Permanent Scar

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Permanent Scar

6's sick spits'll leave you witless
stick your faeces in a puddle of water, you dipshit!
It hits quick, knocks a fuckers skull straight to mindboggled
Come get your spine throttled, 'Still unbeaten' that's my motto
And i got to, leave a mark like a permanent scar
On this rap shit, can you grasp it? The herb that you are
Verbally vicious, telekenetic with a hell of an epic
Methodology, its probably best that you let it
Be, so heavily immersed in performance of rawness
Wouldn't settle for less, rip a verse up like a whore's dress
Regardless, those who sparkless remain in darkness
Searching for a match and tinder to read the parchment
Still dissecting brain organs, stack 'em for the barbeque
I'm heartless dude, causing fatalities just to start anew
This is reincarnation mark-fuck-i-don't-know-what-the-number-is
Just note the skills this is lumbered with, don't act like a dumber bitch

dam, this was dope. so yea

yer i agree this was dope i like the way you stracturised it and everything you could have used more complex words but then again i dont either ha ha

check out ma newest thread i havent rhymed in along time and dis is wha i came up with last night real quick

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=321385

impressed, don't think i've read something like this before that flowed so well if im not mistake'n im sure its a verse cuz i can spit it to a beat and each lines falls in between the time measure of 4/4 which brought that to my assumption you can correct me if im wrong but this was a pretty damn good verse for a song if so props

A solid verse for a vicous track type ish...i found the rythm to be easy and fast...didn't have any major problems though i believe it's your rust which stops you from writing a larger body of work..would like to see you writing more verse again and overall...i didn't find anythinng much lacking i easily read and spitted this which can't be done with every writers work, so props on that and yeah, stay up^.

this was actually quite good for being so short. it was abrupt, simple, and to the point. sounds as if the person speaking is a competitor, rap artist, or a fighter/scrapper ..leaving his permanant scar on humanity so that they understand who he is and that he's a fearless competitor who'll take on any. it was a bravery piece to me, strangley original. i liked it, keep writing man ..


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