So Poetic Hahahahahahahahahahaha

Im in the pub pissed up peeking at pussy dont worry my pens home
Im watching bitches shitting in each others mouths on my friends phone
My brain is more fucked than a blind man in a room full of landmines
On another track i'll detail deeper thoughts and maybe expand minds
Ive murdered a million motherfuckers but i aint touched an uzi yet
My style is sicker than Victor Salva molesting kids on his movie sets
You aint Denzel but if you really think you got fucking game spit it
Im UNSIGNED but wouldnt buy your album if a record deal came with it
I sell weed to a priest, and the next minute sell smack to a nun
I only fuck filthy whores who drink the condom after i cum
Im not a mysoginist i do love my mother shes a dear slut
Fuck the gym i got booze and take aways to look afer my beer gut
Living another year, shit thats gotta be my worst fate
Im the type to get a job and be fired by my first break
Im anti social cause im a psycho plus im broke my friends got paid
My rhymes are constructed constantly sick cause my pens got aids
Im drugged up from head to toe dont know why i got my bong for
I'll get a deal and shit on my fans like eminem did with Encore
Im more shady, raw, crazy, whores, ladies, whats the difference?
I mutilated halie joel osment with a casper mask now i got the sixth sense
Im a complicated individual so i love my ma but do i love a bitch? hardly
All my family members are normal im a black sheep like chris farley
Yo im a psychotic artist so i never ever paint my pictures lightly
Im tired of painting lines, its medication time im out like Richard Whitely

This was a bunch of rhymes i clumped together and a couple i thought while typing. The flow is on point but i didnt put loads of multies in this piece cause i put loads in my last piece and i dont like my rhymes to look repetitive.
If you didnt get the Victor Salva line he is the guy who directed jeepers creeper 1 and 2 he went to jail in the early ninties for molesting a kid on the set of one of his films called clownhouse so i thought id diss the sick cunt.

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lolz

pretyy nice main, most those punches was on-point, i was liking those a lot,
even tho you used long lines you kept the flo going nicely...

my fav part was-

Im drugged up from head to toe dont know why i got my bong for
I'll get a deal and shit on my fans like eminem did with Encore
Im more shady, raw, crazy, whores, ladies, whats the difference?
I mutilated halie joel osment with a casper mask now i got the sixth sense


its all sick'n'ill...
good alliteration in places which carries the flo again

phew! what can i say man, its nasty, this should come with a parental advisory cert
some may say stronger vocab cud be added in places.. tho i think thats not necessary fo this piece, as its all expressed very well

dope, stay raising fosho

im out like Richard Whiteley

LMAO

^Thanks for the feed. Come on how about some more feed.

You aint Denzel but if you really think you got fucking game spit it
Im UNSIGNED but wouldnt buy your album if a record deal came with it
I sell weed to a priest, and the next minute sell smack to a nun
I only fuck filthy whores who drink the condom after i cum
Living another year, shit thats gotta be my worst fate
Im the type to get a job and be fired by my first break
Im drugged up from head to toe dont know why i got my bong for
I'll get a deal and shit on my fans like eminem did with Encore

those were my favorite lines here. there were more that made me laugh, like your opening two, but anyway... flow wasnt so fluent, but it was definately on point. only thing i wasnt digging to much about the piece was there direction you had in it... you kinda just made funny ass punchlines, which was still cool. funny shit, dude. keep it up.

Nice drop yo...Flow was on point pretty much throughout...Structure was pretty good as well...A few lines seemed to be a little stretched but it was nothing to bad...Didn't really effect the flow...Vocab was pretty good...Content was good...Lots of funny ass punches in there...Quite a few lines made me laugh...Nice drop, keep up the good work...

I sell weed to a priest, and the next minute sell smack to a nun
I only fuck filthy whores who drink the condom after i cum

Im drugged up from head to toe dont know why i got my bong for
I'll get a deal and shit on my fans like eminem did with Encore

Ive murdered a million motherfuckers but i aint touched an uzi yet
My style is sicker than Victor Salva molesting kids on his movie sets

Those line's stood out as well as a few others...

It's easy to have the lines be hit or miss when they're combined like this, but I felt they were pretty consistently solid. The album with a record deal, and encore lines stood out to me. The lines were long, but it got all of the punch in, and if it's fine for you flow-wise, then there's not a problem. The wording was good, since your message wasn't confusing in the punchlines. I liked the concepts you had.

Thanks for the feed. Uppin.

hahahaha nice. really poetic loved it like i love fat penis

Uppin.

this was a great drop, kinda had an oldschool chino vibe, if you don't mind me saying, nameing names and shit, it was s ick, the eminem encore line was sick and the "i wouldn't buy your album if it had a rrecord deal with it" line was also dope. the flow was on key, and the vocab fit the piece perfectly, very dark piece, it was very interesting to read

hit me back http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=212154

peace

^Thanks for the feed, this wasnt the best shit i can do its just a bunch of punches and crazy shit spread over my rhyme books i just pieced it together.
I try and write without thinking what people will think so i just write all my rhymes uncut you cant censor yourself if you wanna be noticed.

Uppin.

A bit more feed on this fucking piece.

Uppin this for the last time.