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Cant Stay Away.
Its been a while. Just trying to get back into the swing of things
Inside im locked with this writer's block
which i tried to stop but was denied the op-
portunity to put words together with unity
& get my thoughts in tune like they used to be.
There's no excuse for me not to flow as fluentley..
or to have this verse disperse & grow so beautifully.
Truthfully..
its now a duty for me to motivate & create.
Or more like a chore to explore a story's fate.
I got plenty of that raw in store for your plate..
Im just not sure if your gonna savor the taste.
Will the rating be poor or will the flavor be great?
Will you be waiting for more or will you lable it waste?
As I race to lace each line with food for thought..
Will you wine & dine or just remove what i brought?
I have always sought to paint pictures with words
So I smear all of my ideas with a mixture of verbs
Till whats heard is ultimately merged w/ a vision..
and you imagine the diction appear as you listen.
That is my mission with each composition.
Yet lately, it seems.. to be missing from my daily routine.
So like a fiend...
I need it to be weened back into my blood stream.
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it have been a min. i seen you.......
this drop was okay for a comebacc...i felt the structure, it was really understandable to read, the flow was clear and smooth, the vocab was str8, but not perfect, but you drop good science tho.......6.8/10
WoRD^
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this shit was straight but i think on a comeback
you should come a s hard as possilble
but it was good though...keep it up
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I liked how ya handled ya structure, it didn't felt basic, ya know, just str8...
You've put sum imagery init, your flow went fluent, didn't feel like it was off at some points, I tkink you've delivered a nice piece
stay at it bro'
peace
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Structure was good :2thumb:
vocab can use some work... :angelsmil
comebacks are for weenys lol j/p
I liked the wordplay sounded like a good peice...
I didn't get the whole o- with ending a phrases...but its unique
LATE
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a cool drop
vocab cud improve
struture was nice
flow was sweet
keep@it
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lol.. ok.. anyone ... anyone..??
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yeh man i love reading ur shit evolve i even remember ur battles back in the day lol,
even then u had it, and u havent lost it, i liked the flow of this and the way ur words were put together, structure was good and the topic was cool to man,
keep doin ur thing
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Well this piece was real nice , it had very nice multies ....But the topic wasnt at all deep and that did'nt really atract me to read more. If you find a good topic and put real imargery and emotion into it, you will get far.
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Evolve can you drop some feeds on my OM in my sig............good looks.........UPPin this
WoRD^
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Thanks for the feedback.. anymore?
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this sum good stuff mayne
it had good multis , it flowed well
structure was on point ... N the wordplay was nice
keep droppin cuzz'n ..
Holla at my OM -the real life -
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=3832556
Racism^^
rtf
Inside im locked with this writer's block
which i tried to stop but was denied the op-
portunity to put words together with unity
& get my thoughts in tune like they used to be.
There's no excuse for me not to flow as fluentley..
or to have this verse disperse & grow so beautifully.
Truthfully..
that was dopeasfuck. awesome opener. good vocab and sructure was cool, the flow was def on point, especially at the beggining, and the mulites were evrywhere. this would sound real nice on audio format, try it sometiome, as for the topic, it was pretty cool, but i could tell that yo got the most of it, wel no the most, but pretty much 80-85% of it
rtf and hit up racism