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this was fully sick wogzta ;) good piece man ... I read some of your work before to and your battles you make good use of multies and have a certain wit to your writing keep it up man .
Formula.. you came tight here.. nothing really bad i can say.. kept me reading.. both of you came good as a colab...
please return the fev
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115041
Yo this was some nice shit...One of the best collabs I've seen ina while..
Formula...you had excellant vocab...nice multis and wordplay...a real nice verse..I think this is the first thing I've seen from you..
Wogzta...Dope vocab..originality..and wordplay...real smooth flow to..some good alliterations too..
Drop an honest vote here please...thanks http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114158
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lol thanks for the supportive words guys... appreciate it heaps... I'll check you links out
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For real both were dope verses, this is the type of shit i like to here coming out of my headphones, just dope lyrcs like that that i love, fuck both verses were dope,
Formula Mc
Havent seen much of your work but your style is very well suited to a collab with Wogsta,-Dope, U had nice flow, good vocab, and u structured your verse like an audio peice which is what i realy love to read, i had a beat in my head and it flowed perfectly with the beat anyways, very nice peice,
Wogsta
Very nice work as usual, very nice flow, very nice vocab i love reading ur peices cos u listen to the same music as me and have the style i like to read, very nice, i liked ur verse the best, VERY GOOD,
Some quotables but i am to lazy....lol
^ hahahah.... thanks Emotion always like your responses.... keep em coming people
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HIGH CLASS BREAKDOWN
[chorus]
Where Did We Go To And Go Through? What Did We Encounter And Conquer?
Mounted The Top-Of, This Divide And Split It For Two Lyrical Monsters
Wogzta, Formula, Ready To Lead Into The Future With Out Of This World Teachings
Seeing Is Believing, And You See It, So Believe It's A New Beginning...
This was a nice chorus, it had a very good rhyme scheme. It got my full attention from the begining. Which for me, thats hard to do. Very nice work on that one...
Nothing is perfect, so I will point out the only problem that I can find that matters even the least... Im just playing, that was a very well done chorus, LOL
[verse 1 - FormulaMC]
I Ride The Beat On The Tables, Thread The Needle
Want To Disrupt The Rap Game, Like Yoko Did The Beatles
But In An Instant, Shit Shifts And Change Is More Than Sporadic
Like A Crack Addict On The Streets, You Can't Break The Habits
You Can Make A Balance, But Other Shit Will Often Be
Placed In Your Way N Soon To Me, It'll Be A Coffin I See
Cough Then I Bleed, I Give It All On The Mic, No Other Choice
But When I Talk, I'm Mimed, On The Corner With A Guitar But No Voice
Poor, Case Open Hoping For Spare Dollars To Be Thrown In
I Coulda Been Ill, But Past Drug Problems Has Dope Sewn In
Lookin' At Pops, We Both Grown Men, It's Time For Me To Leave The Nest
Time For Me Relieve All The Stress, I Believe This Is The Test
Can I Pull Through ? And Finally See A Brighter Horizon ?
Or Will My Mind Play Tricks On Me N Make The Sun Disguised N
Dressed As The Moon, Not Surprising, Happier Days Have Vanished
Frantic, I Pushed Panic But The Damn Cancer Had Me Satanic
It Was Fuck Everyone, Live For Me, I Thought I'd Survive
But Who Pulled The Plug On Rap's Respirator ? The Music's Not Alive
And By Five, We Had The Four, The Score Hit Three, Down To Two. .
Wogzta N Formula, Tall Standing, Demanding To Teach The Few
You did a great job on here. The word play was nice, you kept my attention the whole time. the flow stayed on, and you didnt lose your focus on the topic. You get my props on this, you have elevated alot from when I first saw you. I loved the allusions in here, and the creativity.
The only problem I had, was in the middle. You had 2 bars that wernt as strong as the others. It wasnt that big of a problem at all, but just try to review your work. Maybe, work on the weaker lines in the bunch. Thats all that was wrong to me... Very Nice Drop...
[chorus]
[interlude - wogzta]
To understand the whole story...
You must go back to the beginning...
I like how this made it even more of a serious deal... That was smart. It wasnt to long, you kept it short and petite...
You could have done with out it, or maybe used something else. Cause this idea is used alot, but we all know it doesnt really matter...
[verse 2 - wogzta]
In the 7th Circle of Emcee Hell, an alliance was formed
A crew lead by two demon kings where defiance was scorned
Through volcanic rhymes and explosive preachin' they gathered minions
And built an army with which they would shatter billions
Of inferior creatures, who believed puppets could kill
Until they stood before The Two, engulfed in an eruption of skill
Their strings were cut and their show was over with no encore
Enemies had no use left, put aside like the over-flown Concorde
Death came so swiftly, the duo became known as the "Instants"
Without moving a limb they could make you weaker than the bone of an infant
But this was Hell, not Heaven and dissention came to the team
They started to fall apart faster than the Nazi Regime
Some of the minions wanted to appeal to the masses
So they began actin' like Angels and shipped of skill in a basket
Heaven opened its doors, and the traitors strayed off course
But there were too many of them to be takin' back by force
So the fools prospered, and began to believe they were dope
The few that remained loyal to the roots were in need of some hope
Creepin' up slow, we're ready to revive the dominance of our crew
And explain the ancient origins of The Two...
You came off strong as fuck in this piece, and you ended it just the same. I liked the story you had. I hate it when people try to be like others and go really deep into something pointless. You told it perfect, you told this as someone would see it if it really happend. The word play was nice, the vocab was nice, and the rhyme scheme was nice. You did a really good job. This was perfect for the subject... Nice Work 2 You as Well.
I only had one problem with this verse. That was bar number 8, it could have been told better. It wasnt to big of a problem, but it almost made me lose my enthusiasm to read more. Other than that, you both did a great job... Nicely Done
[chorus]
- CONCLUSION -
This was an over all very nice drop. I liked the topic, and were you guys took this. You did it just right, there were no dissapointments in this write. I must say you both came far. That is on the real note, im not playing around. Good work, keep it up. Keep the good topics and good writes coming... Im looking forward to seeing somemore collabs from you 2.
^ beautiful feedbackk.... this is what we like to see from everyone... thanks for everything high class!
dis is ill
both had good multis
nice flow
good wordplay
to me I think yall didnt lack anythin
10/10 keep droppin
dis is ill!