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second thoughts on life
thought i'd drag this up from topical cypher
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i need to take second thoughts on life because, the first ones were incinerated
in a relationship that was degenerated, livin in denial believing it isnt faded
it wasnt the girl i cared for though, it was the son i brought into the world
probably the only thing left to keep me goin, stripped as the events unfurled
but i wasnt about to go out like that, this young fellow shares my last name
somthin that bitch'll never have, doesnt matter now, her ass was past date
damn she was due for the new for old replacement, and i was glad be rid of it
caught the bitch tryna run with my son uh uh.... i wasnt havin a bit of it
back ya shit up before i smack a bitch up, there's one item that wont be leavin
how she stood with a puzzled look on her face, 'surely you dont need reason!
you wanna boycot this like treason, go on go, but your not takin my child
he stay's right here with me you can visit, come back when im not so riled'
then i might take second thoughts on life, and save your ass from devastation
but right now fuckin with me could be, the worst thing you were ever faced with
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This was aight , old story but new style. i liked the flow in parts and your word acted out the character well. However, the main problem was the imagery...it was practically non-existant. That is one part you have to improve on. The main concept/story wsa aight but i didn't get it was the man just promiscuous or was the wman that...who knows...anyway this was an aight read...stay up
Check out, "the case of the missing murderer", thanks:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=302133
