I got secret /Kiss I am your father/You acting like you a fuckin gangster/but bicth yu not qualified to be a wankster/Yung don't even say you got big balls/Yo dick so tiny Stuart Little thinks it's small
blah blah blah um hummmm
checkin for the win later
I just saw this...........This is no effort at all and i mean at all.......cuz dude has no punches in his verse
Im sick with it n my words will cut ya open n Expose ya Lunch
Cuz even ina food fight ya wouldn't kno how to Throw a Punch
Dawg watch me break your frame n leave CJ Jointless
Cuz you tryin to win is like ya hand witout its index finger,......Its Pointless
A fake thug reppin a purple sig actin like ya Cold in ya Rhymes
But like your sig bitch you will never be seen Holdin a Nine
damn my bad i wasn't finshed
I just saw this...........This is no effort at all and i mean at all.......cuz dude has no punches in his verse
Im sick with it n my words will cut ya open n Expose ya Lunch
Cuz even ina food fight ya wouldn't kno how to Throw a Punch
Dawg watch me break your frame n leave CJ Jointless
Cuz you tryin to win is like ya hand witout its index finger,......Its Pointless
A fake thug reppin a purple sig actin like ya Cold in ya Rhymes
But like your sig bitch you will never be seen Holdin a Nine
Attempting to defeat me bitch ur gamble's sicker
Cuz this kid gon miss his goals like tampa's kicker
Your only half decent with ya punches enforced with wack
you make no difference in this game like third string quarterbacks
vote it up should be a easy win
vote young kiss
he came with more punches
plus cjilla sucks lol
*Edit: This vote will have to be deleted if it's not explained better...
I mean, come on...
Born to Kill
This was a pretty weak battle overall.
Cjilla had a dope opening line "Ladies and Gentlemean Hold your applause/I would like to thank Kiss mother for sucking my balls " fuckin' jokes! That killed it as far as personals go. Other than that I didn't see much in your verse. Structure was ok. Kinda off flow. Concepts needed a lil help. Vocab was ok. Delivery was decent. Get a lil more creative.
Yungkiss was so dead on this verse. He put like 5 effortless lines in that it seemed he didn't really think about at all. Structure was flawless tho. So it flowed well. Wasn't all that creative in my minds eye. Decent opener but wasn't really all that great. "Im sick with it n my words will cut ya open n Expose ya Lunch
Cuz even ina food fight ya wouldn't kno how to Throw a Punch " best of the batch. Not really anything too special but ok.
I would vote Cjilla 4 his jokes opener.
Vote/ Cjilla
uppin for votes on this battle yo i will return the favor
Yungkiss won this by a ling shot.
Dawg watch me break your frame n leave CJ Jointless
Cuz you tryin to win is like ya hand witout its index finger,......Its Pointless
^ I liked this it was serious
Attempting to defeat me bitch ur gamble's sicker
Cuz this kid gon miss his goals like tampa's kicker
^Love the NFL humor
I don't know nothin hot about Cj, for example
Ladies and Gentlemean Hold your applause/I would like to thank Kiss mother for sucking my balls/Nigga do you wanna die?/ With that name you should be on queer eye for the straight guy/The only kisses I give r the kiss of death/nigga you old trash thats why you about to get swept/Hey dumbass Young is spelled wrong/You don't need to be raping you need to be to singin old ballad songs/Danm homie you make me sick/Im starting to think Im I battling a man or a worthless piece of shit/Battle you why even bother/Oh I got secret /Kiss I am your father/You acting like you a fuckin gangster/but bicth yu not qualified to be a wankster/Yung don't even say you got big balls/Yo dick so tiny Stuart Little thinks it's small
^^^^ this was ass
I meant to say long shot
yes it was ass i hate dickriders and another thing um uppin for votes
Yung came with the wordplay and better punches...
CJ had some of both, but most of his shit was very elementary, almost childish.
And he did the "gangster/wankster" line which really proves my point.
He did have a funny closer, but that was the best it got.
And, sorry, Sab ^^^ that "mother" line was not a personal...
That's what's known as a fake personal, which is totally blah.
Good metas, and a couple of interesting concepts from Yung, as well as the steady punches win this...
Best line: "lunch/punch" was nice, so was "pointless".
Winner: Yungkiss
Peace
uppin
b2k you said " And, sorry, Sab ^^^ that "mother" line was not a personal... "
I would imagine that every1 has there own ideas of the criteria of a personal.. , but i figure if you mention your opponents mother, your getting pretty personal.
stop freeposting dickrider
[QUOTE=Unwritten Hazard]vote young kiss
he came with more punches
"Im sick with it n my words will cut ya open n Expose ya Lunch
Cuz even ina food fight ya wouldn't kno how to Throw a Punch"--kinda played out, but still merked cjilla
"Dawg watch me break your frame n leave CJ Jointless
Cuz you tryin to win is like ya hand witout its index finger,......Its Pointless" ---decent pnuch
plus cjilla sucks lol
"Ladies and Gentlemean Hold your applause/I would like to thank Kiss mother for sucking my balls/Nigga do you wanna die?/ With that name you should be on queer eye for the straight guy/The only kisses I give r the kiss of death/nigga you old trash thats why you about to get swept/Hey dumbass Young is spelled wrong/You don't need to be raping you need to be to singin old ballad songs"-----not complex, looks like just ramblings
"Danm homie you make me sick/Im starting to think Im I battling a man or a worthless piece of shit"----LMAO ROFL.....my little brother in 2nd grade can rhyme that
"Battle you why even bother/Oh I got secret /Kiss I am your father"---is this Trapt wit n disguise? back n text?
iight uppin
uppin for a battle
yung kiss i almost voted against you b4 readin yours cuz cj came on strong with that first punchlines but he got weaker then i read yours and you got him you didnt even need to put the last few lines in you beat him in 8 but the nfl one was good and cj it was good structure wordplay and that begnning punchline was tight but yung got you
My vote goes to YUNG KISS
Uppin for votes
sabotage a personal is not about gettin personal and dissin someones fam or "persoanl" friend, its about a diss that exclusivly applies to only them and couldnt have been thought of while drivin to work or somethin. understand? like for u a personal would be "I'd beat up ur rhymes even they were taking ROIDS, yea i read ur flow but all i heard was Bestie Boys." A weak personal but a personal, your name is sabotage and thats the name of a Bestie Boys song, that diss wouldnt have worked for Born to kill. "I slept with your mother and she begged me to fuck her." that is NOT a personal. OK now for the vote.
Yea this shit wasnt even close.
CJ- not bad for a newb, but u were a little outta ur league, its aight it showed promise. First off fix ur structure, u cant write paragraphs cuz they're harder to read and understand and u might not get the credit that the verse deserves. Look at other battles to get a good idea. All ur punches were pretty weak, ur attempt at a personal was promising, but the punch missed him. Rhyme was pretty elementary too.
Kiss- ok verse nutin great, but u didnt need a great verse to win this and u knew that. Wordplay was pretty good and ur few punches hit pretty hard, loved the pointless line. Ok structure and good rhymes. Overall a clean sweep.
Structure - Kiss
Rhyme - Kiss
Metas - Kiss
Punches - Kiss
Personasl - Kiss
v- Kiss
iight thx
haha. nice battle.
CJ-came wit sum funny stuff. and thats not becuz it was good. bad everything. try harder next tie.
Yungkiss- came nice. even if it was shorting. had no personals though, work on that. took it for everything. easy battle.
vote- Yungkiss
hit this up in return:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=122953
peace