Flourishing Secrets

Flourishing Secrets

An incentives were given, roughly mentioned accendants
To be murdered is not to die, the discription is different
Ending, submitted decendants, solely permiscuious pawns
Holy intially soldiers, only to live with the wrongs
Holding the piece to the puzzle, blossoming flowering lies
Peace never speaks through the muzzle, rise as the towering dies
Seeps through the cowarding eyes, leak proof in seek for the truth
To find the powering binds, all those who grief for the proof
Then given reasons to do , things of opposing religion
Never no closure when finish, hate every moment your in it
Fates getting colder in minutes, minutes then turn into ours
Hours the souls innoventions, suffering learns to devour
Reigning determines the showers, possibly hang it for last
Always a shame when it pass, honesty, a thing of the past
Making these claims for the clash, as i still look for a purpose
Unreal and crooked on purpose, be damn if i'll be a servant


I Am No Longer In The Marine Corp For My Own Personal Reason
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Lol. I like this piece. The last line made me laugh. Vocabulary showed through on this piece. As well as a little emotion. Your rhyme scheme was good. I few typo's here and there. Flow was iight. Nothing truly special. Felt like you were just speaking out though. I would say to just work on your spelling errors and that small shit and do a few touch-ups here and there and you could be alot better. Good work though. Keep writing.

meh...this was really a quick write i had 4 lines then just kinda went with it and posted it lmao

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Nice, very nice X.Malice, the topic was good, great verse, good vocab, you had a great deal of emotion also. I think you could do alil bit more better on the spelling, your flow wasnt off that much, just here and there, good imagery, nice descriptions. Good job, keep it up X

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