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Thread: The Crunk Song {Updated}

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    The Crunk Song {Updated}

    ight,i just wanna say, if it comes out to "fuck yall" ints not, its just thats wat Crunk is bout so, no diss, im just want some tips to elevate my game of crunknes lol anyway here we go

    Chorus
    You Step Forward,You Get Pushed Back
    You Step Up,You Get Knoked Down
    You Rise Up, Uou Get Shot Down

    Verse One
    Yal Heard, im The Krunk King
    I rap motherfuckas, I Dont Sing
    Im all bout Crunk,Dont Care If it Bling
    the crunk king up in the fuckin house,
    Yall talkin bout me,bitch u better watch yo mouth,
    I’m tha realest realest, u ever gone hear bout,
    I give haymakers, knock yo silly ass out,
    Raw spelled backwards is war, is u ready,
    U can keep tha four nickle, I bet dis AK is heavy,
    I can give yaw 50 shots, I bet yo whole hood drop,
    I keep a chopper in my trunk, like I’m some type of cop,
    When I pop at cha, theres no need 4 a vest,
    I’m aimin at yo head, I aint aimin at yo chest,
    Ni66az know I’m tha best, in tha mid-west,
    Its all bout bein Crunk fuck tha rest,
    fuck yall, if yaw sayin Shit ta me
    Ill make ur ass plea
    If you wanna fight
    then guard yo grill
    you cant win
    my crunkness is to ill



    Chorus
    You Step Forward,You Get Pushed Back
    You Step Up,You Get Knoked Down
    You Rise Up, Uou Get Shot Down
    So fuck wit me,youll neva gonna be found

    {This part,short fast, loads if energy put inot it}

    So yall heard niggas
    im down fo a fight
    id beat ur ass
    usin half my might
    im to ill
    to crunk
    and to buck
    for me to lose a fight
    ill crack yo head
    make you lose yo sight
    send ya to yo death bead
    pump ya full of lead
    and when its all done and said
    ill put one last bullet in yo head
    so go get ya moms
    ill drop some mo lyrycal bombs
    blow yo ass apart
    spread da blood
    make it look like art

    Chorus
    You Step Forward,You Get Pushed Back
    You Step Up,You Get Knoked Down
    You Rise Up, Uou Get Shot Down
    So fuck wit me,youll neva gonna be found







    its a work in progress, tell me wat u think, i need some tips, remember its a crunk song

    REMEMBER CRUNK SONG!!!!!!

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    when u recorded it might be that fiyah. I mean it an't much I can say. Just keep elevatin.
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    Thoughts

    REALLY DAWG..I BELIEVE THAT FOR A CRUNK SONG THAT IT WAS CUU..
    ITS JUST THE CHORUS THAT WAS GETT'N ME BCUZ I AINT GOT NO BEAT TO PUT IT TO/////

    BUT FAR AS THE VERSES.....IT WAS DECENT..CRUNK VIOLENCE.. IM FEEL'N THAT...AE!!!!!!!!!!!

    CATCH DA C.O.R LIKE THIS>>>>

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    ight yall, i am goin to record everything i make, just need to finish other first, im still lokin for a beat

    KEEP IT CRUNK MY NIGGAS
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    well, lets put it this way, the strucutre absolutly was terrible

    it looked like this

    XXXXXXXXXXXXX
    XXXXX
    XXXXXXXXXXXX
    XXXXXXXX
    XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
    XXXXXXXXX

    you need to improve on that
    rhymes were good
    topic was cool, just keep elvating man, you got potential
    keep elevating andf keep it up

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    Wtf why did you post a crunk song, textually crunk sucks, and in my opinion it sounds like shit too. You shouldn't be putting this in om, it would only be effective in audio. What the fuck am I supposed to get from this, I don't get it. From a crunk standpoint i guess its ok, but I don't equate crunk to skill, I equate it to just mindless bullshit with no message, and no purpose. Don't say cus it gets you hype cus plenty of well written songs have the same effect. Personally the beats suck they have like the same random beeping and synthetic drum type of beat. Crunk is shit!!!!!

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    F*uck yo mutha fu*kin puss ass niga, fag, if u want to start a OM war, lets go, il rip yo punk ass apart, and they dont just put beeping and shit, ur fuck*in stupid, naybe if u understood crunk, till then get out my face ya Slob
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    ^ Settle pettle. LOL......i didnt like that much but hey. everyone has their own opinons. be like me, dont give a fuck what people say or think

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    peep this the verses is coo they would be nice if u used just a lil bit of better vocab but no disrespect but king of tha mid-west hell naw thats my title and u need to work on tha hook a lil more but i would bang that shit if it was on cd

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    Quote Originally Posted by Sect
    Wtf why did you post a crunk song, textually crunk sucks, and in my opinion it sounds like shit too. You shouldn't be putting this in om, it would only be effective in audio. What the fuck am I supposed to get from this, I don't get it. From a crunk standpoint i guess its ok, but I don't equate crunk to skill, I equate it to just mindless bullshit with no message, and no purpose. Don't say cus it gets you hype cus plenty of well written songs have the same effect. Personally the beats suck they have like the same random beeping and synthetic drum type of beat. Crunk is shit!!!!!
    If you don't like crunk, why did you read a post called 'the crunk song', by 'the crunk king'? Surely that should have given you a hint you weren't going to like it?

    Anyways, as for the verses themselves, the structure does maybe need a little work. I noticed some line didn't rhyme with the previous one or the next one, but as long as you deliver the lines well, that shouldn't be too much of a problem. This wasn't too bad in terms of crunk. One thing that does always g well is cramming a line full of as many rhymes as possible though. If you can do that well (no garbage random rhymes), it should seem a lot more energetic.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Sect
    Wtf why did you post a crunk song, textually crunk sucks, and in my opinion it sounds like shit too. You shouldn't be putting this in om, it would only be effective in audio. What the fuck am I supposed to get from this, I don't get it. From a crunk standpoint i guess its ok, but I don't equate crunk to skill, I equate it to just mindless bullshit with no message, and no purpose. Don't say cus it gets you hype cus plenty of well written songs have the same effect. Personally the beats suck they have like the same random beeping and synthetic drum type of beat. Crunk is shit!!!!!

    Im sorry to say........But this person's right. Think about it,
    In crunk songs most of the times the hooks are just a couple words
    chanted over and over again. The verses are not rap, just mindless talking,
    Lil JON cannot Rap, ALL HE DOES IS TALK. thats all crunk music is, pointless talking. Dont post crunk songs in OPEn mic, please. it's a waste of space, here
    i'll even write a hook to an crunk song write now:


    We dont play dat Shit so Bitch get Back (4x)


    See, thats all crunk music is, BULLSHIT

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    This shit was terrible

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    lol
    LyricalFlow keeping it real, dawg.


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    How can this be considered art or skill?
    Its a putrid execuse for a written work.
    No vocabulary.
    No message.
    No metaphors.
    Simple rhymes.
    Simple...everything.
    Its just,nothing.
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    pretty good, i think this was an ok drop, i've seen better but, this was good, nice vocab, a lil, pretty good structure, the chorus was strait, the topic was aight, kinda played but u worked wit it...

    overall: 7.5/10, pretty good, keep droppin...

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