10 lines
Verse due today
Good luck...
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10 lines
Verse due today
Good luck...
i WILL DROP TONIGHT AROUND EIGHT
Its a fucking victory on my side that I'm about to summon,
I told you in advance and you still didn't see it comin,
Posting a verse isnt wise kid... Your just exposing disgrace,
I'd post nothing and like lawyers still be closing the case,
I dont see why theyd let ya name in when producin battle polls,
Because your fucking wacker then baby's seen seducin animals,
Its like clogged arteries in dead bodies the way this ho's flowin,
You'd have left a better impression on people just by no showin,
You show about as much emotion in ya pieces as inanimate objects,
You winnin this battle goes against the fuckin theory of logics,
Fresh the only Glock you carry is water pistols
I’ll come to ya block...............
................................. Wit surface to air missiles
Da name’s God and I'll make you a believer
You can catch this bullets.........
........................................running like a wide-receiver
This guy lies thru his teeth.... when he keys.....
How u choose tha name....the freshest lines in this battle are these!
So go rap about something u know like rape,
Like how ur lil sister got pissed on in R-Kelly’s Tape
Ok good luck man... Upping # 1...................
(((Fresh))) you had a nice and solid structure, flow messed up in one spot.. but its cool, punches were eh.. some were decent. not many personals. Opener was kinda blah.. Finisher wasnt' that great.. you did aight.. elevate though.. 7.5/20
Godfather(2) Decent verse.. structure wasn't as solid. Flow was a little better. Vocab wasn't that high. Finisher was pretty funny. Punches weren't that great, a few were weak.. decent personals. Overall.. verse was decent could use work.. 7/20
V/ (((Fresh)))
by a hair, shit was close
This was the best i've seen,
come from both of you.
Keep it up
MY VERDICT
This was an evenly matched battle both of your did well for your level.
Fresh: your lines were ok but your flow was off in one area but your structure was good your punches were far between but not many personal attacks but you still had an ok drop.
My favourite line:
"Its like clogged arteries in dead bodies the way this ho's flowin,
You'd have left a better impression on people just by no showin,"
God: Your spit had betta punches but dawg i didnt like all the ................... it dusnt work for me it shows lazyness i know it may be creative in a audio but this is text so use as many words as you can.
My favourite line:
"So go rap about something u know like rape,
Like how ur lil sister got pissed on in R-Kelly’s Tape"
So im gonna have to be fair and give my vote to fresh as his had more effort and betta context but keep writeing godfather i saw good lines just put more effort in and youll be sure to win....peace
MY VOTE: (((FRESH)))
Thanks for the votes guy
Upping
uppin
this was a fairly close battle fresh used a good range of vocab and multies his structure was good and although he didnt use any personals some of his punches hit hard
god u can do alot better than this whaty happened it seems abit rushed, ur flow was good but ur punches werent hitting hard enough ur structure was off and u had no personals, sorry cuz but im gonna have to vote for fresh
return tha favour with an honest vote, leave battle links
vs KINGS
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=117127
vs rec-d
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=116940
vs touch to gold
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117127
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yo uppin for this battle
Damn, closer than I thought after reading em over again..
Fresh - You came hard which was important in this battle. Pretty good use of vocabulary, liked the approach you took, and structure was an A+. Flow was easy to follow, rhyme scheme very nice. Probably the one thing that you lacked were direct personals..you mostly handed him out general punches...which were still nice, just personals tend to hit harder and show creativity. Decent drop tho man.
Godfather(2) - At a first glance I saw how short it looked and I immediately thought, this kats gettin merked. But you came hard too. I compared yours with fresh and you each took and gave out hits like crazy. Nice flow to your verse, i agree it was a lil choppy of structure..however rhyme scheme was ok and creativity was great. The thing you were lacking on was your vocab..pretty simple for the most part. Not a bad spit though.
Damn. Overall, this is tough. I read over it carefully again lol..if i could give half points to each I would, but i cant, so I gotta go with Fresh..basically becuz his verse was just a tiny bit better. Nice spits by both though.
Vote / Fresh