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Leave Me Where I Lay
Leave Me Where I Lay . . .
By: Nash
The truth is, i'm in a fluently ruthless state & my heads all over
thoughts poppin distraught, i feel like i barely know her
into the eyes of the bestower, i'll be sober soon . . .
i need to bleed my tears, needin' her like the sun needs noon
but it tear's my limbs away, like monsunes on harsher days
& they say today i'll stay safe in a way, but that's just play
it's gay, although i hate that word, i've thrown myself to use it
i look at the ground to see that bruised bitch. i'm a fool, shit ..
. . .the drink slides it right down my throat, the anger that is
it's her fault, that she could no longer stand this . . .
this relationship, the one i ended. one she'd pretended to love
i acted cowardly, but she was distracted ..
and death was what i was thinkin of!
so i held the gun sturdy, my feelings tossing and turning . . .
the bullet WILL be burning, but not in a sense of physical hurting
the myth's so dirty, & today, i feel i've created a bigger legend
the readers have the wrong idea, somethin' aint been mentioned
i'm feeling detentioned, i need this extention, i love her too much
but as i clutch this trigger, bigger thoughts of death becomes a grudge
& such beatings are to be kept a secret, the beating'll be slain
i want you all to leave me where i lay, and DON'T remember my name
yeah, you've found out, i'm held back, worthless, i've seen NOTHING
and to make this pain hurt less, i'll show HER that i'm doin' something
i'm not bluffin' bitch, this is some poetic shit. gonna turn to things bigger
a lonely, and rejected city slicker, & she sentenced my head to the trigger
i dunno i kind've freestyled this a couple months ago, i'm sure i could've juiced it up and fixed problems with it but to hell with it ..read it, hope you like it.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...43#post4836843
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=304169
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yeah, i pretty much hate OM :\ ..
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Lmao it's cool Cry you had some ok imagery nothing special but you are kinda good at the creativity at some point but you made yur concept look a bit played for some reason like it was used before in a sense you had some vocabulary but that only means so much try reading other verses in the OM forum it should get easier as you go on.
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havent read one of your topicals for a while glad i saw this one imgrey was dope had some nice line ill quote one
so i held the gun sturdy, my feelings tossing and turning . . .
the bullet WILL be burning, but not in a sense of physical hurting
example of your imagrey you also had some nice emotion just work on some more inner rhymes and it will flow better because it was a bit choppy okay verse though ive seen you do better
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=305341
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thank you sirs. i'll get around to those tomorrow, i g2g right now. but thanks.
