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It's Whatever
Niggaz bleed intensively from orifices only new to corpses, change is metamorphic
Death is lead and shit pourin’ grit, grime, and split organs, pain is dead endorphins
Instead of mourn em I rejoice for peace discovered, diseased brothers reach further
Bloods in your mouf you speak murmurs, enough deceased we don’t need murder
Why we keep servin’ while we keep hurtin’ dying deep inside, eternal sleeps certain
Yet we load up the heat, merk em, fuck em, dump em, just close the creased curtain
Behind the vale every man is in hell, you stand for yourself, every man for his health
Every life story crammed on a shelf, scars handed and dealt, we only vandal ourselves
Pull back hammers for shells, the Shells drop, I’m steppin on em like Mario Brothers
Bullets in the heart of another, cartilage ruptured, the residues marked on my chuckers
……..FUCK!…
Now I gotta bleach my skin! stash the nina, I cant afford a throwaway I gotta eat ya dig
sweep the strip, through 4 subdivisions in one evening and I don’t know what the reason is
Maybe were all seeped in sin, from the first bite of the apple to the war Machines were In
Maybe im just to deep ta swim, maybe we wake up to sleep again and never see the end
Maybe I shouldn’t reach for him, maybe God’s sleepin’ in, some shit we’ll never know
Maybe life is a dry desert coamed, meaningless in present tone……
……………………………….....................................I hate it But it’s whatever though
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The flow wuz on point but the lines were stretched- ya used multis like crazy though and i give ya props........But it through this piece off cuz it took away from the actual piece - its nice for a really good rythm but ya over-used it and made it more than what it had to be-- i feel ya could have tried harder on the creativity part instead of the vocab part- cuz i feel ya have vocab down just need to work on imagery and creativity....... i was feeling to a point - but i think ya just need to write this piece over again - cuz the title and topic dont really mesh together - just seems like ya wuz forcing the scheme but it wuz koo man - ya vocab wuz good on this piece.......
Return the favor to my open mic - link is in sig - thanx fam
