10-16 lines
due sometime today (tues.)
normal rules.. no bullshit..
first to 5 wins
check inn....
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10-16 lines
due sometime today (tues.)
normal rules.. no bullshit..
first to 5 wins
check inn....
Thorn, what a name.. evil Thorn, something I should be scared about?
or alias, Man Of Black(MOB).. you'll need it for ur own funeral, no doubt
If ur a thorn bush, I'm the hedge clippers bout to cut your limbs out
Make u pout, wanna battle me.. can't stand up in a heavyweight bout
You ask how, as your lying down...
...you're just confused, I left ur head in the clouds
I leave your skill empty and finished, last drop in a cup or end of a joint
Thorn, here's some anoint-ment for the gash I make with my 'points'
New to RB and One & 0, you must think you're something sweet
Might win ur other battles, but now u want me, you won't go undefeat
You should be kissin my feet, for this battle you'll forever mourn
A nightmare, it'll wake u up everynight, interfering ur dreams of gay porn
You were born for these tryouts, make em' believe you carry a big stick
Remember to down viagra or other enhancer, make up for ur little 'prick'
Don't come back again, you're far from sick...
... on my body u left barely any scratch or niks
ah shit., my structure got fucked up... but I think u guys can figure it out..
QUick key
U threw absolutely no punches.......U were Homer Simpson Boxing
I'll make CAMROK look so bad......I just placed coal in his Stocking
Have you walking feelin rejected like blacks that wave For Cabs
I can see u gettin pissed............worse than PMS with No Pads
Ur real bad, but cant take a hint like Hard games of Clue
I'll Crush you Soul and all like Fat peoples Shoes
Camrock couldnt spit shit while at bat on a Baseball Team
Give it up dont try 2 Flow, that shit was an Upward Stream
Still so immature, ur lines tell me u wet the Sheets
I'm shuttin this kid down like Control-Alt-Delete
Remember u challenged me, so you have urself to Blame
Now ur speechless like Dots on either side Ur Sig Name (...CAMROK...)
Uppin
up #1................................................ .....................................
ok.. not bad
and jus for the rec I didn't challenge you
uppin 1
upppinn (2)............... lets hit this people...
I'll return favors and check ot battles of anyone who votes.. so lets go..
This battle was very good and i hope it don't get slept on, it didnt here.
Camrock - ur structure was a little weak and your punches were just plain average nothin really popped out. but you used personals which is always good. can't say too much more it was a nice verse.
thorn - i flowed with your structure and rhyme scheme a little more, it was just my type. I felt when the punches were commin and they hit pretty hard. I loved the ctrl alt delete line. metas were pretty good too.
Structure- Thorn
punches - thorn
personals - camrok
metas -tie
rhyme - tie
v- thorn
re-pay the favor and vote on my shit! i vote on battles all the time and never get any love back. I'm at the max of 3 battles and wanna start a new one but i cant cuz no body votes on my shit. Be honest and vote i just wanna get these battles over with. i will never vote on either of ya'lls battle again if ya dont show some love back - peace
close and decent.
Camrok- you started off ok. nothing good, but still it was sumthing. you filled it with multies and personals tho, which is good. your flow was a bit off in a few areas, especially towards the end where your structure was getting out of hand. but overall it was ok. you had sum ok punches. 7/10
Thorn- came ok also. you overtook the structure part in this battle, and also the flow. but i don't feel you came as hard with the punches. they weren't enjoyable. only becuz they weren't connecting too well and didn't hit to hard. (e.g. control alt delelte was ur best and it was only ok) but yeah, you did ok also. 6.5/10
vote- Camrok...for having personals, and slightly better punches.
hit this up in return plz:
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117419
thanx.
peace
Upppinnn (3).........
drop links...............
blah.....
