Nap n' minus the clappin

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..."Kid Falls Asleep"...



KID
tense is the ogre defense that blinds' our movement
to obtain righteous backing from our divine improvement
to appeal to great minds one at a time iam compelled
for one man to understand this irrational hell
this savage land that surrounds an unstable fable
to be voiced as porch monkey and nigger...our label
to distress the cause till no life left can wield the pride
gaining sheer vengeance in strength and numbers forced to ride
weep for the outcome...nothing good will ever derive
praying and begging for repentance till the king has arrive

DEMON
...*laughing*...forget your people...there is no salvation
i've been patient while watching u drown hopes in starvation
suffer...suffer a pain that has been endured and wont change
aim beams while cops beat you lifeless...have you no shame
i stand over you at night...and make struggles here and there
bring evil agenda to your life so its living itself that you fear
be scared because i'll make your brother cut ur throat
toast your brains...maybe even poison your ass so you choke
i'll laugh and laugh as long as blood feels the pure essence of good
i'll wipe out one race at a time...until all burn...torched as you should
...*laughing*...

KID
...where you at God...never tried...but to my knees that i fall
iam stuck between my own race...and the demon who calls
i need to know...am i suppose to live in the hood and die
is there a chance that my niggas wont see me have to cry
i'll stop bangin these hoes...sippin these 40s and burnin'
...burnin isnt what i want...its my afterlife iam concerned in
i cant tell right from wrong...the devils' commin close
i realize it aint the money...its you i need the most
save me now...and i promise i'll give you all the money...fuck
...is there a way out...now God has my ass in a stick up

*Mysterious Voice*
Listen Kid...the work u've done is of the devil without a doubt
and it must be hard hearing the truth from my mouth
the only chance the change and arrange your life acceptable
is to stop all this sin...and being a christian...thats expectable
i read your mind...no all christians dont make it in
the darkness not only holds thugz but the sin of ALL men
going to church isnt a ticket here...neither is claimin my name
...honestly half you chumps always say my name in vein
remember...this is your last chance...mess it up and your gone
...i'll be getting you soon anyway...it wont be long...
*Turns To The Demon*


*Mysterious Voice*
smash this evil presence with the essence of dynamic teaching
...divine annihilation to a greedy spirit...feel my preaching
obliterate the omnious blood red complicated mists...
unhand Kids' soul with mad haste and banish' deep into abyss
...listen you demonic onyx dissappear at speeds reaching sonic
i speak complex and respected...far from your lame phonics
admonish me...and die off into the darkness you've layin
my finger holds place...with words' let your frame be slain
...fear no one...but me...i have put your leader in check
i merked your type before...i swear on myself you'll be next
*Demon Flees'"

..."Kid Wakes Up"...



*Ma Fault...First Open Mic










BETTER LINK ONE
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=306699
BETTER LINK TWO
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=306674

you have to put The Piece then in your 2nd post the 2 links. btw if your trying to get it reopen you had to PM him not make a thread.

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^Edit that into your first post above the links, Links should be all the way at the bottom like this

piece
piece
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Link
Lnik

Thanks for getting better feedback, but it has to be recent feedback. I.e. From the last few days! But Ima let it slide this time. But remember for future reference so I don't have to close your OM's.

- Brix.

Where the he- what the fu- ???

Lmao, with a name like Kid Blitz and the title of this piece, I sure as hell was not expecting anything near as good as this. Don't mind me, but I'm thinking a little investigation into biting should be done, just because it seems alittle two distant, but I dont know. Either way, nice piece. Everything was pretty fluent and catchy. Consistant flow, storyline was tight, the concept was alittle done but I mean, I enjoyed your take on it so it wasn't a big deal. I was pleasantly surprised by this piece, hopefully it was actually your work.

If you could...
'The Central Artery'

nah Myself...i just have practice...o yeah and am an alias...so dont worry bout how fuckin nice i am...i never fucked wit Oms before...but i thought on this name i would...glad u dont believe in me...cuz this was to wake up a few ppl...my feed is detailed as well as my drops...i know decent OMs...and Yours Was Tight but i will drop feed after my next OM...thx for yours...

UPPPPINNN...

This was pretty cool. Kind of like a devil went down to georgia thing but, i guess, the devil went down to Compton, in this case. Still was a pretty cool little concept, of going back and forth using the different voices. The rhymescheme was there throughout, I think the third and fourth verses were my favorites, it seemed to take on a more serious tone and you got some of your thoughts about God across.

Quote:

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Listen Kid...the work u've done is of the devil without a doubt
and it must be hard hearing the truth from my mouth
the only chance the change and arrange your life acceptable
is to stop all this sin...and being a christian...thats expectable
i read your mind...no all christians dont make it in
the darkness not only holds thugz but the sin of ALL men
going to church isnt a ticket here...neither is claimin my name
...honestly half you chumps always say my name in vein
remember...this is your last chance...mess it up and your gone
...i'll be getting you soon anyway...it wont be long...
*Turns To The Demon*

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That's my fav part, the whole of it is pretty damned good, and I agree with a lot of your points on that. Also liked the part about quitting all the drugs, but, I mean, it's not really that stand-alone since I've heard that one too many times. The drugs get us all, man.

Oh, hit me up on my latest OM if you can - it's called, "Whatever. Sheep." and it's on the first page of OM. Thanks.


Stay up,

Engivale

uppppin for feed...

upppppinnn 2 for feed...

uppin for feed, its been awhile since i got feed on this

upppin for feedback...its been a minute but...yeaah :)

uppin this...come on yall need more feed