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Suicide Note
Suicide Note
Dear Whoever…..
Alrite I been checkin it for a while….fakin my smile
Always been in denial…cuz homie these cats wild
People laughin at my shows, hatin on me dawg
MAN im killin myself quick…so I don’t suffer long
Always kept my verbal straight, so ya’ll could understand
Im sinkin deep into insanity, like walkin on quick sand
Gun in my hand…homie im jus waitin to pop it
Cuz when I drop a verse……………………..
………………always another Nigga who top it
I damn near lost it, people who hatin on this kid
Whether its for my lyrics, or maybe something I did
My conscience got the best of me, ya’ll tore me down
As I take the silencer off the gun………………….
…………………………So my death speaks loud
Killin myself for you? Or maybe im insecure….
….havent checked myself in days…………….
………………………….im not really sure
For all ya’ll haters who impatient cuz im still alive
Don’t ya’ll forget….you’ll end up dead in time…
Before I go, I gotta give a shout out to my homies
Don’t worry bout me……………………….
……….I’ll have Pac n B.I.G…I wont be lonely..
- _rEEz
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This Was Okey.......U Need To Put More Imaination Into Your Peice(S).........Ur Emotion Wasnt Really There Either.......And The Periodz In Topicalz Might Make The Verse Look Good But Fucks Up The Flow In The Readers Mind......5.5/10
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thanks for the feed.......I know ya hate me tho dawg..haha
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Not bad. It seems as if you incorporate a battle hype to your open mic which kind of sets off the tone. The use of similies should be used more lightly. Wording was a little lack yet you used good tone. Overall it was okay and no im not hating im criticisizing your piece constructively. rating 5/10
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haha thanks man...no ped hates me...cuz he votes against me in every battle..and somehow im still 11-2...BUT thats off topic
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Haha Yea, Peep My OpenMic The Night Of Ecstasy Youll See Some of My Points I Refer To .
LK
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up your vocab. it was too simple. flow wsa still decent, so it was pretty good.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=255653
hit that up
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shit i liked it it would be alot betta if you used multies tho
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UPPIN...ill put up link in a sec
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Yea Yo Good Flow good wordplay nice conecpt even tho alot of these are written to seperate yours from the rest add some emotion and more imagination to the pieces you write overall soild drop--
Leave feed on mines -Thoughts of the Mind- in my siggy
