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The Choice (New To This)
Life Or Death? The Question most deal with
The Question that makes people insane
A decision which can bring upon pain or bliss
Like inducing toxic through multiple veins
Am i insane? or is it just blunt facts of life
Crosshatched sketchs of suicide on paper
From teens whom inflict injury on self
Praying for thee to be their own savour
Puttin life in the gutter and death on a shelf
Like a prized trophy earned through withdrawl
Made an outsider by decisions of not being known
Hiding all emotions inside..letting them become a ball
Never for them to be shown, only life blown
Ridiculed and outcasted by such mistakes
Because life is a strife which some give up
No price paid for the blood blades take
For living is a decision like liquid in half a cup
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short and sweet....i gotta say i really like this drop..and thanks for the feed on my om...not many flaws in this...flow was nice...had some multies....wording was nice a bit off in some lines..but thats alright...not very creaitve as its a played topic...but you had a very nice strutre and the layout got me into the drop...keep up homie i enjoyed this alot..
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This was good i liked it. it had a particular flow and rythm to it which made ti good and interesting plus the questions showed insight which is good as long as the writer possees the insight. Overall, i think this was a good piece, however not a full piece, i would call this a vers of a higher body...next time try adding another verse but remeber to keep the quality. Stay up and keep writing.
