Fuckin Backstabber

Bein friends with a Backstabber
And I learnt he jus a fack grabber
His only excuse was he was drunk
But since then our friendship sunk
He had no right to get with a girl
She meant loads to me, she was th world
He knew how I felt but he still continued
He apologized but went with her into
The coat closet with her and got closer
She didn’t stop you despite the song I wrote her

Come here you fuckin backstabber
why I oughta, be the bitch homie from the hood
come here you lil backstabber
why i oughta, be the brother that's up to no good

Take a second to stop and think about me
Don’t snoop behind my back fuckin pussy
You lil double crossin behind my back snitchin
Good for nothing but trouble causin, fag bitchin
About me n Amz wen you never had any1 before
So what she was younger I didn’t have to get her
Pissed for anything to happen, she tried n I let her
But I woulda never wrote her a love letter
But you took th girl I wanted to be with
You better run n hide if ya want to live
You fuckin…

Come here you fuckin backstabber
why I oughta, be the bitch homie from the hood
come here you lil backstabber
why i oughta, be the brother that's up to no good

You were the homie I least suspected
To double cross me with th girl I selected
I swear to God I won’t let it happen again
You come near me you get hit in the chin
Then you’ll know to never backstab me again
That’s what happens for goin behind a friend
I used every insult in th dictionary book
But that aint enough so I put your name in th hook
This song is only cause I feel betrayed
And your pick up lines are played
You had to get a slut drunk jus to fuck
Now watch out for your name in the hook

Come here you fuckin backstabber
why I oughta, be the bitch homie from the hood
come here you lil backstabber
why i oughta, be the brother that's up to no good




i gna turn this piece in2 audio jus cus i like it:)

links comin
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post5187144
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...65&postcount=5

yeah sup mayne. nice flow u got here now i see you gone n added some poetic rythm to your shit so yea props on that ish......... rhymes coulkd mos def have been more elevated to a certain level i reckon. coz it got a bit obvious what was comin next ya nah mean.......... flow and delivery eas tite tho f'real. and anger/emotion was there

check this quick spit yeah-

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=311584

this was nice homie...you had some real good flow..not to simple but not very complex...i didnt have a hard time tryna to get with the strutre..but there was alot of grammar errors you should check up on...i was feelin the hooks..even though you shouldnt have hooks for text...but the hook was nice...i could feel the anger and emotion in this...just a very good drop...keep up..

I didn't really enjoy this at all, it was crudely written. But you did show signs of potential, and I think that if you keep writing and elevating, you could become a good writer. Please don't think I'm saying that I didn't like this, just to piss you off. That's as far from the truth as possible, I am merely trying to inspire you to elevate. I want you to prove me wrong, and write a fcking dope peice that will have me shocked. Anyway this is not to my tatse, but it did flow well, and you had a decent rhyme scheme, so props on that. Keep writing dude, PM me for feed any time. Peace.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...81#post5187281
^return the favour please.