So where'd he go?

So where'd he go?

He was a child minder
Old mug, fund finder
living monotonously
He was a pension man
Bold hug, tensions bland
Believing in originality

so where’d he go?

Some say Africa, in the hot sands
Others Saudi or the grand land
with the Grand Canyon in hand
or ol’ England, hot cups & tea
maybe the church, so religiously
How about India, spices & laughs
Or Afghanistan, war struck halved
I heard Kashmir sells Pashmina scarf’s
But isn’t it against them to love the arts
With their rules & stone cold hearts
Off topic Miss. Stone, please calm down
Where he go, great ol’ Johnny BeArown

So where’d he go?

They say he was a freedom fighter
Fighting against the tyrannical ignite
He flew the depth of the purple night
So they say, didn’t he burn in the light
Maybe he was a superhero, maybe not
Sure he was, Ol’ Superman astute to opt
To fight against wrong, he fought a lot
Surely not human, maybe a military robot
Was he on our side, or a Nazi in disguise
Wasn’t he just a sweet old man
………………………………*looks of surprise*
Of course not, he was special *Slight Frown*
So Where he go, great ol’ Johnny BeArown

He was a child minder
Old mug, fund finder
living by necrophilia
He was a pension man
Bold hug, tensions bland
Caught acting in paedophilia

Not all old men are sweet…
Remember…call the police
If you see old people acting strange

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Where did he go?

Up^.

An original concept with some nice imagery to back it up, i think longer bars and a stronger rhymne scheme would've brought this to life more but you had the 2 more important aspects of a topical piece down which made it worth the read. Decent length and solid vocab as well.

Keep on posting.

Yup thanks.

Bang Bang.

forming new writing styles hey?.ha....adding the metre no doubt.also exploring the imagery boundaries......... also good compression of concept here / having a short but sweet effect...... yeah... has a nice assortment of rhymes. switching between a few basic to more complex rhyme arrangements....good work.... on that5 tip,.........
i see you like fucking with the ole english HIStory quite often/...


yeah bang em peados up fsho with some harsh treatment I say.fucking buggers -


n if it aint too much bother check out me new scrolls me ole mucker-

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pz