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Darth Vader
yo, im Darth Vader,kill you with the force
choke yo ass, killin you, with no remorse
If you dont die, your voice will be hoarce
Or we can go toe to toe,pull out my saber
stick it in yo fuckin throat, blue or red flavor? {Get it,Diff colors of sabers}
Hey, is that obi one?wait,you dont have a savor
you rep the light, i rep the dark side
Its darth vader bitches, run and hide
in a ferocios battle, we collide
ill chop off yo motha fuckin head
Make your ass dead
pull out my gun, start shootin lazers
those other stuped Jedis, usin tazers
then i take a sec, to cath my breath
yeah,i breeth weird,either that or its death
the only reason i breeth like that, is becuse of meth
okay, now im back to fightin, they all scared, cus in the sith
pick ya up with the force, throw yo ass off a cliff
Its a work in progress, i just want to know if the people of RB think i should keep workin on THIS song.....please tell me wat u think
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get to uppin yall, tell me wat ya think!!!!!!!!!!!
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U ok but u need a better structure tho wit more wordplay and a better flow
U good at the crunk songs hommie
Got potential but u need a lil more guidence
Overall 6.5/10
Hit up mine in my sig
If u need help written or wanna collab PM me ~1~
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more uppin yall, dont be lazey, uppppppinnnnn!!!!!
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uppin motherfukas, dont be lazey!!!, up up up up up up
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iv gotta hand it 2 ya u got skills but it seemed a bit rushed takin a little time 2 think will help it wont loose ya cred! think b4 u write but u definitely got tha skills i dont boubt that keep goin!! peace!! rb no1!! holla!!!
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=232720
heres another freestyle, straight off the dome
lil jon the crunkest motherfuka, YEAHHHHHHHH, OKAYY!!!!
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totwoo those were the links fo the other stuff to judge me on....all well
hers anotrher incase
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=232720
heres another freestyle, straight off the dome
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lol, interesting topic
pretty crappy to me, its seemed like geek gangsta rap.
um dont do something like this agian, try to get more complexity in your rhymes.
Choose s better topic and more creativity.
keep it up
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this is ur first post, shut the fuck up, its not suposed to be a gangsta rap, fuck off, its supposed to be a mess around song, it has creatvity in it, so fuck off "n00b to rap"...keep uppin
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i wouldn't have chose that topic, but overall it was mehhh........no hate but u need to elevate on your wordplay and structure.........i kno dis wasn't a battle verse but structure help's your flow............some part's i liked. like da color saber line.....(nice)..........but all in all we all have room to elevate so do so...........keep dropping iight my nigg
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ight mane, thanks fo da feed,keep uppim my niggas!
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ok I think its a good concept usin comics like 50 did with Gatman, but I thought "pullin out my gun shootin lasers" was a lil exteme.... flow seemed a little short.. I like the concept just dont make it too star wars if you know wut I mean.. contine with the songs tho.
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