o i wanted 2 say up there ur verses nd rhymes was really tight just i dont like the chorus at all... its very repetitive and i think it would get old fast... good job on the verses tho.
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o i wanted 2 say up there ur verses nd rhymes was really tight just i dont like the chorus at all... its very repetitive and i think it would get old fast... good job on the verses tho.
Thnx man, uppin
uppin again
Yo grinda, I liked this. If only u could battle as well as u can write, u'd be ok then.
rhymes were aiiiigght...ehh seemed like a forced subject, a little boring-lost my attention at some points...
and yeah ofcourse there r drugs in the cape, there r drugs in every fuckin little suburban town in america dude, but u makin it seem like cape cod is some ghetto ass hood...why the fukc would u wanna move outa the cape?? probably the nicest summer spot in mass.
Have u ever heard of too much of a good thing...........
In audio, the chorus would be better received that in text, where it becomes repetitive, and makes the reader skip over it. The chorus should have more meaning. For the piece, you had multis which helped the flow. You also had wordplay, although there the concepts need some work. With these two areas, you could drop a nice piece with a more thoughout topic.
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thnx carl