Vapour v MD Device

The kids a newb so he probably thinks im gonna half spit,
Ok I will, you’ll get more laughs … about your attempted whit,
In your battle with XeNtRiK you want him to drop before you,
Whats the reason for this? Oh I know its cus you aint got a clue,

vs

nothing worth quoting.

This was a one-sided match. I know vapour can drop harder than he did, but thats all he needed to win this battle. MD, work on ya flow, punches and concepts. Your verse wasn't hitting at all, so go elevate and verse people with the equivelant skill level. pz.

V//vapour.

Quote:

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Originally Posted by MD Device

fuck with me and your fucking with a psycho, ill take your life/
cause your bodies breakable like it was made by tyco or fischer price/
ya fuckin toy, you'd prolly be more comforatable in a skimpy unitard wonderboy/
more like wonder girl/

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more like.. kinda sounds lame but u get my vote cuz u did better than him to me.

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vapour got this shit hands down.
MD wasent even in the zone.. i mean didnt come with no punches that connected, structure was fucked.. wordplay was nowhere..
flow sounded shit..
vapour man u didnt 2 do ILL but, did goo enough to get this win with ease....

The kids a newb so he probably thinks im gonna half spit,
Ok I will, you’ll get more laughs … about your attempted whit,

this bar could have taken the battle

v/vap

vapour took this easily......
nice flow,good structure,an tha punches work well....but sum of it was jus filla
such as these:

In your battle with XeNtRiK you want him to drop before you,
Whats the reason for this? Oh I know its cus you aint got a clue,
Hes come into the deep end cus this is his 1st battle,
Its also gonna be his last, he realised he was wack … farewell.

but allround, good battle

MD,you need to fix up your structure an flow...ASAP,
tha punches at tha start were aight....but need alot of rewording.

peace

Iight battle, Wasn't really feeling MD's verse, Vapour came stronger then other dude did, Still wasn't a impressive battle, Saty up tho...

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Uppin .......
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hit up this battle
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...60#post2103160

this definately goes to vapour. md device your punchlines were kinda simplistic, and vapours had a little complexity about his which made it good to read. vapour had better flow and structure too. md elevate work on your punchlines, structure.


v/vapour

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both lacked in ALOT of areas...and i think both could do better..

md-the main thing with yours is your content..and rhyming words...you didnt rhyme all your lines that well..the thing with your content..is you def. need to work on wording your lines better...your structure and flow was off in places also...i dont even want to discuss your personals and punches...(that bad)

Vap-your shit was bad man..i have seen you do much better then this..but then again this is an old battle...your structure and flow was aiight in places...but i know you have done better...your content sucked dog...you need to work on wordin your lines to make them make more sense..punches and personals were also weak..

overall i disliked both verses...but i guess vap took it

v/vap

fuck with me and your fucking with a psycho, ill take your life/
cause your bodies breakable like it was made by tyco or fischer price/
ya fuckin toy, you'd prolly be more comforatable in a skimpy unitard wonderboy/
more like wonder girl/
quit chokin on nuts, you aint a motherfuckin squirrel/
your antics make me wanna hurl your just so sheisty/
and my blood runs icy/
still people ask for my advice even though its pricy/
just call me DR DEVICE and ill call you wifey/
dont be surprised im not notorious for my piety/
i dont see why your tryin to fight me/
you'd me more successful trying to make another remix of white tee/
featuring whitey ... ... ford you've got as much rap skill/
as a two by four wood bord/
and im the hood lord/
and i wont be ignored/
^^YOU HAD NO REAL PUNCHES........DISSES....OR PERSONALS......
THAT I COULD OF SCOPED OUT.....YA STRUCTURE WAS DEFINATELY
GARBAGE.......YOU NEED TO SERIOUSLY WORK ON THAT FOR REAL
YOU WOULD HAVE A STRETCHED LINE...AND THEN USE SMALL TALK
YOU REALLY NEED TO STEP IT UP.....BEFORE YOU BATTLE ANYMORE..
PZ.............ELEVATE..............

Originally posted by:Vapour
The kids a newb so he probably thinks im gonna half spit,
Ok I will, you’ll get more laughs … about your attempted whit,
^^NICE..COMPARED TO HIS OPENER
In your battle with XeNtRiK you want him to drop before you,
Quote:
Originally Posted by MD Device
you go first xentrik
Lets see what this mans got
Whats the reason for this? Oh I know its cus you aint got a clue,
^^AIGHT PERSONAL
Device can’t think up good punches, ever … got permanent block,
Read the rules then cried and told his boyfriends to get off his cock,
^^MEH
Hes come into the deep end cus this is his 1st battle,
Its also gonna be his last, he realised he was wack … farewell.
^^MEH ON THE CLOSER............

you some ok personals........in your verse....but still......need to
work on your punches.........and multi's......ya structure smashed
his whole verse.......you could of just wrote a story about yourself
for the day..and made it look nice and you would a won.........pz......

V/Vapour
for comin way more harder then other.......kat............


^^^^^^^^^^^^^ I couldnt vote anybetter....