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Feelings inside

When men cry dey dont cry they just cry inside
its because they real feelings what they tryin to hide
cuz dey gotta show strength when its time to hide
and dey gotta show courage when its time to ride
gotta hide they tru feelings that they scared to die
gotta tell they family everythings alright
even if they know it aint its ok to tell a lie
cuz the truth really hurts so remember that
when ya bastard kids ask where the daddy at
some survive with what they got on they backs
they always tryed hard but the crack held'em back
how you gonna feel cofident inside when you alwayz fail
ya inside feelings is what counts not what people think... so prevail
do what you need then do what ya want to do
men keep to they word...but boys they just tryin to be cool
if ya feelings inside is somthing else then what you tryin to be
revert back to ya true self stop frontin...success thats the key

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uppin

this was honestly aight better than most shit i saw but the flow is what you need to improve on to get ya shit to be better. the vocab wasnt bad, sorta basic but you did good with that the topic, you brought out strong and it was tight just gotta work on teh flow some-what at the beginin it wasnt all too good until the end and middle

iight tks for the feed

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even if they know it aint its ok to tell a lie
cuz the truth really hurts so remember that
when ya bastard kids ask where the daddy at
some survive with what they got on they backs

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nice, i fucks w/ you on that .

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do what you need then do what ya want to do
men keep to they word...but boys they just tryin to be cool
if ya feelings inside is somthing else then what you tryin to be
revert back to ya true self stop frontin...success thats the key

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take notes rugrats, i give this 2 thumb's easy. Spoke real on the whole drop, what i like to see .

this was tight i was feeling the flow in some ways but that needs some work as well the whole verse overall was alright you brought with ya own style and you dropped some good bars to the topic

tks yall keep givin feed

hey man i like what your attempting to do with it with the emotional side of it. what you gotta do is try and expand your vocab. like you rhymed hide with hide and ride and die. its just to simple. the middle and end i agree were the best parts of it, i felt that the most. good work tho besides little things i saw.

uppin fer some feed

Yeah this was a good try at tryiong to portray your feelings, many of your word can be associated with imagery and considered to have a 2nd meaning, i quite like how it flowed however next time just add more vocabulary and spend a lil more time re-reading just so you can add even more emotion, good stuff, keep it up

I liked this a lot
When men cry dey dont cry they just cry inside
its because they real feelings what they tryin to hide
cuz dey gotta show strength when its time to hide
and dey gotta show courage when its time to ride
that bit flowed well, the vocab was basic, but it worked

do what you need then do what ya want to do
men keep to they word...but boys they just tryin to be cool
if ya feelings inside is somthing else then what you tryin to be
revert back to ya true self stop frontin...success thats the key
As J.christ said.. this bit was real good, had some aiight vocab and the flow was good on the whole, so keep it up

i diddnt like a lot of the rhymes..you rhymed hide with hide..something i dont like is rhymin da same words ova...flo was decent..could of had a bit more style /flavour to it tho...bit of emotion in it...
not exactly exciting to read but decent...s

tay1pz



new rap verse-
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=271460

Tks yall fer that feed

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