You are God.

i know i am god, but psst this isnt legendary judgy!

but it was nice, somewhat bored me in the middle than came back .. it needed to be more consistent, but it was coo .. vocab could be upped on some places, but nothing biggie .. though you could trow in some more complexity .. keep writing holmes.

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LMFAO at people telling me this ent legendary i dont ask for the nomination people...

anyway thankk and i dont do this for legends i do this for writting

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LMFAO at people telling me this ent legendary i dont ask for the nomination people...

anyway thankk and i dont do this for legends i do this for writting

word.

and dont be stepped on your toes, im just being honest with you, .. i could lie if you want?

This was niiiiiiiiice man that wazz good man props given on that one

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You are God

Can we please have a moment of silence for lives lost to religion
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Irish green was wasted, replaced with dusty colors forming an awning
The place were dew couldn’t settle and birds to scared to sing in the morning
Warming pollution coated and was found devoted to the air
If the majority isn’t making an effort the minority’s facing despair
The local square was captured, enraptured by the Irish terror
Found home ground to warfare for the catholic, protestant error
The weather turned for the worse, a curse fell upon the estate
Weather is a trend setter..
..For worse or better gifted the Catholic’s feelings of hate
Irate emotions and religious devotions, eased the Catholics mission
Ambition to represent tradition..
..Had them taking more blood than Crips within prison
The Protestants position was situated directly opposite their spot
As the plot grew thicker, so did the cloud cushioning the chimney pot
The tension got intense due to suspense but they remained calm
Thunder witnessed the men kneel and rest their heads within their palms

“Let us pray”

“Oh mighty lord above us, love us and offer support next to me
Only sacrificing life’s to endeavor, ever so closer to your ecstasy
Guide us to the light, as we fight for you in order to learn
Each cup of blood captured feeds you energy for your return
Our concern for your world is curled up within our aggression
An obsession for happiness..
..Can often result in deep depression
But our confessions enable us a stable footing that’s exposed
And when we kill the none believes we pray your gates are closed
You are my God”.

“Let’s do it”

The Catholic’s started to panic, manic of making this worthwhile
While one cocked his weapon the other one grimed with a smile
Versatile with passion, crisp and light on their feet as they traveled
Present with each step past their destiny, as their future unraveled
And as they gathered outside the destination, grenades by their side
Detonation was thrown, as a drop of sweat followed the ammunition inside
The target had subsided the building, and had fled from within
And left a lost mother grasping in her withered arms his offspring.

“Children let us pray”

“Lord I am not scared, I was prepared for the damage life courses
Within a breath of fresh air, it’s only natural to take pauses
And if you sacrifice my life, tonight I no its heaven I’m seeing
Cause I sacrificed my life to raise you two healthy beings
And I no it sounds odd, but if it’s me give me the nod
As there is no better time to see you, you are my God.”

R.I.P to all the families lost to religion.

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This was a dope piece! The 1st piece i've red of yours and not the last! You got amazing skill homie and i red this 5times before i layed down my reply, this gets 10/10 easy for rhymes vocab structure and just plain dope ness!

Very well written and expressed piece. You did a good job on this writting. Personally, I like the 1st paragraph the best because some of the vocab used in this piece brought out the message best... You stayed on topic very well

greatness in motion.. good shit..it was solid from all angles.. flow, vocab, errythang was there.. ill definitely be looking for more pieces..

thanks agen

this peice was just... INCREDABLE... K... you are amazing... I assume you in sacred scriptures and you elite cuz man...this was incredable... brilliant structure and idea...the hole thing was incredable....
great shit