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[QUOTE=Unwritten Hazard]vote young kiss
he came with more punches
"Im sick with it n my words will cut ya open n Expose ya Lunch
Cuz even ina food fight ya wouldn't kno how to Throw a Punch"--kinda played out, but still merked cjilla
"Dawg watch me break your frame n leave CJ Jointless
Cuz you tryin to win is like ya hand witout its index finger,......Its Pointless" ---decent pnuch
plus cjilla sucks lol
"Ladies and Gentlemean Hold your applause/I would like to thank Kiss mother for sucking my balls/Nigga do you wanna die?/ With that name you should be on queer eye for the straight guy/The only kisses I give r the kiss of death/nigga you old trash thats why you about to get swept/Hey dumbass Young is spelled wrong/You don't need to be raping you need to be to singin old ballad songs"-----not complex, looks like just ramblings
"Danm homie you make me sick/Im starting to think Im I battling a man or a worthless piece of shit"----LMAO ROFL.....my little brother in 2nd grade can rhyme that
"Battle you why even bother/Oh I got secret /Kiss I am your father"---is this Trapt wit n disguise? back n text?
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yung kiss i almost voted against you b4 readin yours cuz cj came on strong with that first punchlines but he got weaker then i read yours and you got him you didnt even need to put the last few lines in you beat him in 8 but the nfl one was good and cj it was good structure wordplay and that begnning punchline was tight but yung got you
My vote goes to YUNG KISS
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sabotage a personal is not about gettin personal and dissin someones fam or "persoanl" friend, its about a diss that exclusivly applies to only them and couldnt have been thought of while drivin to work or somethin. understand? like for u a personal would be "I'd beat up ur rhymes even they were taking ROIDS, yea i read ur flow but all i heard was Bestie Boys." A weak personal but a personal, your name is sabotage and thats the name of a Bestie Boys song, that diss wouldnt have worked for Born to kill. "I slept with your mother and she begged me to fuck her." that is NOT a personal. OK now for the vote.
Yea this shit wasnt even close.
CJ- not bad for a newb, but u were a little outta ur league, its aight it showed promise. First off fix ur structure, u cant write paragraphs cuz they're harder to read and understand and u might not get the credit that the verse deserves. Look at other battles to get a good idea. All ur punches were pretty weak, ur attempt at a personal was promising, but the punch missed him. Rhyme was pretty elementary too.
Kiss- ok verse nutin great, but u didnt need a great verse to win this and u knew that. Wordplay was pretty good and ur few punches hit pretty hard, loved the pointless line. Ok structure and good rhymes. Overall a clean sweep.
Structure - Kiss
Rhyme - Kiss
Metas - Kiss
Punches - Kiss
Personasl - Kiss
v- Kiss
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haha. nice battle.
CJ-came wit sum funny stuff. and thats not becuz it was good. bad everything. try harder next tie.
Yungkiss- came nice. even if it was shorting. had no personals though, work on that. took it for everything. easy battle.
vote- Yungkiss
hit this up in return:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=122953
peace