CAMROK- You came stretched....sounded more like an OM than a battle...you had a few personals..pout where were the punches?!!!? You had like what...2? Nuthin stood out in ya verse...Shorten your lines a bit and try and put a punch in every line instead of using the first line as a set upa nd the second to punch...not a terrible verse..jus weak
Thorn- Well...you had punches...but they were mad played...and like 1 personal that was weak...A Control Alt Delete line? Come on....be more original and creative with ya verse...
That being said both can do better....This battle was close...But Ima have to side with CAMROK because he had the best punches even if he had 2
Upppinnn (4)...
Com'n people lets see the votes....
drop links
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camrok- stretched lines....nice personals....llack of punches threw it off a bit though......everything connected.....but it was hard to read......pretty good battle on your part....
thorn-...i would be sarcastic by saying you came a little played.....every one of your punches.....has it own book and record deal.l...structure was only good thing i saw.....camrok beat you in everything except legibility.....therefore my vote goes too
v// CAMROK
please hit this back up!!
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117053
Camrok And Thorn, That Was Two Of The Gay'ist Lyrics I've Ever Read/i'll Leave Both Of Yall Niggas Leakin Red/cuz Ill Make Yall Hold Some Lead/in A Perminate Bed/ With Shots In Ya Head/ U Betta Understand, Because It Aint No Get Back/smooth But Crunchy Like A Kit-kat/ass Get Cracked/cuz Groupy Niggas Get Smacked/so While I Type This Shit Of The Top Of My Mind/u Look Thru Yo Notebook To Find Rhymes/come And Step To Me Cuz The Ground Around Me Is Made Of Land Mines. Faggit Muthafuckaz. Str8t Bangin. Loc.
Camrok And Thorn, That Was Two Of The Gay'ist Lyrics I've Ever Read/i'll Leave Both Of Yall Niggas Leakin Red/cuz Ill Make Yall Hold Some Lead/in A Perminate Bed/ With Shots In Ya Head/ U Betta Understand, Because It Aint No Get Back/smooth But Crunchy Like A Kit-kat/ass Get Cracked/cuz Groupy Niggas Get Smacked/so While I Type This Shit Of The Top Of My Mind/u Look Thru Yo Notebook To Find Rhymes/come And Step To Me Cuz The Ground Around Me Is Made Of Land Mines. Faggit Muthafuckaz. Str8t Bangin. Loc. :shoot: :shoot: :shoot: :thefinger (THORN & CAMROK)~~> :hump:
^^^^^
wow... 1.) what the fuck are you doing??? and ... 2.) wow.... just leave.
Upppin this number (5)
VOTE this and DROP links.. damnit I will hit them.. this is taking too long
line from camrok:
Make u pout, wanna battle me.. can't stand up in a heavyweight bout
You ask how, as your lying down...
...you're just confused, I left ur head in the clouds
I leave your skill empty and finished, last drop in a cup or end of a joint
Thorn, here's some anoint-ment for the gash I make with my 'points'
line from thorn:
I'll make CAMROK look so bad......I just placed coal in his Stocking
Have you walking feelin rejected like blacks that wave For Cabs
I can see u gettin pissed............worse than PMS with No Pads
breakdown:
flow:cam
mutlies:tie
punchlines:cam
enjoy reading:cam
strcture:thorn
opener:thorn, was an okay opener
closer:camrok,was iight
overrall vote goes to camrok, had better flow, punhclines , and almost basically everything as i explained ^^^ there
please return the favor in this battle thank u
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119302
Quote:
Originally Posted by lyric
^^^^Word
Vote gone.
-Axe
D/R^
.................................................. ....will be removed^ lol im so stoned
ok
Cams flow was alot better and he had betta punches and i enjoyed readin cams. cams hit his lines harda i thought.
Thorn had a few good punches but nothin special, you had a good opener and you set the verse out well. ya need more personals though and your flow was a bit weak.
v/ cam
ill drop the poll when i get 100 posts, only need a few more. please return the favour on my battles
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119611
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117453
if you dont vote on mine then i wont vote on yours again thanx