Topical Battle.
Topic= 'Being a Cop'
13th Amendment vs Cryptic Lyrics
10-20 lines.
blind spit.
good luck
Krem
Ace of Aces
Topical Battle.
Topic= 'Being a Cop'
13th Amendment vs Cryptic Lyrics
10-20 lines.
blind spit.
good luck
Waiting For the verses.
Parking behind signs, hiding from citizen's view
waiting for someone to driveby, just so i can pursue
pulling out turning lights on, sirens are blaring
lookin in their rearview mirror,i see them staring
the car ahead speeds up, doing around 130 clicks
i put the petal to the floor, using the radio to transmit
"i'm in hot pursuit on highway 101, set up the spike strip"
"i'm pursuing a 1985 black z24 cavalier, windows are tinted"
...."Dispatch: The spike strip is in place, right before the turn"....
...."Dispatch: This is gonna be simple sir, there's no need for concern"....
I slow down as the turn approaches, waiting for this to end
the driver hits the spikes, i watch as the tires slowly descend
the driver pulls over and gets outta the car, i yell "get on the ground!"
as i walk to the suspect i sense something is wrong, but don't turn around"
the backdoor opens and a passenger jumps out shooting, i fall to the ground
i can't seem to move, all i can see is the sun brightly in the sky
blood starts dripping outta my mouth, i'm thinkin i'm bout to die
back up finally arrives, they see my lying there and quickly rush to me
i look to one of the officer's an say, "please tell them i'll always love my family"
We got an Officer down!
Bein’ a Cop
Check…
“Why do you have to be a cop dad?” the young girl asks her father
He hesitated what was stated with a defiled smile when he saw her
And so he tells his child, “I was born to fight for what I believe in
Just like how you shouldn’t give up on the things you’re dreamin”
With that he hugs and kisses the smiling face of his own daughter
It’s tough leaving the doorstep to fight a war while being a father
But still, his life of strife that day engaged with the start of the car
He roamed the homes of his own zone to patrol the streets in parts
Then as if God hated earth, a loud sound of thunder filled the skies
In turn he pulled over to fight back against a storm of fire and cries
And in an instant they were surrounded, even after a call for back-up
They were in the heart of hostile forces that endorsed the attack stub
Two other men were wounded and the man was against his car door
He reached the elite heat of the streets as usual, this time it was more
In an attempt to defend his partner, he aimed his trigger to fully pull-it
A second too late of being the first to fire so instead he took the bullet
It pierced his vest direct to the chest and near the heart below his lung
Saw the light of his life with the few breaths that he had left to be hung
So he whispered “Take care of my little angel and keep her from crying,
Because I was born to fight for what I believe in and with it I am dying”
nice battle. uppin this for sum votes.
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peace
Flow - Verbatim you started off good but the last third or so of yours got off beat it seemed - Ace's flow was on point the whole time - and I saw some internals in there so I give this to him
Concept - Neither one of you was very creative in my opinion - the verses both carried pretty much the same theme - pretty predictable - this comes out as a tie - just because you both carried your chosen approach pretty well and neither one really stands out
Overall - Ace gets this with the better flow seeing as conceptually these are pretty even.
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I'm dead.
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Hence Forward
^thanx for voting. uppin this for more.
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Yea I agree, Verb that last third was off, i was real disapointed about it too cuz i was feelin everything.
Both were almost the same, story, rhymes, everything, but Ace's had a little more feeling in it. So I think Ace edged this one out just a little.
Storyline - Tie
Structure - Ace
Rhymes - Tie
Metas - Ace
Multis - Ace
v-Ace
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thanks
it was close
I was feeling ace imagary better it was nice and the meta4s and similes was on the same level and the rhyme shemes was good but i was feeling ace sheme better and his verse was more original to me and i say to both of u elevate and ace had better vocab it can be better doe my vote go to ace dough
V/Ace
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Yo good work guys that was a really good topical!
Both had great structure! Aces was pretty much flawless and krems having only a little turbulence around the end. ( i found ) YOu guys used wicked concepts and exciting wordplay. You two are quite evenly matched. BOth use good vocabulary. Have poets flow and strategic delivery. However ultimately I found aces more emotionally moving... such a good choice of concept was what took it for me.
Again Good job 2 both of you
\'ote Ace
This was a very good battle, but Vote: Ace
Verb: A solid verse, good structure and a nice flow. You made me feel like i was there.
I don't think you trailed off at the end, and you kept me interested the whole time. I liked your ending, put a good spin on the verse.
Ace: Another very good verse, you had very good internals, nice multi's. Like verb, you kept me interested, and I liked how you started with talkin to the daughter. You had a longer verse, and it was solid all the way through. Another good ending. I think with the nice multi's and a longer, slightly more interesting verse, you got my vote.
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