Thanks alot for all the feedback everyone. Lol, I kind of forgot I wrote this piece. Upping for alittle more feedback before I let this slip into the unknown.
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Thanks alot for all the feedback everyone. Lol, I kind of forgot I wrote this piece. Upping for alittle more feedback before I let this slip into the unknown.
Hmm nice, the last few lines really substantiated a story more than those long narratives. It's like you gave all the details before hand and then at the end you gave a frame of reference. I don;t believe it was too complicated but just a solid piece with a great concept. Great read overall.
RTF please:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=250742