The Inner Meaning (AKA ELEETE)

The Inner Meaning
Written By: ELEMENCE

Now that I’ve grasped your attention I ask you keep reading...
Confusing at first but closely observed you’ll find a deep meaning...
In this scripture I reveal the origins of my intertwined words...
Straight lines with curves come together an rhyme lines in thirds…
Tell me exactly what your eye views so far...Can you see the entity?...
A true poet or emcee who reads an sees my soul is my only remedy...
These chosen few...Handpicked from a garden of ambient lights...
Each one so bright with a different style in which one to write...
Let me bring you back to the matter at hand 'fore I get off track...
What do I lack? Answer: a beat bound to my words like a contract...
When his pen made first contact, an scraped it against my skin...
Felt pleasure lost in sin...Watched tattoos imprint my soul within...
I blame it all on him…He raped am left me with a burden to bear…
For when others see me an stare, I’ll blind an change minds ina glare…
So tell me if you see The Inner Meaning?...Can you find it?...
Take this verse, flip it upside down, backwards, an rewind it?...
Just take it an read it in any way to reveal its true secret...
Cause the secret will only be revealed to you...if you keep it......

Do you see The Inner Meaning???

Flow was good. Vocab was good. Not a concrete topic, but still decent. I loved the rhymescheme at the begining.

"In this scripture I reveal the origins of my intertwined words...
Straight lines with curves come together an rhyme lines in thirds…"

^That part was just ill.
It was a pretty solid piece, as most of your are. Nice job. Keep doing what you do.

Ps. That last question makes me feel like I'm missing something. Am I?

Please return the favor:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118747

Nice verse... Good length of your verse & Nice composition.... The ryhming technique you used worked well (Mini- multies at the end of each verse) ... Also the flow was well maintained in the entire verse...

Good Job... 8.2/10

Yes you seem to be missing "The Inner Meaning"....Its supposed to be that the paper is reading itself to you...Thats the whole meaning...That is the topic...Its explaining its purpose for the reader....Get it?


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118959
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118489

Nice enough..

Not too long.. Which is a good strategy nowadays as people dont read anything that is more than 20 or so lines..

Vocabulary and so on was iight..

Wasnt anything special.. But it was iight..

Good first drop for this alias..

Well done..

Pz..

Word@ELEETE...

"When his pen made first contact, an scraped it against my skin...
Felt pleasure lost in sin...Watched tattoos imprint my soul within...
I blame it all on him…He raped am left me with a burden to bear…"

I'm a little off today. My bad. This was nice.

Whoa...You have developed to be an awesome writer...Young grasshopper...
Now..I pass you the torch....Lamo....:p

i am proud of this mufucker

i snatched him from his old crew........apparantly a real smart choice

you had a real nice rhyme scheme.......the multis made it dopeness.......

i am not really an OM'er if you will, so i wont tell you how to improve or if you should

i will just say........Nice Shit, Keep em comin, i look forward to seeing more

elemental rep!!

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Yea Literary Literates wasnt doing much for ELEMENCE........They paid no attention to him whatsover.....Good Choice!! :thumbup:

good good drop although i thought u were talking about an individual the whole time....kept me guessing and thats the key...
flow and structure was flawless...multis and vocab on point...
man good stuff...

i enjoyed this. it grabbed my attention at the start. something hard to catch but you did it. nicely done. the flow was nearly flawless and so was the structure. the vocab was nothing less then high quality and the meaning really stands out in this. there are millions of verses that can't be understood, and i guess thats sort of what this ones about in a way. very well-stated and commendable. keep on writing, especially wit those multies of yours. lol. nice 9/10

peace

Uppin yo!! Thanks to all for the Feed

yo man great piece, kept me imterestin, flow wuz dope no doubt, good vocab mos def, good meaning, sure as hell kept me guessing
nice piec man, good topic, good meaning, took me a while to figure it out but it worked nicely
good job man

2 the top!

Uppin!!!!

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Originally Posted by Antonio Banderas

Nice verse... Good length of your verse & Nice composition.... The ryhming technique you used worked well (Mini- multies at the end of each verse) ... Also the flow was well maintained in the entire verse...

Good Job... 8.2/10

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Agree totally..gud sum up by Ant..
Wasn't too long, not too short,
Had nice bits of creativity thrown
in here..all in all a great piece..check
new piece above this..pz

This shit is dope, i slept on your previous work i'll be reading most of em from now on, the line about Ambient lights was dope as hell.Nice flow and imegery

(Adds name to list of people he'll be reading from now on)

nice
the rhyming was a bit basic you could of been more experimental (try to have more complex rap scheme)
it sounded a bit like you were just trying to fit the rhymes together but still a good verse

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Originally Posted by idle

nice
the rhyming was a bit basic you could of been more experimental (try to have more complex rap scheme)
it sounded a bit like you were just trying to fit the rhymes together but still a good verse

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Oh god....^^^ Can anyone believe that???